图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of listing actions separately, combine them logically and correct verb tenses.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because it's my favorite place to relax. Every weekend, I grab a coffee, put on my headphones with some music, and pick up a psychology book to read. I usually spend about three to four hours there, which helps me unwind and learn at the same time.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity by using proper linking words and clearer vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like 'non official books' and express your ideas more precisely.

範例: In the library, I usually start by reading non-fiction books such as biographies, science, and history. After that, I write down some ideas inspired by what I've read. Then, I switch to fiction books, which I really enjoy because they captivate my imagination.

建議: Complete your sentences and avoid leaving thoughts unfinished. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your experience.

範例: I didn't go to the library as a child, but I had a personal library at home. My aunt bought me books from France in French, Arabic, and English. She was the one who introduced me to reading and encouraged my love for books.

建議: Make your answer more fluent by reducing repetition and using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary instead of informal expressions like 'big fashion'.

範例: Yes, many Chinese parents now make it a habit to take their children to the library every weekend. When I visit, I often see kids reading, playing, and spending time with their parents. This shows that Chinese parents place great importance on encouraging their children to read regularly.

× Every weekend I got coffee and put on my headphones and prepare some music and I go straight to the library, pick up one of my favorite books about psychology and start reading.

✓ Every weekend I get coffee, put on my headphones, prepare some music, and go straight to the library, pick up one of my favorite books about psychology, and start reading.

The sentence describes a habitual action in the present, so the verbs should be in the present tense, not past tense. 'Got' should be 'get', 'prepare' should be parallel with other verbs, and 'go' is correct in present tense. This maintains consistency and clarity.

× Actually, I always come back up.

✓ Actually, I always come back.

The phrase 'come back up' is incorrect in this context. The correct phrase is 'come back'. Also, 'always' indicates habitual present action, so present tense 'come' is appropriate.

× I usually spend my time between books so I start with a non official books usually like biography and science books, history books I read them and then I write on some ideas.

✓ I usually spend my time among books, so I start with unofficial books, usually biographies, science books, and history books. I read them and then write down some ideas.

'Non official' should be 'unofficial' as one word adjective. 'Between books' is better expressed as 'among books' when referring to multiple items. 'Biography' should be plural 'biographies' to match the plural 'books'. 'Write on some ideas' is better as 'write down some ideas' for clarity.

× Then I switch to fictional books where I will be like wow I love this book.

✓ Then I switch to fiction books where I think, 'Wow, I love this book.'

'Fictional books' is better expressed as 'fiction books'. The phrase 'I will be like' is informal and awkward; 'I think' or 'I say' is clearer. Also, direct speech should be properly punctuated.

× I didn't go to the library, but I had my own library in my house.

✓ I didn't go to the library, but I had my own library at home.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'in my house' is better expressed as 'at home' for naturalness. The past tense 'didn't go' and 'had' are appropriate here.

× Those books usually were in French language and Arabic language and some English books.

✓ Those books were usually in French, Arabic, and English.

'In French language and Arabic language' is redundant; simply 'in French and Arabic' is correct. Also, 'some English books' should be parallel with the others, so 'English' is sufficient.

× She was the person that introduced me to reading, and she used to.

✓ She was the person who introduced me to reading, and she used to do that often.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and she used to.' It needs completion for clarity. Also, 'person who' is more appropriate than 'person that' when referring to people.

× Yes, I would say it's a big fashion right now for the Chinese parents to take their children to the library every weekend.

✓ Yes, I would say it's very fashionable right now for Chinese parents to take their children to the library every weekend.

'A big fashion' is incorrect; 'very fashionable' or 'a big trend' is better. Also, 'the Chinese parents' is better as 'Chinese parents' without 'the' for generalization.

× And I think that Chinese parents, they really emphasize on their children going to the library every weekend.

✓ And I think that Chinese parents really emphasize their children going to the library every weekend.

The verb 'emphasize' does not require the preposition 'on'. Removing 'on' makes the sentence grammatically correct.