图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but it has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library in my free time because it is a calm and quiet place where I can concentrate on reading new books and exploring different subjects.

建議: Your answer repeats the same ideas and lacks coherence. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition.

範例: In the library, I usually read books and study different subjects because the quiet environment helps me focus better.

建議: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use past tense correctly and clarify your ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases and try to give more specific details.

範例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the library with my mother because she loved reading and exploring new books. We went there together whenever she was free.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Avoid vague phrases like 'mobile related something'.

範例: No, I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they rely more on technology. Nowadays, they can easily read books online at home using their mobile devices.

× I often go to the library when I am free or in my free time I like to go library because library is a very calm and quiet place.

✓ I often go to the library when I am free or in my free time I like to go to the library because the library is a very calm and quiet place.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' when referring to a specific place. Missing 'the' before 'library' is incorrect. Also, 'go library' should be 'go to the library' because 'go' is followed by 'to' when indicating a place.

× Here we can concentrate our mind for reading new books and exploring other sites.

✓ Here we can concentrate our minds on reading new books and exploring other subjects.

The phrase 'concentrate our mind' is incorrect; it should be 'concentrate our minds' because 'mind' is countable and plural is appropriate here. Also, 'for reading' should be 'on reading' as 'concentrate on' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Exploring other sites' is likely intended as 'subjects' or 'topics' in a library context.

× I usually do in the library that is reading books and exploring other subjects and I can concentrate on library because library is very calm and quiet place.

✓ What I usually do in the library is read books and explore other subjects, and I can concentrate in the library because it is a very calm and quiet place.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and missing articles. 'I usually do in the library that is...' is awkward; it should be 'What I usually do in the library is...'. Also, 'concentrate on library' should be 'concentrate in the library' and 'library is very calm and quiet place' needs 'a' before 'very calm and quiet place'.

× There we can concentrate our mind and we can focus our subjects or books.

✓ There we can concentrate our minds and focus on our subjects or books.

Again, 'concentrate our mind' should be 'concentrate our minds'. Also, 'focus our subjects or books' is incorrect; it should be 'focus on our subjects or books' because 'focus' requires the preposition 'on'.

× Yes, when I was a kid I usually go to the library with my mother because my mother is very reading and exploring person.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I usually went to the library with my mother because my mother is a very reading and exploring person.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'is very reading and exploring person' is awkward; it should be 'is a person who likes reading and exploring' or 'is very fond of reading and exploring'.

× When he was free just go for the library with me and that how I go to the library when I was a kid.

✓ When she was free, she just went to the library with me and that is how I went to the library when I was a kid.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect if referring to 'my mother'; it should be 'she'. Also, 'just go for the library' is incorrect; it should be 'just went to the library'. The sentence also needs proper tense consistency and structure.

× No, I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they're very modern and they're growing up in this generation, which generation is dependent on technology and mobile related something they can usually they can easily read the books in home in online.

✓ No, I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they are very modern and are growing up in a generation that depends on technology and mobile devices, so they can usually read books easily at home online.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'Which generation is dependent' should be 'a generation that depends'. 'Mobile related something' is unclear and corrected to 'mobile devices'. Also, 'in home in online' should be 'at home online'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.