图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda agak bertele-tele dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu seperti "I love, I love" dan "just like" yang terlalu sering digunakan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke inti, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dengan kalimat topik dan detail pendukung yang jelas.

範例: Yes, I often go to the university library because it is large and quiet. I enjoy reading there and prefer borrowing books instead of buying them, as it is more economical for me as a student.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada beberapa kalimat yang tidak koheren serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat seperti "doing tags on" dan "pretending that". Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur, serta gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide-ide Anda.

範例: Usually, I spend time reading quietly in the library. I also enjoy reflecting by myself and observing other students who are preparing for their exams, which motivates me to study harder.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur dengan kalimat topik dan detail pendukung yang relevan. Hindari penggunaan kata pengisi seperti "just like" yang berlebihan.

範例: When I was a child, I did not visit the library often. However, my father often took me to large bookstores in Indonesia, which I enjoyed because I could spend quality time with him.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat banyak kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat seperti "the only kids that I sing studying". Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kalimat yang jelas serta relevan dengan pertanyaan.

範例: Chinese children often have many subjects to study, so they spend a lot of time in the library. Social media also shows that many Chinese students are very dedicated to their studies.

× Yes, I often go to the to the library at especially in my university.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library, especially at my university.

The phrase 'at especially in my university' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate location is 'at' and 'especially' should come before it. The phrase should be 'especially at my university' to be grammatically correct.

× They have like a big library that I love to eat, I love to read, I love, I love, just like spending a long time there.

✓ They have a big library that I love to visit, I love to read, I just love spending a long time there.

The phrase 'I love to eat' is likely a misstatement and does not fit the context. Also, the repetition 'I love, I love' is redundant. The pronoun usage is confusing and should be clarified to express the intended meaning clearly.

× And also just like, rather than buying some books in the bookstore, I prefer to just like borrow it in the library since it was cheaper and I was just like the university student.

✓ Also, rather than buying some books in the bookstore, I prefer to borrow them from the library since it is cheaper and I am just a university student.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'books' which is plural; it should be 'them'. Also, tense consistency is needed: 'was' should be 'is' and 'was just like the university student' should be 'am just a university student'.

× As I stated before, I do reading.

✓ As I stated before, I read.

The verb 'do' is not typically used with 'reading' in this context. The correct form is simply 'I read' to express the habitual action.

× I love spending long time in the library and also just like having a me time conversation with myself.

✓ I love spending a long time in the library and also having some me-time conversations with myself.

The phrase 'a me time conversation' is awkward; it should be 'me-time conversations'. Also, 'long time' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Also like though just like staring at other people in the library like they have do their own things such as like doing tags on when they being surprising over their exam and they just like pretending that.

✓ Also, I like staring at other people in the library as they do their own things, such as taking notes when they are surprised by their exam, and they just pretend that.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Doing tags on' is unclear and likely means 'taking notes'. 'Being surprising over their exam' should be 'are surprised by their exam'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Umm, I don't know, but I think I don't go to the library that often, but my father love to take me to the some bookstore.

✓ Umm, I don't know, but I think I didn't go to the library that often, but my father loved to take me to some bookstores.

The sentence refers to past events, so present tense 'don't go' and 'love' should be changed to past tense 'didn't go' and 'loved'. Also, 'the some bookstore' is incorrect; it should be 'some bookstores'.

× I just like Remedy and Indonesia, just like the biggest bookstore in Asia I think and also just like lost spending my time with my dad, but I don't go to the library, Yeah.

✓ I just like Remedy and Indonesia, which have the biggest bookstores in Asia, I think, and I also just love spending my time with my dad, but I didn't go to the library, yeah.

The sentence has unclear phrasing and incorrect prepositions. 'Lost spending' should be 'love spending'. Also, tense consistency requires 'didn't go' instead of 'don't go' when referring to past.

× Talking about Chinese kids, just like they have a lot of subject that they have to do.

✓ Talking about Chinese kids, they have a lot of subjects that they have to study.

'Subject' should be plural 'subjects' to match 'a lot of'. Also, 'have to do' is better expressed as 'have to study' in this context.

× Maybe you can just like scrolling in the Instagram or any social media and then you will see that Chinese kids was just like the the only kids that I sing studying.

✓ Maybe you can just scroll through Instagram or any social media and then you will see that Chinese kids are the only kids that I see studying.

'Scrolling in the Instagram' is incorrect; it should be 'scroll through Instagram'. 'Was' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'kids'. 'I sing studying' is incorrect and should be 'I see studying'.

× So I think they got into the library.

✓ So I think they go to the library.

'Got into' is past tense and does not fit the present context. The correct present tense is 'go to the library'.