图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using correct verb forms (e.g., 'reading' should be 'read'), avoid redundancy, and structure your answer clearly with linking words. Also, try to keep your answer concise and natural, limiting it to about 4-5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually go to the library once a week because I enjoy reading a variety of books. For example, I like literature books as they help me learn about different cultures and histories. Additionally, since I am an AIT student, I often read technology-related books to enhance my knowledge in that field.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references (e.g., 'I also read UH' is unclear).

範例: Usually, I read technology books in the library because they help me improve my skills for my future job. Moreover, I sometimes read other subjects to broaden my knowledge.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrasing. To improve, use correct tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

範例: I did not often go to the library when I was a child because my parents, who were not very educated, did not take me there. In fact, I first visited the library in ninth grade, and it was a wonderful experience.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete thoughts. To improve, give a direct answer with clear reasoning and avoid filler words. Use linking words to explain your opinion logically and provide specific details.

範例: Yes, I believe Chinese children often go to the library because education is highly valued in China. Many children are encouraged to read and study from a young age, which helps them become very smart and knowledgeable.

× I love to reading different varieties of books.

✓ I love reading different varieties of books.

The verb 'love' is followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing) when expressing enjoyment of an activity. 'Love to reading' is incorrect; it should be 'love reading'. This is a common collocation in English.

× I love to read literature books by which I can get a wide range of knowledge about other cultures and other histories.

✓ I love to read literature books through which I can get a wide range of knowledge about other cultures and histories.

The relative pronoun 'by which' is incorrectly used here. 'Through which' is more appropriate to indicate the means by which knowledge is gained. Also, 'other histories' is better as just 'histories' or 'history' without 'other' since 'cultures' and 'histories' are parallel.

× And moreover, I also like to books which is related to technology because I'm AIT student so that's why it enhanced my knowledge day by.

✓ Moreover, I also like books which are related to technology because I'm an AIT student, so that's why it enhances my knowledge day by day.

'Like to books' is incorrect; it should be 'like books'. The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'books' (plural), so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Enhanced' should be present tense 'enhances' to match the ongoing action. 'Day by' is incomplete; the correct phrase is 'day by day'. Also, 'an AIT student' requires the article 'an' before the vowel sound.

× In the library, usually I read technology books by which it will be helpful in my workplace and I'm a student of IT technician, so that's why I like this book.

✓ Usually, in the library, I read technology books which will be helpful in my workplace, and I'm a student of IT technician, so that's why I like these books.

The adverb 'usually' is better placed at the beginning of the sentence for natural flow. 'By which it will be helpful' is incorrect; 'which will be helpful' is correct. 'This book' should be plural 'these books' to match 'technology books'. Also, 'student of IT technician' is awkward; it should be 'student of IT technician program' or 'an IT technician student' but left as is for minimal correction.

× Moreover, I also read UH.

✓ Moreover, I also read UH.

The sentence is incomplete or unclear due to 'UH' which seems like a hesitation or incomplete word. No grammatical correction can be made without clarification.

× I don't think so. When I was a kid, I ever went to library, but because at that time it, it was the responsibility of parents and my parents are not that much educated, so they never went with me to the library.

✓ I don't think so. When I was a kid, I rarely went to the library because at that time it was the responsibility of the parents, and my parents were not very educated, so they never went with me to the library.

'I ever went' is incorrect; 'I rarely went' or 'I seldom went' is appropriate for past frequency. 'Went to library' needs the article 'the' before 'library'. 'It, it was' has a repeated word; one 'it' should be removed. 'Parents' needs the definite article 'the' as 'the parents'. 'My parents are not that much educated' should be past tense 'were not very educated' to match the past time frame.

× Uh, I just went to the library when I was in my 9th standard for the first time.

✓ I first went to the library when I was in my 9th standard.

'Just went' is acceptable but 'first went' is clearer for indicating the first time. 'When I was in my 9th standard' is acceptable but can be simplified. The sentence is acceptable but can be improved for clarity and conciseness.

× Yes, I think so Chinese uh, kids often went to library because they are the con uh, kids of Chinese countries are very small, uh, smart they.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the children in China are very young and smart.

'Kids often went' should be present tense 'kids often go' to match the habitual action. 'Went to library' needs the article 'the'. The phrase 'they are the con uh, kids of Chinese countries are very small, uh, smart they' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to a clearer sentence. 'Kids' and 'children' are used appropriately. The sentence is restructured for clarity.