图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, use articles correctly ('the library') and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

範例: Yes, I go to the library occasionally because I am preparing for my ALS exam, which will probably be held next year. I use the library materials to help make my preparation smoother.

建議: Improve coherence by using linking words and clarify your ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'materials that are akin to police' and be more specific.

範例: Currently, I am working on a research project about BNCC cadets and their efficiency in joining the Bangladesh police. Therefore, I research materials related to police training and duties.

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and use linking words properly. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and check grammar, such as capitalizing 'for' in the middle of a sentence.

範例: Honestly, I didn't have the opportunity to go to a library as a child because there was no library near my school. Additionally, I came from a remote village where libraries were not common.

建議: Avoid vague or unsupported opinions. Instead, express uncertainty clearly and use better vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, avoid repeating words like 'greater'.

範例: I am not sure about Chinese children's library habits since I live in Bangladesh. However, I believe they might have more access to libraries because education is highly valued in China.

× Oh sure, I go to library occasionally because I am preparing my ALS exam and it will be held on next year probably.

✓ Oh sure, I go to the library occasionally because I am preparing for my ALS exam and it will probably be held next year.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'preparing for' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'On next year' is incorrect; 'next year' does not need 'on'. The adverb 'probably' should be placed before the verb 'be held' for correct word order.

× So yes, I am trying to make my journey even smoother by utilizing the materials available in library.

✓ So yes, I am trying to make my journey even smoother by utilizing the materials available in the library.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× I am preparing my ALS exam and it will be held on next year probably.

✓ I am preparing for my ALS exam and it will probably be held next year.

'Prepare' is followed by the preposition 'for' when referring to exams. Also, 'on' is not used with 'next year'; 'next year' stands alone as a time expression.

× I am researching materials that are akin to police.

✓ I am researching materials that are related to the police.

'Akin to' is not commonly used in this context. 'Related to' is the correct phrase to express connection or relevance. Also, 'the police' is a collective noun and requires the definite article 'the'.

× Honestly, I didn't have that opportunity because when I was in school there was no library nearby and again I was from a remote village so the concept of library wasn't popular there and For these reasons I was not able to.

✓ Honestly, I didn't have that opportunity because when I was in school there was no library nearby and I was from a remote village, so the concept of a library wasn't popular there. For these reasons, I was not able to go.

The sentence was incomplete and lacked clarity. Added 'a' before 'library' as it refers to any library in general. Also, the sentence was split for clarity and the missing verb 'to go' was added at the end to complete the thought.

× the concept of library wasn't popular there

✓ the concept of a library wasn't popular there

'Library' here is a countable noun and refers to any library in general, so the indefinite article 'a' is needed.

× But I do believe they have a greater exposure to library greater than Bangladesh obviously because they are so much educated and skilled.

✓ But I do believe they have greater exposure to libraries than Bangladesh, obviously, because they are much more educated and skilled.

'Exposure to library' is incorrect; 'exposure to libraries' (plural) is correct. Also, 'greater than Bangladesh' should be 'than Bangladesh' without 'greater' repeated. 'So much educated' is incorrect; 'much more educated' is the correct comparative form.

× But I do believe they have a greater exposure to library greater than Bangladesh obviously because they are so much educated and skilled.

✓ But I do believe they have greater exposure to libraries than Bangladesh, obviously, because they are much more educated and skilled.

'Library' should be plural 'libraries' because exposure is generally to multiple libraries. Also, 'a greater exposure' can be simplified to 'greater exposure' for naturalness.