鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and verb forms, avoid repetition, and keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. However, I don't shop for them very often; I usually buy a new pair about once a month when I have extra money. I prefer to wait for a style I really like rather than buy impulsively.

建議: Answer directly and correct pronoun use and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example of when you tried shoes in person. Keep sentences clear and limited to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I haven't bought shoes online. I prefer trying shoes on in a shop because that way I can check comfort and fit, for example testing a pair by walking around the store to see if they rub or support my feet.

建議: Be realistic and clear. Give a direct estimate and explain how you calculated it using linking words. Avoid unclear phrasing and large unexplained numbers.

範例: I haven't kept exact records, but I would estimate I spend about $200 per year on shoes. I worked this out by adding typical prices—around $50–$100 for casual shoes and $100–$150 for nicer pairs—and buying two or three pairs a year.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons using linking words and one brief example. Use varied vocabulary (fashionable/stylish vs comfortable/supportive) and avoid filler words.

範例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I mainly wear them for style rather than sport. For instance, I choose stylish leather boots for work and social events because they match my outfits, even though they may be less comfortable for long walks.

× Yes, I'm absolutely a big fan of buying a shoes.

✓ Yes, I'm absolutely a big fan of buying shoes.

The noun 'shoes' is plural so the indefinite article 'a' should not be used before it. Remove 'a' to match plural noun usage. Suggestion: use 'a pair of shoes' if you want a singular concept (e.g. 'a big fan of buying a pair of shoes').

× And about the frequency, I will say not really often, but if I have money then I will buy it.

✓ As for frequency, I would say not very often, but if I have money I will buy shoes.

'Will say' is awkward for stating habitual frequency; 'would say' or 'I would say' is more natural. 'Not really often' is nonstandard; use 'not very often'. 'Buy it' incorrectly refers to shoes (plural); use 'buy shoes' or 'buy them'. Also change word order for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I would say' and maintain plural agreement with 'shoes'.

× I mean about each month, yeah.

✓ I mean about once a month, yeah.

'About each month' is an awkward time expression. Use 'once a month' or 'every month' to express frequency. This fits present habitual tense. Suggestion: prefer 'once a month' for natural speech."

× No, I never tried him before because I think a pair of shoes that I have to wear it physically wear it, which allowed me to know if the shoes is comfortable or suitable for me or not.

✓ No, I have never tried buying shoes online because I prefer to try a pair of shoes on in person so I can tell if the shoes are comfortable and suitable for me.

Multiple issues: 'tried him' uses incorrect pronoun (should refer to buying shoes online). Use present perfect 'have never tried' for life experience. 'A pair of shoes that I have to wear it physically wear it' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'try a pair of shoes on in person'. 'Which allowed me' wrong tense and structure; use 'so I can tell'. 'The shoes is' has subject-verb agreement error; 'shoes' are plural so use 'are'. Suggestion: use 'have never tried buying shoes online' and 'try ... on in person' and ensure plural agreement with 'shoes are'.

× Actually, I didn't truly count how much I spent on the shoes, but I maybe I guessed about until now.

✓ Actually, I haven't really kept track of how much I've spent on shoes, but I can guess up to now.

The original mixes past simple with present relevance awkwardly. Use present perfect 'haven't really kept track' and 'I've spent' to indicate past actions with present relevance. 'But I maybe I guessed about until now' is ungrammatical; use 'but I can guess up to now' or 'but I would guess so far'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experience continuing to present and a clear phrase for estimation (e.g. 'I would guess about...').

× Maybe about $10,000.

✓ Maybe about $10,000.

This fragment is acceptable as a spoken estimation. No grammatical change required. It remains a continuation of the previous estimation sentence. Note: if referring to currency, ensure clarity whether local currency or dollars; otherwise the phrase is fine.

× In my opinion, I would choose fashionable shoes because I'm not really a big fan of outdoor activities or exercise, so shoes for me is more like a fashion item.

✓ In my opinion, I would choose fashionable shoes because I'm not really a big fan of outdoor activities or exercise, so shoes for me are more like a fashion item.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'shoes' is plural, so use 'are' instead of 'is'. The rest of the sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject.