图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "go go" and vague phrases like "extra and etc." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, mention the types of books you read and why you prefer that library.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library when I have free time. I usually visit Patigar library because it is the nearest one. There, I enjoy reading various books, including comics and storybooks, which help me relax and learn new things.

建議: Focus on clarity and correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "fashionable fashionate about dealer." Use linking words to organize your answer and be specific about your preferences.

範例: In the library, I usually read books. There are many kinds of books available, but I am especially interested in detective and mystery stories, such as Sherlock Holmes. Although some people prefer storybooks, I enjoy these genres the most.

建議: Try to give a direct answer first, then add details. Avoid vague expressions like "I didn't remember the exact time." Use linking words to make your answer coherent and complete your sentences.

範例: Yes, I went to the library when I was a child, probably around class 6. Since then, I have enjoyed reading many kinds of books, especially comics, which helped me develop a love for reading.

建議: Avoid unnecessary personal information and repetition. Give a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Try to be more confident in your answer.

範例: I am not very familiar with Chinese children, but I believe that children everywhere enjoy reading books. Therefore, I think Chinese kids also often visit libraries in their free time to read and learn.

× Yes, usually when I get free time I hit the library and in library I read lots of books such as comics, story books and extra and etc.

✓ Yes, usually when I get free time I go to the library and in the library I read lots of books such as comics, story books, and extras.

The phrase 'extra and etc.' is incorrect because 'etc.' already implies 'and other things', so 'extra and etc.' is redundant. Also, 'story books' should be plural as 'story books' and 'extras' is more appropriate than 'extra' in this context.

× Moreover, I usually go go to Patigar because it is the nearest library.

✓ Moreover, I usually go to Patigar because it is the nearest library.

The phrase 'go go to' contains a repeated verb 'go'. The correct preposition to use with 'go' when indicating a place is 'to'. So, 'go to Patigar' is correct.

× I usually read books in Liberty.

✓ I usually read books in the library.

'Liberty' is a wrong word here; the correct word is 'library'. Also, 'library' is a singular noun and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'.

× There's lots of kind of books in the library.

✓ There are lots of kinds of books in the library.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is singular, but 'lots of kinds of books' is plural, so 'there are' should be used. Also, 'kind' should be plural as 'kinds' because it refers to multiple types.

× I've usually read such as I.

✓ I usually read books such as...

The phrase 'I've usually read such as I' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Usually' should come before the verb 'read'. Also, 'such as' should be followed by examples, not 'I'.

× I am more fashionable fashionate about dealer and mystery books like such as Sherlock Holmes.

✓ I am more passionate about detective and mystery books like Sherlock Holmes.

'Fashionable fashionate' is incorrect; the correct word is 'passionate'. 'Dealer' is incorrect; the intended word is 'detective'. 'Like such as' is redundant; use either 'like' or 'such as'.

× Some peoples are like story books but I don't found story books into.

✓ Some people like story books but I don't find story books there.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'person' is 'people'. 'Are like' should be 'like' to express preference. 'Don't found' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'don't find'. 'Into' is incorrect here; 'there' is appropriate.

× I didn't remember the exact time where I went to when I went to visit the library, but I think it was the year when I was in class 6.

✓ I don't remember the exact time when I visited the library, but I think it was the year when I was in class 6.

'Didn't remember' is incorrect for expressing a current lack of memory; 'don't remember' is correct. 'Where I went to when I went to visit' is redundant; 'when I visited' is sufficient.

× So yes, I visited library in my childhood and from childhood I used to read books and I like lots of kinds of books of comics and.

✓ So yes, I visited the library in my childhood and since then I have used to read books and I like many kinds of comics and other books.

'Visited library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'From childhood' is better expressed as 'since then'. 'Lots of kinds of books of comics and' is incomplete and awkward; 'many kinds of comics and other books' is clearer.

× Because I am a Bangladeshi human being or I'm a Bangladeshi citizen.

✓ Because I am a Bangladeshi or a Bangladeshi citizen.

'Bangladeshi human being' is redundant and unnatural; 'Bangladeshi' alone suffices. Also, 'or I'm' should be 'or a' to maintain parallel structure.

× So I don't have enough idea about Chinese.

✓ So I don't have enough idea about Chinese people.

'Chinese' alone is an adjective or noun referring to the language or people collectively; here, 'Chinese people' is clearer.

× But I think in the in the world every kids and every student likes to read books and whenever they get free time.

✓ But I think in the world every kid and every student likes to read books whenever they get free time.

'Every' is followed by singular nouns, so 'kids' should be 'kid'. Also, 'in the in the' is a repetition error.

× So I, I, I think Chinese boys or Chinese girls also visit library.

✓ So I think Chinese boys and Chinese girls also visit the library.

Repetition of 'I' is unnecessary. 'Or' should be 'and' to include both boys and girls. 'Visit library' needs the definite article 'the'.