规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "girls were not allowed to wear beer" which seems incorrect. To improve, focus on clear and accurate vocabulary, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: I'm not currently attending school, but when I was a student, there were several rules regarding appearance. For example, students had to follow specific hairstyle guidelines, and girls were required to keep their hair short. Additionally, there were dress code rules that everyone had to follow.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by adding linking words and more specific supporting details to make your opinion stronger and more coherent. Also, watch for minor grammatical errors such as "good disciplines" which should be "good discipline."

範例: I believe that having some rules to maintain good discipline is beneficial for students; however, if there are too many rules, it might cause students to rebel and resist authority. Therefore, a balance is necessary to ensure a positive learning environment.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, especially the ending "and not to give." To improve, make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples or reasons to support your answer.

範例: Yes, I do. I had a university professor who taught the relevant materials clearly and effectively. Moreover, he encouraged us to think independently by giving us the freedom to develop our own ideas, which made the learning experience more engaging.

× Those kind of rules.

✓ Those kinds of rules.

The phrase 'Those kind of rules' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural to agree with the plural demonstrative 'Those' and the plural noun 'rules'. The correct phrase is 'Those kinds of rules'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Girls needed to have short hairs and girls were not allowed to wear beer.

✓ Girls needed to have short hair and girls were not allowed to wear pier.

The word 'hairs' is incorrect because 'hair' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'wear beer' is likely a typo or mishearing; it should be 'wear pier' or 'wear piercings' if referring to earrings. Assuming 'pier' means 'piercings' or 'piercing'. This correction addresses singular and plural issues and word choice.

× I believe certain rules that manage to keep good disciplines of students are good, but too many rules will make students rebel and fight back.

✓ I believe certain rules that help maintain good discipline among students are good, but too many rules will make students rebel and fight back.

The phrase 'manage to keep good disciplines of students' is incorrect. 'Discipline' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, the preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'among' is appropriate to indicate the group. The verb 'manage to keep' is awkward; 'help maintain' is better. This correction addresses incorrect use of prepositions and pluralization.

× I had this professor in university who was able to teach us the relative materials, but at the same time was able to give us enough freedom to develop our own thoughts and not to give.

✓ I had this professor at university who was able to teach us the relevant materials, but at the same time gave us enough freedom to develop our own thoughts and did not restrict us.

The phrase 'relative materials' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'relevant'. Also, 'in university' is better expressed as 'at university'. The phrase 'and not to give' is incomplete and unclear; it should be replaced with a clearer expression such as 'and did not restrict us'. This correction addresses incorrect use of adjectives and sentence structure.