鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and add one or two specific details about frequency using linking words. Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I’ve been collecting them since 2024, and I usually buy a new pair every month because I like trying different styles.

建議: Answer directly, remove fillers, and correct plural and article use. Mention platform or reason with a linking word to expand coherently.

範例: Yes, I have. I have bought several pairs online, mainly from international marketplaces, because they offer more variety and better prices.

建議: Provide a clear, realistic amount and avoid unrelated words. Use linking words to explain reasons and correct grammar (e.g., noun/verb forms, articles). Limit to two to three sentences.

範例: I usually spend about 50,000 (local currency) a month on shoes. Because I’m a shoe lover, I often buy mid-range pairs, which adds up quickly.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, avoid awkward phrasing, and use linking words to give specific reasons. Keep sentences natural and correct pronouns.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they support my feet well and make it easier to walk or run. For example, I choose cushioned sneakers for daily use since they reduce fatigue.

× Yes, I like to buying shoes because I I am a shoe collector from 2024.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because I am a shoe collector since 2024.

The verb pattern after 'like' should be either 'like to + base' or 'like + -ing'. 'Like to buying' mixes both and is incorrect; change to 'like buying'. Also remove the duplicate 'I' and use 'since 2024' to indicate the starting point of being a collector rather than 'from 2024'. Suggestion: Use 'like buying' or 'like to buy' consistently and 'since' for a starting time point.

× Uh, yes, and several time I bought a shoe from an online UMM.

✓ Uh, yes, and several times I bought shoes from an online store.

'Several time' should be plural 'several times'. When speaking generally about purchases, use plural 'shoes' rather than 'a shoe'. 'UMM' seems to be a filler; replace with 'store' for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural forms for repeated events and items: 'several times' and 'shoes'.

× I usually spend the money on sugar, approximately 50K in a month and because I am a because I am a sure lover person, I have a lot of pair of shoes.

✓ I usually spend about 50K a month on shopping, and because I am a shoe lover, I have a lot of pairs of shoes.

Several issues: 'the money on sugar' is incorrect contextually; use 'on shopping' or 'on shoes'. 'Approximately 50K in a month' is better as 'about 50K a month'. The phrase 'a sure lover person' is incorrect; use 'a shoe lover'. 'a lot of pair of shoes' needs plural 'pairs of shoes'. Suggestion: Use 'about' for approximations, correct adjective order and nouns: 'a shoe lover' and 'pairs of shoes'.

× I would like to prepare comfortable shoes because comfortable shoes were very comfortable to her feet.

✓ I would like comfortable shoes because they are very comfortable for my feet.

'Would like to prepare' is incorrect contextually; 'would like' should be followed by a noun phrase, not 'to prepare'. 'Were very comfortable to her feet' mixes past tense and wrong pronoun; use present tense 'are' and correct preposition 'for' and pronoun matching the speaker 'my feet'. Suggestion: Use 'I would like comfortable shoes' and 'comfortable for my feet'.

× Uh, we can walk easily and run easily.

✓ We can walk and run easily.

This sentence is mostly acceptable but redundant with 'easily' repeated. Combine verbs with a single adverb 'easily' for concision. Suggestion: Place adverbs after the verbs group: 'walk and run easily'.

× That's why I prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ That's why I prefer comfortable shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no change is needed. It was included to confirm correctness. Suggestion: None.