规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且信息不够具体。建议使用更准确的时间表达，避免模糊的数字，并且注意句子结构的完整性，使回答更自然流畅。

範例: Yes, there are several strict rules at my school. For instance, students are required to keep their hair very short. Also, classes start early, usually before 7:15 a.m. I find some of these rules quite hard to understand.

建議: 回答表达不够连贯，存在语法错误，且句子较长导致理解困难。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明为什么规则会限制自由。

範例: I don't think more rules would benefit students. This is because too many rules can limit our freedom. Moreover, strict punishments make it unfair for students who make mistakes.

建議: 回答中性别代词混用且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议明确使用正确的代词，简化句子结构，并具体说明老师的优点。

範例: Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well. She is my geography teacher and is very strict about the subject. Although she is not strict with us personally, she ensures we understand the material thoroughly.

× For example, the students must cut their hair and stay very short and we should start class before 7/7/15.

✓ For example, the students must cut their hair very short and we should start class before 7:15.

这里“stay very short”用法不当，头发不能“stay very short”，应改为“cut their hair very short”，表示剪得很短。日期“7/7/15”应为时间“7:15”。这是单复数和表达方式的问题。

× I think students wouldn't benefit more from more rules because many rules are actually constraining the people's freedom and they have to follow the rules because unless they will get a high punishment, I think it's unfair.

✓ I think students wouldn't benefit from more rules because many rules actually constrain people's freedom and they have to follow the rules; otherwise, they will get a severe punishment. I think it's unfair.

“wouldn't benefit more from more rules”中“more”重复且用法不当，应去掉一个“more”。“constraining the people's freedom”应改为“constrain people's freedom”，动词形式错误。连接词“because unless”用法错误，应分开或用“otherwise”。“high punishment”应改为“severe punishment”，形容词用法错误。

× Yes, I think my class teacher is very wonderful man because he is a geography teacher, but she's very strict, but sullen because she not strict to us, but strict to his subject. So she very well.

✓ Yes, I think my class teacher is a very wonderful man because he is a geography teacher, but he is very strict, even sullen, because he is not strict with us, but strict with his subject. So he does very well.

句中代词混用，“he”和“she”指代不一致，应统一为“he”。“she not strict”缺少助动词，应为“he is not strict”。“strict to”应为“strict with”。“So she very well”缺少动词，应为“So he does very well”。这些都是代词和句子结构错误。