图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'focus on more on than before'와 같은 표현은 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 또한, 문장이 길고 중복된 표현이 있어 간결하게 다듬을 필요가 있습니다. 좀 더 명확하고 자연스러운 문장 구조를 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library when I need to study hard, especially before finals or midterm exams. I find that the quiet environment there helps me concentrate better.

建議: 문법 오류와 부자연스러운 표현이 많습니다. 'doing homework' 대신 'do homework'를 사용하고, 'It provides me to concentrate much better at home and.'는 의미가 불분명합니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 이어가세요.

範例: I usually read books, study, or do homework in the library. Because it is quiet, I can concentrate much better than I do at home.

建議: 답변이 다소 장황하고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'many kids think same way like me' 대신 'many kids think the same way as I did'와 같이 자연스럽게 표현하세요. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 정리하고, 이유를 명확히 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Actually, I didn't like going to the library when I was a kid because, like many other children, I didn't enjoy studying or doing homework. However, now I enjoy visiting libraries.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 많이 틀리고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 'Actually I didn't'는 질문에 맞지 않는 답변이며, 문장이 중복되고 혼란스럽습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 명확하고 간결한 문장으로 수정하세요.

範例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Korea, many children often go to the library because their parents want them to study hard and have access to good learning resources.

× I usually go to the library when I need to study hard or focus on more on than before, such as finer or midterm exams.

✓ I usually go to the library when I need to study hard or focus more than before, such as for final or midterm exams.

The phrase 'focus on more on than before' is incorrect due to redundant prepositions. The correct phrase is 'focus more than before'. Also, 'finer' is likely a typo for 'final'. The preposition 'for' is needed before 'final or midterm exams' to indicate purpose.

× And I think the library provides a quiet environment to more focus on.

✓ And I think the library provides a quiet environment to focus more.

The phrase 'to more focus on' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to focus more'. The preposition 'on' is unnecessary here and should be removed.

× I usually read books or study or doing homework.

✓ I usually read books, study, or do homework.

The sentence mixes verb forms incorrectly. 'Doing' should be changed to 'do' to maintain parallel structure with 'read' and 'study'. Also, commas improve clarity in listing activities.

× It provides me to concentrate much better at home and.

✓ It helps me concentrate much better than at home.

The phrase 'provides me to concentrate' is incorrect. The verb 'help' is appropriate here. Also, 'at home and' is incomplete; adding 'than at home' clarifies the comparison.

× The Quiet Place makes me to do better some.

✓ The quiet place helps me do better.

The phrase 'makes me to do better some' is ungrammatical. 'Makes me do better' or 'helps me do better' is correct. 'Some' is unnecessary and unclear here.

× Actually I didn't like to go to the library because you know, many kids think same way like me because they didn't like to study hard and do their homework.

✓ Actually, I didn't like going to the library because, you know, many kids thought the same way as me since they didn't like to study hard or do their homework.

The verb tense should be consistent in past tense. 'Think' should be 'thought', and 'like' should be 'as'. Also, 'like me' should be 'as me' for comparison. 'Like to go' is better as 'going' after 'didn't like'.

× But nowadays I like to go to the libraries.

✓ But nowadays, I like to go to the library.

'Libraries' is plural, but generally 'the library' is used to refer to the concept or a specific place. Unless multiple libraries are meant, singular is preferred here.

× Actually I didn't.

✓ Actually, I don't.

The question is about present habits ('Do Chinese kids often go to the library?'), so the answer should be in present tense 'I don't' instead of past tense 'I didn't'.

× I don't know about what Chinese kid to do, but in Korea many kids often go to the library because they their parents wants to go to the library because they wanted to their kids to improve their learning resources or study hard.

✓ I don't know what Chinese kids do, but in Korea many kids often go to the library because their parents want them to go to the library to improve their learning resources or study hard.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and verb agreement errors. 'Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids'. 'They their parents wants' is incorrect; it should be 'their parents want'. 'They wanted to their kids' is incorrect; it should be 'want them to'. Also, 'to improve their learning resources' is better than 'wanted to their kids to improve'.