记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 많이 중복되고 어순과 표현에서 오류가 있습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답한 뒤, 간단한 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 예로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복(예: "there was there wasn't", "I I")을 피하고 시제와 어휘(예: "young century" -> "childhood" 또는 "young age")를 정확히 사용하세요. 최대 3~4문장으로 구성하고 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요.

範例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because I often forget details from my childhood. For example, I frequently can't recall names or dates unless I write them down. Because of this, I try to take notes or use apps to help me remember.

建議: 답은 직설적이지만 표현이 산만하고 중복이 많습니다("promise" 반복, "I I", "It it"). 구체적인 상황(무슨 약속인지, 어떻게 만회했는지)을 하나로 묶어 간결하게 설명하세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 원인과 결과를 명확히 하세요. 문장 수는 2~4문장으로 유지하세요.

範例: Yes, once I forgot a lunch appointment with my friends and arrived very late. To apologise, I bought coffee for everyone and explained why I was late. After that, I started setting reminders so it wouldn't happen again.

建議: 전달하려는 내용은 명확하지만 어색한 표현과 중복이 많습니다("promise" 남발, "record the, uh, record"). 더 자연스러운 표현으로 "appointments"나 "plans"를 사용하고, 캘린더를 어떻게 활용하는지 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 알림 설정, 색상 구분). 연결어를 사용해 문장을 유기적으로 만드세요.

範例: I need to remember daily appointments and plans, such as lunches or meetings. I use a calendar app and set reminders for each event, and sometimes colour-code different types of plans so I don't miss anything.

建議: 의도는 캘린더 사용을 설명하는 것이지만 문장이 어색하고 반복적입니다("I told you that", "memorizing something"). 간단히 방법을 서두에 명확히 말한 뒤, 구체적 방법(알람, 메모, 반복 확인)을 덧붙이세요. 2~3문장으로 구체적 예시를 포함하면 더 좋습니다.

範例: I usually use a digital calendar to remember important things and set multiple alarms. For very important events, I also write a note with details and check the calendar the night before.

× I think I'm not good at memorizing things because there was there wasn't a great memory of my young century.

✓ I think I'm not good at memorizing things because I didn't have a good memory when I was young.

The original mixes past forms incorrectly ('was there wasn't') and uses 'young century' which is wrong. Use past simple 'didn't have' to describe a past state, and the correct phrase is 'when I was young.' Suggestion: simplify the clause to 'I didn't have a good memory when I was young.'

× So I I want to get a memory.

✓ So I want to improve my memory.

The phrase 'get a memory' is unnatural and ungrammatical in English. Use 'improve my memory' or 'have a better memory.' Also remove the duplicated 'I'.

× Yeah, I have forgotten my promise with my friends.

✓ Yes, I forgot a promise I made to my friends.

Using present perfect 'have forgotten' is possible, but the student refers to a specific past event; simple past 'forgot' is more natural. Also 'my promise with my friends' should be 'a promise I made to my friends.'

× So I was late for promise.

✓ So I was late for the meeting/appointment.

'Late for promise' is ungrammatical. Use 'late for a promise' is also odd; better: 'late for the meeting' or 'late for the appointment' or 'late to meet them.' Add an article and correct noun.

× So I I bought the coffee cup of coffee for my friends.

✓ So I bought a cup of coffee for my friends.

There is duplication 'the coffee cup of coffee' and repeated 'I'. Correct phrasing is 'a cup of coffee.' Remove duplicated words.

× It it is my fault.

✓ It was my fault.

Context refers to a past incident, so use past simple 'was' instead of present 'is.' Remove duplicated 'it.'

× It was my fault.

✓ It was my fault.

This sentence is already correct; past simple correctly indicates responsibility for the past event. No change needed.

× I need to, uh, memorize for my promise to use calendars.

✓ I need to remember my appointments, so I use a calendar.

'Memorize for my promise' is incorrect collocation. Use 'remember my appointments' or 'remember my promises.' Also 'to use calendars' should be 'so I use a calendar.' Use noun 'calendar' singular or 'calendars' if multiple. Use simple present for habitual action.

× So I have a lot of, uh, promise for lunch or dinner.

✓ I have a lot of plans for lunch or dinner.

'A lot of promise' is ungrammatical; 'promise' is countable in this sense but the intended word is 'plans' or 'appointments.' Use 'a lot of plans' or 'many plans.'

× So I record the, uh, record things in my calendar.

✓ So I record things in my calendar.

The phrase duplicates 'record.' Remove repetition. 'Record things in my calendar' correctly describes the action; present simple is appropriate for routines.

× Before I told you that I remember the, uh, important meetings over my appointments with friends, I need to use a calendar for memorizing something.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, to remember important meetings and appointments with friends, I need to use a calendar.

The original is disfluent and mixes tenses and prepositions ('over my appointments'). Use 'As I mentioned earlier' and parallel structure 'important meetings and appointments.' 'For memorizing something' is awkward; use 'to remember' or 'to help me remember.' Keep present simple for habitual need.