图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh các câu ngắt quãng và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library at my school because it is a quiet place where I can find many books to read. Moreover, I like to relax there when I feel stressed after studying.

建議: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để kết nối các ý. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn để mô tả hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

範例: In my school library, there are many computers, so I usually use them to search for information on Google or Facebook. Besides that, I also enjoy reading books there.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, cũng như cách dùng thì cho phù hợp. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Hãy mô tả chi tiết hơn về hoạt động bạn làm ở thư viện khi còn nhỏ.

範例: When I was a kid, I often went to the library in the city center to borrow books and draw pictures. I enjoyed these activities very much and liked sharing my drawings with my parents at home.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp lý do cụ thể và chính xác hơn để trả lời câu hỏi.

範例: I think Chinese children often go to the library because their education system is more demanding than in Vietnam. Therefore, they study hard from a young age to get into good universities.

× Yeah, I often go to the library in my school. Because in there I can find some. Get books to read or have some time to relax when I was stressed. So I think go to library is good to you.

✓ Yeah, I often go to the library in my school because there I can find some books to read or have some time to relax when I am stressed. So I think going to the library is good for you.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper connection. 'Because in there I can find some.' is incomplete and should be connected to the previous sentence. 'Get books' is incorrect; it should be 'find some books'. 'When I was stressed' should be 'when I am stressed' to match the present tense context. 'Go to library is good to you' is ungrammatical; it should be 'going to the library is good for you'. Suggestions: combine sentences properly, use correct verb forms, and prepositions.

× In my school library half the computers, so I usually find some information from Google or search some things on the Facebook and I usually read some books in the library.

✓ In my school library, there are half the computers, so I usually find some information on Google or search for some things on Facebook, and I usually read some books in the library.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'library' to indicate existence (There be issue). 'Find some information from Google' should be 'find some information on Google' because 'on' is the correct preposition for websites. 'Search some things on the Facebook' should be 'search for some things on Facebook' because 'search for' is the correct verb-preposition combination and 'Facebook' does not need 'the'. Suggestions: add missing verbs, use correct prepositions, and remove unnecessary articles.

× When I was a kid, I went to the library in the center of my city to find some books or drawing some pictures to share with my father or mother at home. I like that activities and I enjoy it every day.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library in the center of my city to find some books or draw some pictures to share with my father or mother at home. I liked those activities and enjoyed them every day.

'Drawing some pictures' should be 'draw some pictures' to maintain parallel verb forms after 'to'. 'I like that activities' is incorrect; 'activities' is plural, so it should be 'I liked those activities'. 'I enjoy it every day' should be past tense 'enjoyed them every day' to match the past context. Suggestions: use correct verb forms, match tense consistently, and use correct pronouns for plural nouns.

× I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the Chinese kids education are harder than Vietnam education. So I think the Chinese kids study in there when they were young to have a good University School to study and.

✓ I think Chinese kids often go to the library because Chinese kids' education is harder than Vietnamese education. So I think Chinese kids study there when they are young to get into a good university.

'The Chinese kids education are' is incorrect; it should be 'Chinese kids' education is' because 'education' is singular and possessive form is needed. 'Vietnam education' should be 'Vietnamese education' to use the correct adjective form. 'Study in there' should be 'study there' because 'in' is unnecessary. 'When they were young' should be 'when they are young' to express a general truth. 'To have a good University School to study and' is incomplete and awkward; better phrased as 'to get into a good university'. Suggestions: correct possessive forms, adjective forms, prepositions, tense consistency, and sentence completion.