唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct some grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons. Avoid repetition and metaphors that are awkwardly formed.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express emotions I can't show in daily life. For example, when I sing I feel relaxed and confident, like when I perform a favorite song for friends.

建議: Correct grammar (use present perfect/infinitive) and organize ideas: direct answer + brief explanation + a specific example of how you learned. Use linking word such as 'but' or 'however' correctly.

範例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons because I haven't had enough time. However, I am passionate about singing and I often learn techniques from free YouTube tutorials, such as breathing exercises and vocal warm-ups.

建議: Give a direct, natural opening sentence and clarify confusing phrases. Avoid unclear references like 'St. concerts'. Provide one or two specific situations you would enjoy singing in and explain why.

範例: I don't have a specific audience in mind; I would be happy to sing for anyone. For instance, I would enjoy performing at a public concert or a community festival because I like sharing my feeling with a wide audience.

建議: Start with a clear thesis then give contrasting details using linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Use accurate vocabulary (grief, hymns) and avoid repeating nouns unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness by lifting people's mood and creating a sense of community. However, songs can also express sorrow — for example, hymns or ballads often help people process grief and remember loved ones.

建議: Make the structure clearer: topic sentence, then specific preferences with examples. Correct phrasing (e.g. 'for female' -> 'for female singers') and reduce hesitations like 'umm'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially opera. For example, I prefer sopranos for female singers and baritones for male singers, and I also like traditional Slavic folk songs rather than jazz or rock.

建議: Answer directly then explain briefly with clear chronology. Remove fillers ('uh') and correct tenses. Provide one specific detail about the experience to make it richer.

範例: No, I haven't taken singing classes. When I was a child my family enrolled me in violin lessons instead, and although I tried it, I wasn't passionate about it so I eventually stopped.

× Yes, I adore singing because it makes me feel free and express myself in a way that I can't imagine I would do it in normal situation.

✓ Yes, I adore singing because it makes me feel free and allows me to express myself in a way that I can't imagine doing in a normal situation.

The sentence mixes verb forms and lacks a necessary verb for parallel structure. 'Makes me feel free and express myself' should use 'allows me to express myself' or 'and express myself' with a repeated auxiliary. 'Imagine I would do it' is unidiomatic; use 'imagine doing' and include the article 'a' before 'normal situation'. Use of 'allows' creates correct parallelism.

× So it feels like a flying as free as a bird in the sky, so it's great.

✓ So it feels like flying, as free as a bird in the sky, so it's great.

'A flying' is incorrect here; 'flying' as a noun or gerund works without the article. The simile should be 'as free as a bird'. Removing the extra 'a' and adjusting punctuation clarifies the sentence.

× No, unfortunately I haven't much time to learn sing as a professional singer.

✓ No, unfortunately I haven't had much time to learn to sing as a professional singer.

Use present perfect 'haven't had' to indicate lack of time up to now. The verb 'learn' should be followed by the infinitive 'to sing'. The original omitted 'had' and 'to' causing ungrammatical structure.

× However, I was too passionate about that and browsing to YouTube and Internet to see many contents that teach me free.

✓ However, I was very passionate about it and browsed YouTube and the Internet to watch many videos that taught me for free.

Use 'was very passionate about it' (replace 'that') and past simple 'browsed' for completed actions. 'Browsing to' is incorrect; use 'browsed' or 'went to'. 'Contents' is uncountable here—use 'videos' or 'content'. 'Teach me free' is incorrect; use 'taught me for free'.

× I don't have a special audience in my mind so it would be great if I sing for in concert for a stranger or maybe St. concerts.

✓ I don't have a specific audience in mind, so it would be great if I sang in a concert for strangers or maybe at street concerts.

'In my mind' should be 'in mind' and 'special' better as 'specific'. For hypothetical, use past subjunctive 'sang'. 'Sing for in concert' is ungrammatical—use 'sang in a concert'. 'A stranger' plural 'strangers' fits better. 'St. concerts' is unclear; likely 'street concerts', use 'at' for events.

× It's OK for me.

✓ That's OK with me.

'That's OK with me' is the more idiomatic phrase in English; 'for me' is acceptable but 'with me' is preferred here.

× Yes, it can bring happiness. Also it can bring sorrow and grieves because singing and songs or hymn are not about just expressing joy and delightful moments but also about sharing our sad or difficult situations such as griefs.

✓ Yes, it can bring happiness. It can also bring sorrow and grief because singing, songs, or hymns are not only about expressing joy and delightful moments but also about sharing sad or difficult situations such as grief.

'Grieves' is incorrect; use 'grief' (uncountable). Word order: 'It can also bring' is more natural. 'Singing and songs or hymn' needs parallel nouns and correct plural 'hymns'. Use 'are not only about' rather than 'not about just'. Remove redundant plural 'griefs'.

× Yes, especially opera in for female I prefer soprano and for men I prefer baritone voice.

✓ Yes, especially opera: for female voices I prefer sopranos, and for men I prefer baritones.

'Opera in for female' is ungrammatical. Use 'for female voices' or 'for women' and plural 'sopranos'/'baritones' when speaking generally. Simplify structure and use colons or commas for clarity.

× But it depends. I'm not into any type of music like jazz or rock'n'roll so I prefer opera or folklore singing umm such as traditional songs in Slavic countries.

✓ But it depends. I'm not into types of music like jazz or rock'n'roll, so I prefer opera or folk singing, such as traditional songs from Slavic countries.

'Any type of music like' should be 'types of music like'. 'Folklore singing' is better as 'folk singing' or 'folk music'. Use 'from Slavic countries' rather than 'in' for origin. Remove filler 'umm'.

× No, unfortunately as a child, my family didn't uh, pay attention to this matter that I, uh, I'm into singing, but they take me to a music classes like violin.

✓ No, unfortunately, as a child my family didn't pay attention to the fact that I was into singing, but they took me to music classes like violin.

Remove filler words. 'Did n't pay attention to this matter that I, I'm into' should be 'didn't pay attention to the fact that I was into singing'. Use past tense 'took' for completed action and plural 'music classes' without 'a'.

× I have experienced there, but I'm not passionate towards it, so I gave up.

✓ I had some experience there, but I wasn't passionate about it, so I gave it up.

'I have experienced there' is awkward; use 'I had some experience there'. Match past tense consistently: 'wasn't passionate about it'. 'Gave up' usually takes an object here: 'gave it up' or simply 'gave up' is acceptable; 'gave it up' clarifies object.