天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise details. Use one or two linking words to connect seasons and examples. Give specific temperatures and activities but avoid sentence fragments and repetition.

範例: The weather where I live is generally mild and pleasant. In winter we often have heavy rain and temperatures between 8 and 12°C, while summers are warm, around 25 to 30°C, which is ideal for outdoor activities like hiking and picnics.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then add two clear reasons with linking words (because / so). Avoid repeating ideas and fix basic grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Be specific about activities affected by temperature.

範例: I prefer cold weather because it makes outdoor activities and shopping more comfortable. For example, in winter I can walk around the city and do window shopping easily, whereas hot, humid summers make walking tiring.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear, relevant reason. Avoid vague or repetitive statements and odd details (e.g., eating snacks while raining) unless they illustrate a point. Use linking words like because or for example.

範例: I prefer wet weather because I enjoy the fresh feeling after rain. For example, I like walking in light rain and then having a warm drink afterwards.

建議: Provide a clear time frame and purpose. Use correct tense and concise phrases (e.g., I check the forecast daily or before trips). Explain frequency and reason with linking words like because or so that.

範例: Yes, I check the weather forecast regularly, especially before I travel. For example, I usually check it a week before a trip and again the day before, because I like to plan hikes in hilly areas according to the forecast.

建議: Start with a clear opinion and support it with two specific effects of climate change using linking words (for example, because, so). Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., milder winters, longer summers, extreme weather) and correct grammar.

範例: I think climate change has caused milder winters and longer, hotter summers. For example, winters now start later and last a shorter time, while heatwaves and unusual rainfall have become more frequent.

建議: Answer directly (yes/no) and give a specific example of a city and why you enjoyed it. Use correct tense and avoid irrelevant details (like 'I love to eat' unless linked to climate). Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy visiting cities with different climates. For example, last year I visited Shimla, which was cold and refreshing, and I enjoyed the scenery and local food during my stay.

× Is usually quiet and mild.

✓ It is usually quiet and mild.

The sentence is missing the subject 'It' which is required for English declarative sentences about weather. Add 'It' before the verb to form a complete sentence.

× Where I live the weather is very warm pleasure summers.

✓ Where I live, the summers are very pleasantly warm.

Word order and word choice are incorrect. 'Pleasure' is a noun; use the adverb 'pleasantly' or the adjective 'pleasant' with a noun. Also specify 'summers' as the subject with verb 'are' and place commas for clarity.

× For example in winter it's have a heavy rainfall at temperature around 8 to 12, while summer reach at 25 to 30°.

✓ For example, in winter it has heavy rainfall and temperatures around 8 to 12°C, while in summer it reaches 25 to 30°C.

'It's have' is incorrect; use 'it has' for present tense third-person singular. 'Temperature' should be plural 'temperatures'. 'Summer reach' needs subject 'it' and third-person singular verb 'reaches'. Use degree symbol properly with 'C' for Celsius.

× Makes a good and perfect outdoor activities.

✓ This makes for good outdoor activities.

Original lacks a clear subject; 'Makes' cannot start the sentence alone. Change to 'This makes for good outdoor activities' or 'It is good for outdoor activities.' Remove redundant adjective 'perfect' or use one adjective.

× Usually I prefer cold weather because in the hot weather we cannot move freely in the summers around and at wet.

✓ Usually I prefer cold weather because in hot weather we cannot move around freely, especially in wet summers.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect. 'Move freely' is the correct adverb placement. 'In the summers around and at wet' is unclear; revise to 'in wet summers' for clarity and correctness.

× In the cold we can move around each other for the window shopping also, but in the summer it is not possible to move outside and do window shopping.

✓ In the cold we can walk around and go window shopping, but in the summer it is not possible to go outside and shop.

'Move around each other for the window shopping' is ungrammatical. Use 'walk around' or 'move around' and 'go window shopping' or 'shop'. Simplify and correct verb forms.

× Usually I prefer wet weather because I like to.

✓ Usually I prefer wet weather because I enjoy it.

'Because I like to' is incomplete; 'like to' needs an object or activity. Replace with 'enjoy it' to refer back to wet weather.

× I like to take a bath in rain and I usually take a bath and eat healthy snacks.

✓ I like bathing in the rain, and I often have a bath and eat healthy snacks.

Use the gerund 'bathing' after 'like' for a general preference. Avoid repeating 'take a bath'; 'have a bath' is acceptable. Use parallel structure for actions.

× Yes, I have a habit to check a weather forecast when I was have often.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of checking the weather forecast often.

Use 'a habit of doing' rather than 'habit to'. 'Weather forecast' does not need the indefinite article here; use 'the weather forecast' or 'weather forecasts'. Remove 'when I was have often' which is ungrammatical.

× I often check at the price of a month because usually I planned a trip.

✓ I often check at the start of the month because I usually plan trips.

'Check at the price of a month' is incorrect phrase; likely meant 'start of the month'. Tense consistency: use present tense 'plan' to match habitual action.

× As I am a travel buff, I usually travel a trip for a long for the long time.

✓ As I am a travel buff, I usually travel for long periods of time.

'Travel a trip' and 'for a long for the long time' are redundant and incorrect. Use 'travel for long periods' or 'take long trips'.

× I usually prefer in the hilly areas where I want to check the weather weather often.

✓ I usually prefer hilly areas where I want to check the weather often.

Remove incorrect preposition 'prefer in'; say 'prefer hilly areas'. Also remove repeated word 'weather'.

× Usually the temperature is very effective due to global warming because I have seen in recent year the weather of winters come for a Showtime period and but the summers take a long time.

✓ Recently temperatures have been affected by global warming because I have seen that winters last for a shorter time while summers last longer.

'Effective' is incorrect; use 'affected'. Correct tense and phrasing: 'I have seen in recent years' and clarify comparative duration of seasons. Remove 'Showtime' which is inappropriate.

× Being a travel buff, I travel a lot of cities.

✓ Being a travel buff, I have traveled to many cities.

Use present perfect 'have traveled' to indicate experience up to now. 'Travel a lot of cities' is incorrect; use 'travel to many cities' or 'have visited many cities'.

× For example, last year I visit the Shimla.

✓ For example, last year I visited Shimla.

Use past tense 'visited' for a completed action in the past. Article 'the' before 'Shimla' is not needed; use the proper noun alone.

× There was a cold weather.

✓ The weather was cold there.

'There was a cold weather' uses incorrect article and word order. 'Weather' as an uncountable noun does not take 'a' here; better to say 'The weather was cold' or 'It was cold there.'

× I love to eat and I love to visit there.

✓ I loved it there and enjoyed the food.

Original 'I love to visit there' is awkward after speaking about a past trip. Use past tense 'loved it there' and 'enjoyed the food'. Also replace vague 'visit there' with clearer phrasing.