图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise. For example, say "I didn't go often recently, but when I was in primary school, I spent a lot of time in the library because I didn't have many friends and it was a quiet place to be alone."

範例: I don't go to the library often now, but when I was in primary school, I spent a lot of time there because I didn't have many friends and it was a quiet place where I could be by myself.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, "When I was in primary school, I was a school librarian. I cleaned floors, wiped tables, and organized books by size and content. Besides that, I also enjoyed reading many novels."

範例: When I was in primary school, I was a school librarian. I cleaned the floors, wiped the tables, and organized books according to their size and content. Besides that, I also read many novels.

建議: Make your answer more coherent by improving grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. For example, "Yes, when I was a kid in China, my dad often took me to the library on weekends to reduce my screen time. This helped protect my eyes, although I still wear glasses because I used to read novels in the dark."

範例: Yes, when I was a kid in China, my dad often took me to the library on weekends to make sure I didn't spend too much time on electronic devices. This was a way to protect my eyes, although I still wear glasses because I read many novels in the dark.

建議: Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer logical. For example, "To be honest, I don't think Chinese kids have much leisure time to enjoy the library because their schedules are very tight. Most parents arrange many tuition classes, so children rarely have time to visit the library."

範例: To be honest, I don't think Chinese kids have much leisure time to enjoy the library because their schedules are very tight. Most parents arrange many tuition classes, so children rarely have time to visit the library.

× Not really, I used to stay in library every single day when I was in primary just because I don't really have friends and libraries the place where I can spend the entire spend time with myself and quiet.

✓ Not really, I used to stay in the library every single day when I was in primary just because I didn't really have friends and the library was the place where I could spend the entire time by myself quietly.

The word 'library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. 'Libraries' should be singular to match the context. Also, 'spend the entire spend time' is redundant; it should be 'spend the entire time'. 'With myself and quiet' is incorrect; it should be 'by myself quietly' to express being alone and in a quiet manner.

× Not really, I used to stay in library every single day when I was in primary just because I don't really have friends and libraries the place where I can spend the entire spend time with myself and quiet.

✓ Not really, I used to stay in the library every single day when I was in primary just because I didn't really have friends and the library was the place where I could spend the entire time by myself quietly.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action happened in the past ('used to stay'), the verbs should be in past tense ('didn't really have', 'was', 'could').

× When I was in primary, I used to be the school librarians where I cleaned the floors and wipe the tables, arrange, organize the books in this in orders according to its size and content and I also read lots of novels.

✓ When I was in primary, I used to be the school librarian where I cleaned the floors, wiped the tables, arranged and organized the books in order according to their size and content, and I also read lots of novels.

'Librarians' should be singular 'librarian' to match 'I'. Verbs describing past actions should be in past tense: 'wipe' to 'wiped', 'arrange' to 'arranged'. 'In this in orders' is incorrect; it should be 'in order'. 'Its size' should be 'their size' to agree with plural 'books'.

× When I was in primary, I used to be the school librarians where I cleaned the floors and wipe the tables, arrange, organize the books in this in orders according to its size and content and I also read lots of novels.

✓ When I was in primary, I used to be the school librarian where I cleaned the floors, wiped the tables, arranged and organized the books in order according to their size and content, and I also read lots of novels.

The verbs 'wipe', 'arrange', and 'organize' should be in past tense to maintain consistency with 'used to be' and 'cleaned'.

× Yes, when I was in China my dad always brought me to library during weekends just to make sure that I don't spend too much time on electronic devices.

✓ Yes, when I was in China, my dad always brought me to the library during weekends just to make sure that I didn't spend too much time on electronic devices.

'Library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'don't spend' should be 'didn't spend' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Yes, when I was in China my dad always brought me to library during weekends just to make sure that I don't spend too much time on electronic devices.

✓ Yes, when I was in China, my dad always brought me to the library during weekends just to make sure that I didn't spend too much time on electronic devices.

The phrase 'don't spend' is present tense but the context is past, so it should be 'didn't spend' to match the past tense narrative.

× So it's like basically another way to protect my eyes even though I couldn't work well because I still wear glasses due to reading too much novels in dark.

✓ So it was basically another way to protect my eyes even though I couldn't see well because I still wear glasses due to reading too many novels in the dark.

'Couldn't work well' is unclear; it should be 'couldn't see well'. 'Too much novels' is incorrect; 'novels' is countable, so 'too many novels' is correct. 'In dark' needs the article 'the' to be 'in the dark'. Also, tense consistency requires 'it was' instead of 'it's'.

× So it's like basically another way to protect my eyes even though I couldn't work well because I still wear glasses due to reading too much novels in dark.

✓ So it was basically another way to protect my eyes even though I couldn't see well because I still wear glasses due to reading too many novels in the dark.

'Novels' is plural, so 'too much' should be 'too many' to correctly quantify countable nouns.

× To be honest, I don't think Chinese kid got leisure time that much for leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their casuals was really tight.

✓ To be honest, I don't think Chinese kids have much leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their schedules are really tight.

'Kid' should be plural 'kids' to match 'themselves'. 'Got' should be 'have' for present tense. 'Casuals' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'schedules'. 'Was' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'schedules'.

× To be honest, I don't think Chinese kid got leisure time that much for leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their casuals was really tight.

✓ To be honest, I don't think Chinese kids have much leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their schedules are really tight.

'Got' is past tense but the sentence is in present tense context, so it should be 'have'.

× To be honest, I don't think Chinese kid got leisure time that much for leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their casuals was really tight.

✓ To be honest, I don't think Chinese kids have much leisure time to just enjoy themselves in the library because their schedules are really tight.

'Kid' is singular but 'themselves' is plural; pronouns must agree in number with their antecedents.

× Most of the Chinese parents, they schedule their kids with all the tuitions and stuff so I don't think they have the time to go for a library.

✓ Most of the Chinese parents schedule their kids for all the tuitions and stuff, so I don't think they have the time to go to a library.

'Schedule their kids with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for'. Also, 'go for a library' should be 'go to a library' to indicate destination.