图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar errors such as 'a busy schedule' and 'I often visited the library'.

範例: No, I don't go to the library very often these days because I am working full time, which leaves me with a busy schedule. However, when I was attending college, I often visited the library.

建議: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, be more specific and concise when listing your interests, and correct awkward phrasing like 'the books are related to role models'.

範例: I think the library is a place to explore many subjects. For me, I especially enjoy reading newspapers, articles, and books related to role models, cooking, and fictional stories.

建議: Eliminate filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for naturalness. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the activities you enjoyed.

範例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often visited the library because our school provided free access, and our teachers encouraged us to join library activities. It was a great time spent with friends and teachers, reading storybooks and comics.

建議: Improve sentence flow by using linking words and correct minor grammar issues such as 'go to the library'. Also, provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I strongly believe that Chinese children often go to the library because education is highly valued in Chinese culture. For example, whenever I visit the library, I see many Chinese students studying there.

× No, I don't go to library very often these days because I'm working full time now, which leaves me very, uh, busy schedule.

✓ No, I don't go to the library very often these days because I'm working full time now, which leaves me with a very, uh, busy schedule.

The noun 'library' is a singular, countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'busy schedule' needs the article 'a' and the preposition 'with' to correctly express possession of the schedule.

× However I was when I was attending my college, I I often visit library at that time.

✓ However, when I was attending my college, I often visited the library at that time.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action happened in the past, 'visit' should be in the past tense 'visited'. Also, 'the library' requires the definite article. The phrase 'I was when I was attending' is awkward and corrected to 'when I was attending'.

× I I often visit library at that time.

✓ I often visited the library at that time.

The noun 'library' is a singular, countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'visit' should be in past tense 'visited' to match the time frame.

× I especially like to read newspapers, articles or the books are related to role models, cooking, cooking related books and fictional story books.

✓ I especially like to read newspapers, articles, or books related to role models, cooking, cooking-related books, and fictional story books.

The phrase 'the books are related to' is incorrect; it should be 'books related to' without 'the' and 'are'. Also, 'cooking related books' should be hyphenated as 'cooking-related books' to correctly form a compound adjective.

× Yes. When I was a kid, I often visited the library because our school provided a free access and our teacher used to, uh, used to encourage us for joining library activities.

✓ Yes. When I was a kid, I often visited the library because our school provided free access and our teacher used to encourage us to join library activities.

The phrase 'a free access' is incorrect because 'access' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Also, 'used to encourage us for joining' is incorrect; the correct form is 'used to encourage us to join'.

× Whenever I visit the library, I have seen many Chinese students studying over there.

✓ Whenever I visit the library, I see many Chinese students studying there.

The phrase 'have seen' is present perfect, which is not appropriate with 'whenever' indicating habitual action; simple present 'see' is correct. Also, 'over there' is informal and unnecessary; 'there' suffices.