鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "the shoes") and fix agreement errors ("a new ones"). Use linking words like "because" and "so" appropriately.

範例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes every few months, mainly when my old pairs are worn out or when I need something suitable for work. I prefer styles that are both comfortable and fashionable because I’m on my feet a lot and I like to look presentable.

建議: Make the timeline and reason clear. Use past simple for completed actions and explain the outcome in one or two precise sentences. Avoid vague feelings like "guilty and not worthy"—say what happened and why you won't repeat it.

範例: Yes, I bought shoes online once. They didn’t fit me, so I returned them and since then I prefer trying shoes on in stores to ensure the right fit.

建議: Give a clear general amount range and explain why price varies with specific examples. Correct grammar ("trainer shoes", "comfortable materials"). Use linking words like "for example" and "because" to connect ideas.

範例: It depends on the type. For trainers I’m willing to pay more—around $80–$150—because I value quality and comfort. For fashionable high heels I usually spend about $100–$300 depending on the brand and style.

建議: State your preference clearly and give concise reasons with correct grammar. Avoid filler words like "Literally". Use linking phrases such as "because" and "also" and provide a brief example of what "comfortable" means to you.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I work on my feet all day. Comfortable yet stylish options, such as cushioned sneakers or low-heeled boots, help me stay comfortable and still look professional.

× Well, I do like buying the shoes because I think a good pair can be comfortable and look nice and fashionable at the same time.

✓ Well, I do like buying shoes because I think a good pair can be comfortable and look nice and fashionable at the same time.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'shoes' is incorrect when speaking in general. Use the zero article for general plural nouns ('buying shoes'). Suggestion: Omit 'the' when referring to shoes in general.

× But I don't buy them very often though, maybe every few months, and I usually get a new ones when my old shoes are worn out or when I need something to work.

✓ But I don't buy them very often, maybe every few months, and I usually get a new pair when my old shoes are worn out or when I need something for work.

Two issues: 'a new ones' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'ones'—use singular 'a new pair' (singular/plural agreement). Also 'to work' is incorrect preposition; use 'for work' to indicate purpose. Suggestion: Use 'a new pair' for one item and 'for work' for purpose.

× Yes I did but I think it's my only one time because I used to buy the shoes online and it's not fit to my feet which is I feel so guilty and not worthy.

✓ Yes, I did, but I think it was only once because I bought shoes online before and they did not fit my feet, which made me feel guilty and that the purchase was not worthwhile.

Multiple tense and agreement issues: 'I did' is fine but 'it's my only one time' is awkward—use past 'it was only once'. 'Used to buy' suggests habitual past; here single event 'bought' is better. 'it's not fit to my feet' uses wrong structure; use 'they did not fit my feet'. 'which is I feel so guilty and not worthy' is ungrammatical; express past reaction: 'which made me feel guilty and that the purchase was not worthwhile.' Suggestion: Use past simple for specific past events and ensure subject/verb agreement and logical clause connections.

× I think it depends on the types of shoes such as when it comes with the trainers shoes I always look for the quality and also the comfortable things.

✓ I think it depends on the types of shoes; for example, when it comes to trainers I always look for quality and comfort.

Several issues: 'depends on the types of shoes' is acceptable but 'when it comes with the trainers shoes' is incorrect—use 'when it comes to trainers'. 'Trainers shoes' is redundant; 'trainers' is sufficient. 'the comfortable things' is awkward; use the noun 'comfort'. Suggestion: Use 'comes to' for the expression and prefer concise nouns like 'quality and comfort.'

× But if it's a fashionable shoes like high heels I think 100 to 300 is OK.

✓ But if it's fashionable shoes like high heels, I think 100 to 300 is OK.

Mix of article and number agreement: 'a fashionable shoes' wrongly uses singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes'—drop 'a' or use singular 'a fashionable shoe' but better to say 'fashionable shoes.' Also add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: Make singular/plural agree and use punctuation to separate clauses.

× Literally I prefer the comfortable shoes because I'm already have to work all day and I think choosing the comfortable one with a trendy is good for your looking and also keep your feet healthy.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I already have to work all day, and I think choosing a comfortable yet trendy pair is good for your appearance and helps keep your feet healthy.

Multiple errors: 'Literally' is unnecessary and misused. 'Prefer the comfortable shoes' should be 'prefer comfortable shoes' for general preference. 'I'm already have to work' mixes 'am' and 'have to'—correct is 'I already have to work' or 'I have to work.' 'Choosing the comfortable one with a trendy' mixes articles and adjective order; use 'a comfortable yet trendy pair.' 'good for your looking' is incorrect; use 'good for your appearance.' 'also keep your feet healthy' needs subject and verb agreement: 'helps keep your feet healthy.' Suggestion: Remove 'literally,' ensure subject-verb constructions, use correct adjective order and nouns ('pair', 'appearance'), and include verbs like 'helps.'