天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid contradictions. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (temperatures, months, or typical conditions). Remove filler words like "uh" and avoid saying "one season" when you already said mild year-round—clarify if you mean subtropical or temperate.

範例: The weather where I live is generally mild year-round, with temperatures usually between 15–25°C. We rarely get snow or heat waves, and most months are pleasant with light rain in autumn.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then add a reason and a brief example. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "however") correctly to connect ideas and avoid repetition of "very".

範例: I prefer mild weather because it is comfortable for daily activities. However, I also enjoy seasonal variety — for example, I like skiing in winter and swimming in summer.

建議: Good direct answer and specific reason. Improve by using smoother phrasing and one linking word to strengthen coherence. Replace vague words like "green sceneries" with a concise expression.

範例: I prefer wet weather because rain makes the landscape lush and the air fresher, so I enjoy walking outside after a storm.

建議: Be concise and avoid fillers like "umm." Answer both parts clearly (habit and frequency) with a simple schedule (e.g., "before trips and sometimes in the morning"). Combine reasons into one coherent sentence using a linking word.

範例: I usually check the forecast before I travel so I can pack appropriate clothing and avoid weather-related disruptions. I don't check it daily, only a few days before a trip.

建議: Provide a clearer topic sentence about observable effects, then give two specific examples (e.g., extreme weather, water shortages) and link them logically. Avoid vague phrasing like "follow the news about the concerns" — state the impacts directly.

範例: Although I haven't felt major changes personally, climate change has caused more extreme weather and threatens habitats; for instance, rising temperatures can reduce water supplies and endanger local wildlife.

建議: Correct the final sentence and remove the incorrect phrase "climate change is always attracting." Start with a clear topic sentence, give specific examples of activities, and conclude with a concise reason. Use correct collocations ("a hot day", "cold conditions").

範例: Yes, I would like to visit places with different climates to try new activities, such as skiing in cold conditions or relaxing on a hot beach, because variety makes travel more exciting.

× we don't experience very cold winter or very hot summer.

✓ we don't experience very cold winters or very hot summers.

Countable nouns referring to recurring seasons should be plural. Use 'winters' and 'summers' to indicate multiple instances across years. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about seasons generally (winters, summers).

× We experience just one season, uh, in the whole year.

✓ We experience just one season in the whole year.

Remove filler 'uh' for correctness and fluency. The sentence otherwise is acceptable, but if meaning recurring single season each year consider: 'We experience only one season throughout the year.' Use singular 'season' if you mean there is effectively one season per year.

× Raining makes everywhere become more lush and green and I enjoy the fresh air and green sceneries after the rain.

✓ Rain makes everywhere become more lush and green, and I enjoy the fresh air and green scenery after the rain.

Use 'rain' (noun) rather than 'raining' as the subject. 'Rain' as a singular noun requires singular verb 'makes'. Also 'scenery' is an uncountable noun in this context, so use singular 'scenery' instead of 'sceneries'. Separate clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× I always check the weather before traveling.

✓ I always check the weather before traveling.

Sentence is correct; no preposition error. (No change needed.)

× I want to make sure I pack the right clothes and for the weather and also umm make sure the weather does not ruin our traveling plan.

✓ I want to make sure I pack the right clothes for the weather and also make sure the weather does not ruin our travel plans.

Remove filler 'umm' and correct word order: 'pack the right clothes for the weather'. Use 'travel plans' (plural) which is more natural. 'Traveling plan' is awkward; 'travel plans' is preferred. Ensure parallel structure: 'make sure I pack... and make sure...'.

× But I don't check the weather every day.

✓ But I don't check the weather every day.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present simple; no tense change required. (No change needed.)

× I don't feel a direct impact in my daily life, however, I always follow the news about the concerns of environmentalists regarding the endangering habitat and future concerns about water supply.

✓ I don't feel a direct impact in my daily life; however, I always follow the news about environmentalists' concerns regarding endangered habitats and future water supply issues.

Use semicolon before 'however' when linking independent clauses. 'Endangering habitat' is incorrect; use 'endangered habitats' (adjective + plural noun). 'Environmentalists' concerns' should show possession. 'Water supply issues' is more natural than 'concerns about water supply'. Adjust pluralization for general statements.

× Yes, I would like to experience different activities and in different temperature, for example, skiing in cold condition or going to the beach in a hot day.

✓ Yes, I would like to experience different activities in different temperatures; for example, skiing in cold conditions or going to the beach on a hot day.

Remove extra 'and'. Use plural 'temperatures' when speaking generally. Use 'cold conditions' (plural) and 'on a hot day' (correct preposition). Use semicolon to separate clauses and ensure parallel structure.

× So the climate change is always attracting.

✓ So the climate is always attractive to me.

'Climate change is always attracting' is ungrammatical and unclear. If the student means they are attracted by different climates, say 'the climate is always attractive to me' or 'different climates always attract me.' Use correct verb 'attract' with appropriate subject and object.