图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure, for example, 'I prefer studying at home because I have a quiet, comfortable space dedicated to my activities.' Also, watch for grammar errors like 'a quite uncomfortable' which should be 'a quiet, comfortable'. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: At the moment, I don't often go to the library because I prefer studying at home, where I have a quiet and comfortable space. This helps me concentrate better without the distractions that sometimes occur in public places. However, when I was a teenager, I used to visit the library regularly to access more resources.

建議: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. For example, 'I usually spent a lot of time studying and reading books related to my interests, such as pharmacology and biochemistry. This helped me understand my coursework better.' Also, avoid incomplete sentences and ensure vocabulary is accurate, e.g., 'spend my knowledge' should be 'expand my knowledge'.

範例: When I was at university, I usually spent a lot of time in the library studying and reading books related to my interests, such as pharmacology, biochemistry, toxicology, and anatomy. I researched these topics in detail because they helped me understand my coursework better and expand my knowledge in my field. Additionally, I used library resources to prepare for exams and complete assignments.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions, for example, 'I usually preferred studying at home.' Also, improve sentence flow by using linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Try to be more specific about how your mother and friend helped you.

範例: No, I didn't often go to the library when I was a child because I usually preferred studying at home. Sometimes, my mother helped me with easier subjects, but for more difficult topics like maths, I had an older friend who explained things to me. This approach made it easier for me to understand challenging material.

建議: Your answer is informative and mostly clear, but some sentences are a bit awkward. For example, 'because of crowded areas are considered unsafe' should be 'because crowded areas are considered unsafe'. Use linking words like 'therefore' to improve coherence. Also, try to avoid minor grammar mistakes and keep sentences concise.

範例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Peru, it's not very common for children to go to the library. This is mainly because crowded areas are considered unsafe, so parents usually prefer their children to stay at home after school. Therefore, libraries are quite rare and often located far away, which makes it difficult for kids to visit them regularly.

× I prefer studying at home when I have a quite uncomfortable space dedicated to my activities.

✓ I prefer studying at home when I have quite an uncomfortable space dedicated to my activities.

The phrase 'a quite uncomfortable space' is incorrect because 'quite' is an adverb modifying 'uncomfortable' and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'quite' is better placed before 'an uncomfortable space' with the article 'an' to correctly modify the singular noun 'space'.

× I find it easier to concentrate without a distraction that sometimes occur in public places.

✓ I find it easier to concentrate without distractions that sometimes occur in public places.

The word 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' because the verb 'occur' is plural, indicating multiple distractions. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× When I was at university, I usually spend a lot of time in the library studying and reading book related to my excitement such as pharmacology, biochemistry, toxicology, and anatomy for example.

✓ When I was at university, I usually spent a lot of time in the library studying and reading books related to my interests such as pharmacology, biochemistry, toxicology, and anatomy, for example.

The verb 'spend' should be in the past tense 'spent' to match the past time frame 'When I was at university'. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to agree with the context of multiple subjects. 'Excitement' is incorrect here; 'interests' is more appropriate.

× I would research these topics in detail because they help me understand my course work better and spend my knowledge in my field.

✓ I would research these topics in detail because they help me understand my coursework better and expand my knowledge in my field.

The phrase 'spend my knowledge' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'expand' to indicate increasing knowledge. Also, 'course work' should be one word 'coursework'.

× I also use a library resource to prepare for exam and complete my.

✓ I also use library resources to prepare for exams and complete my work.

'A library resource' should be plural 'library resources' to indicate multiple resources. 'Exam' should be plural 'exams' to match general preparation. The sentence was incomplete; 'complete my' is corrected to 'complete my work' for clarity.

× No, I didn't often go to the library when I was a child because I usually prefer it studying at home.

✓ No, I didn't often go to the library when I was a child because I usually preferred studying at home.

The verb 'prefer' should be in the past tense 'preferred' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'. Also, 'prefer it studying' is incorrect; 'preferred studying' is correct.

× Sometimes my mother help me with easy suggest but for more difficult topic like maths I have a older friend who explains to me.

✓ Sometimes my mother helps me with easy suggestions, but for more difficult topics like maths, I have an older friend who explains things to me.

'Help' should be 'helps' for third person singular. 'Suggest' should be 'suggestions' (noun). 'Topic' should be plural 'topics'. 'A older' should be 'an older' because 'older' starts with a vowel sound. Added 'things' for clarity.

× This way I found it easy to understand challenging material.

✓ This way, I found it easy to understand challenging material.

Added a comma after 'This way' for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× This is mainly because of crowded areas are considered unsafe, so parents usually prefer their children to stay at home after attending the schools.

✓ This is mainly because crowded areas are considered unsafe, so parents usually prefer their children to stay at home after attending school.

Removed 'of' after 'because' to correct the prepositional phrase. 'The schools' should be 'school' as a general concept, not specific schools.

× Additional libraries are quite rare and often located far away, which make it difficult for kids to visit them regularly.

✓ Additional libraries are quite rare and often located far away, which makes it difficult for kids to visit them regularly.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'libraries' (plural), but the verb should agree with the singular idea of the clause. Here, 'which makes' is correct because it refers to the situation as a whole, treated as singular.