唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “so”, “very important for my life”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially on weekends. It helps me relax after a busy week and clears my mind so I can focus better at work the following week.

建議: Clarify and organize your response with correct grammar. Use one topic sentence, then give a specific detail about how you learned and what you enjoy. Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

範例: Yes, I learned some singing techniques from a good friend because he is an experienced singer. For example, he taught me breathing exercises and how to control pitch, which helped me enjoy both his music and film songs more.

建議: Be clearer and correct vocabulary mistakes. Start with a direct sentence, then explain briefly what you want to express when singing. Replace unclear phrases like “blow bond” with “close bond” or “strong bond.”

範例: I would like to sing for my friends and family to show my appreciation. By choosing songs about love and friendship, I can express the strong bond we share.

建議: Avoid incorrect words and long repetitive sentences. Give one clear opinion followed by two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct word choice (e.g., “definitely” instead of “obesity”).

範例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness because it reduces stress and creates a sense of connection with others. For example, singing in a group can lift people’s moods and make social events more enjoyable.

建議: Provide a direct answer and a short explanation. Correct grammar (e.g., “I’m a big fan of him”) and separate ideas with linking words. Mention why you prefer that genre or singer.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially hip hop. My favorite artist is Donald Walla because I like his rhythm and clever lyrics, which inspire me when I sing.

建議: Organize your answer chronologically and use clear numbers and tenses. State how many lessons you took, when, and what you do now. Use linking phrases like “after that” and avoid unclear timings such as “9:50 minutes.”

範例: Yes, I took two or three singing lessons about six months ago. After that, I began practicing on my own for about ten minutes each day, which has noticeably improved my vocal control compared with before.

× Yes, I prefer singing mostly on weekends because it helps me to reduce my stress and concentrate on my work from next week.

✓ Yes, I prefer singing mostly on weekends because it helps me reduce my stress and concentrate on my work for the next week.

The phrase 'helps me to reduce' is acceptable but more natural without 'to' after 'help'. 'Concentrate on my work from next week' is awkward; use 'for the next week' to indicate the upcoming week or 'starting next week' if you mean beginning then. Keep verb tense consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I learned how to sing from my friend. He's a good singer and also singing many songs.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing from my friend. He's a good singer and also sings many songs.

After a subject and auxiliary ('He is'), the verb that follows should be in base form with third-person singular agreement: 'he sings'. Using 'singing' here is incorrect unless using a continuous form like 'he is singing', which would change meaning.

× I am fan of my friends songs and film songs.

✓ I am a fan of my friend's songs and film songs.

Missing article 'a' before 'fan' and possessive apostrophe needed for 'friend's'. Also 'my friends songs' without apostrophe is ambiguous. Use 'film songs' is okay but could be 'songs from films'.

× I want to sing for my friends and family. In that song I will show the blow bond between my friends and family.

✓ I want to sing for my friends and family. In that song I will show the close bond between my friends and family.

The phrase 'blow bond' is incorrect; likely intended 'close bond'. 'That song' is fine; ensure adjective 'close' correctly describes the relationship.

× Obesity singing can bring happiness to people because while singing all we feel unstressful and can happy in every moment because it's relaxation to each and every people.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because while singing we all feel less stressed and can be happy in every moment since it relaxes everyone.

'Obesity singing' is nonsensical; remove 'Obesity'. 'All we feel unstressful' is ungrammatical; use 'we all feel less stressed'. 'Can happy' needs verb 'be' -> 'can be happy'. 'It's relaxation to each and every people' should be 'it relaxes everyone' or 'it is relaxing for everyone'. Reword to clear, natural English.

× Mostly I prefer listening to hip hop songs and my favorite singer is Donald Walla, I big fan of him.

✓ Mostly I prefer listening to hip hop songs and my favorite singer is Donald Walla; I am a big fan of his.

Run-on sentence needs separation. 'I big fan of him' misses verb and article: use 'I am a big fan of his.' Using 'of his' is more natural than 'of him' for possession. Maintain present simple for preferences.

× Well, I took round 3 two to three classes of singing from last six months.

✓ Well, I took around two to three singing classes over the last six months.

Word order and preposition are incorrect. Use 'around' not 'round 3', and 'two to three singing classes' is clearer. Use 'over the last six months' to indicate the time period for past actions continuing to present.

× After that I started my own and singing around 9:50 minutes per day.

✓ After that I started practicing on my own and sang for about 9–10 minutes per day.

'Started my own' is incomplete; use 'started practicing on my own'. If referring to a habit, 'sang' or 'have been singing' could work. '9:50 minutes' is wrong format; use 'about 9–10 minutes'. Ensure correct tense: if this habit continues, 'have been singing' would be appropriate.

× It also helps me to singing and my voice is very good now as compared to 1 before.

✓ It also helped me with my singing, and my voice is much better now compared to before.

'Helps me to singing' is incorrect; use 'helps me with my singing' or 'helped me sing'. 'Very good now as compared to 1 before' contains a stray '1' and wrong structure; use 'much better now compared to before'. Maintain consistent tense: if referring to past training, use past 'helped'.