图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library to borrow storybooks. I usually keep them for about a month because I use them to improve my speaking skills and grammar. This helps me learn how to form sentences correctly.

建議: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use a wider range of vocabulary relevant to the context.

範例: I usually go to the library to get reference notes for my studies. Besides that, I like to read magazines and novels because the library offers a wide variety of magazines that are not easily available outside.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: No, I did not go to public libraries when I was a kid. I only used the school library because I did not know how to use other libraries. Also, I used to just look at pictures in books without reading much.

建議: Your answer is off-topic and lacks clarity. Try to answer the question directly, then add relevant information with clear linking words. Avoid repeating words and be specific in your statements.

範例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but from what I know, many Indian kids do not often go to the library. However, some do visit libraries to study or read books.

× Most of the most of the time, umm, my tips are good, like story books and uh, I will return it back after one month because I'm study that storybook for uh, improve my speaking knowledge and improve my grammatical mistakes and how to form the sentence.

✓ Most of the time, umm, my tips are good, like story books and uh, I will return them after one month because I'm studying those storybooks to improve my speaking skills, correct my grammatical mistakes, and learn how to form sentences.

The phrase 'Most of the most of the time' is redundant; it should be 'Most of the time'. 'Story books' should be 'storybooks' as one word or 'story books' as plural. 'I will return it back' is incorrect because 'return' already implies giving back; 'back' is redundant. Also, 'I'm study' should be 'I'm studying' to use the correct present continuous tense. 'That storybook' should be plural 'those storybooks' to match 'story books'. The phrase 'improve my speaking knowledge' is better as 'improve my speaking skills'. The sentence structure is corrected to improve clarity and grammar.

× I'm study that storybook for uh, improve my speaking knowledge and improve my grammatical mistakes and how to form the sentence.

✓ I'm studying those storybooks to improve my speaking skills, correct my grammatical mistakes, and learn how to form sentences.

The verb 'study' needs to be in the present participle form 'studying' after 'I'm' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'improve my grammatical mistakes' is incorrect; one cannot improve mistakes, but can correct them. The phrase 'how to form the sentence' is better expressed as 'learn how to form sentences' for clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, we used to go to library because of getting some reference notes.

✓ Yeah, we used to go to the library to get some reference notes.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Also, 'because of getting' is awkward; 'to get' is more appropriate to express purpose.

× But while I'm sitting in library, I usually read magazine or any novels and that's the magazine is very, they have a multi choice of magazine.

✓ But while I'm sitting in the library, I usually read magazines or novels, and the magazines have a wide variety to choose from.

'In library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Read magazine or any novels' should be plural 'magazines or novels' to match the context. The phrase 'that's the magazine is very, they have a multi choice of magazine' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'the magazines have a wide variety to choose from' for clarity and correctness.

× Uh, we can't able to offer to buy a magazine outside.

✓ Uh, we are not able to buy magazines outside.

The phrase 'can't able to' is incorrect because 'can' and 'able to' both express ability; only one should be used. The correct form is 'are not able to'. Also, 'offer to buy' is incorrect; it should be 'buy' directly.

× No, I don't go to library. I used only school library.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library. I only used the school library.

The question is about past habits, so the past tense 'didn't go' is appropriate instead of 'don't go'. 'Used only school library' is missing the definite article 'the' and the word order is corrected to 'only used the school library'.

× Only outside of the school I don't go to a library.

✓ Outside of school, I didn't go to any library.

The phrase 'Only outside of the school' is awkward; 'Outside of school' is more natural. Also, 'I don't go to a library' should be in past tense 'I didn't go to any library' to match the context. 'Any' is used instead of 'a' because it refers to any library in general.

× Why? I'm a kid in that age. I don't know about library and how to use it.

✓ Because I was a kid at that age, I didn't know about libraries or how to use them.

'I'm a kid in that age' should be past tense 'I was a kid at that age'. 'I don't know about library' should be plural 'libraries' and 'how to use it' should be 'how to use them' to agree with plural 'libraries'.

× Also just simply going library and get some novel book and open it and just watching the pictures only not not.

✓ Also, I just simply went to the library, got some novels, opened them, and just looked at the pictures only.

'Going library' needs the preposition 'to' as 'going to the library'. The verbs are corrected to past tense to match the context. 'Novel book' is better as 'novels' plural. 'Watching the pictures' is corrected to 'looked at the pictures' for proper verb usage.

× My origin is India. I don't know all about the Chinese kids and all.

✓ I am originally from India. I don't know much about Chinese kids and so on.

'My origin is India' is awkward; 'I am originally from India' is more natural. 'I don't know all about the Chinese kids and all' is informal and unclear; 'I don't know much about Chinese kids and so on' is clearer.

× Most of the Indian kids are not not going to library.

✓ Most Indian kids do not go to the library.

Double negative 'not not' is incorrect; it should be 'do not'. 'Going to library' needs the definite article 'the' as 'going to the library'. The sentence is corrected to simple present tense to express habitual action.