花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Avoid fillers like “uh” and vague words like “beneficial.”

範例: Yes, I love flowers. I especially enjoy their fragrance because it lifts my mood in the morning; for example, the lavender in my living room helps me feel calm and focused.

建議: Correct grammar and be specific. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and give a brief detail about what she does and why. Avoid repetition (“flower of colorful flowers”).

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. Every weekend she buys a different colorful bouquet for the house because she thinks fresh flowers make the home more cheerful.

建議: Improve accuracy and cohesion: use correct subject-verb agreement, limit redundancy, and use a linking phrase to connect description and personal feeling. Reduce filler words.

範例: Yes, we have many flowers in our garden, such as red, pink and yellow varieties. Moreover, I enjoy walking among them because it feels like therapy and helps me relax.

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural: give a clear frequency, a brief reason, and correct small errors (word order and articles).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers — usually every two or three days when I see an attractive bloom on my way to work — and I post them on social media.

建議: Clarify the general practice and correct contradictions: say when people usually send flowers and give one clear example. Fix tense errors and avoid confusing phrases like “except when there is a graduation party” if you mean they do so at graduations.

範例: Yes, people commonly send flowers for celebrations and condolences. For example, at my graduation many friends and relatives brought colorful bouquets to congratulate me.

× Yes, actually my mom love flowers.

✓ Yes, actually my mom loves flowers.

Subject 'my mom' is third person singular, so the verb should take the -s form in the present simple. Use 'loves' instead of 'love'. Suggestion: Remember to add -s for he/she/it in present simple (e.g., 'she loves', 'he goes').

× Every weekend she brings a new flower of colorful flowers to our house.

✓ Every weekend she brings a bouquet of colorful flowers to our house.

The phrase 'a new flower of colorful flowers' mixes singular and plural awkwardly. Use a collective noun like 'a bouquet' or make it plural: 'brings new colorful flowers'. Suggestion: Decide singular or plural and use appropriate nouns: 'a bouquet of flowers' or 'new colorful flowers'.

× Yes, in our garden there is many flowers, colorful flowers like red, pink, yellow flowers.

✓ Yes, in our garden there are many flowers, colorful ones like red, pink, and yellow.

Mismatch between 'there is' (singular) and 'many flowers' (plural). Use 'there are' for plural. Also avoid repeating 'flowers' and use 'ones' for brevity; add commas and 'and' in a list. Suggestion: Use 'there is' for singular and 'there are' for plural; use 'ones' to avoid repetition (e.g., 'colorful ones').

× Uh, actually I like to, uh, walk into our garden because it's a therapy for me.

✓ Uh, actually I like to walk into our garden because it's therapeutic for me.

'It's a therapy for me' is grammatical but unnatural. 'Therapeutic' is an adjective that fits better. Alternatively, 'because it is therapy for me' could work but 'therapeutic' is more natural. Suggestion: Use adjectives rather than noun phrases where appropriate: 'it's therapeutic' or 'it is a form of therapy'.

× Ah yes, every two to three days when I see any flowers when I'm going to a work actually, I take a picture and post them.

✓ Ah yes, every two to three days when I see any flowers when I'm going to work, I take a picture and post it.

Use 'going to work' without the article 'a'. Also 'a picture' is singular so the pronoun must be 'it' not 'them'. Suggestion: Drop unnecessary articles before uncountable/abstract nouns like 'work' and match pronouns to the antecedent's number.

× Ah yes, every two to three days when I see any flowers when I'm going to a work actually, I take a picture and post them.

✓ Ah yes, every two to three days when I see any flowers while I'm going to work, I take a picture and post it.

Use 'while' or 'when' for simultaneous actions; 'going to work' is correct preposition usage. 'When I'm going to a work' is incorrect. Combine with previous correction about pronoun. Suggestion: Use 'while' for ongoing actions and omit 'a' before 'work'.

× Yes, there are many, many people often send flowers to others, except when there is a graduation party.

✓ Yes, many people often send flowers to others, for example at graduation parties.

'There are many, many people often send' is ungrammatical: 'there are' + clause doesn't connect to 'send'. Also 'except when there is a graduation party' contradicts likely meaning. Rephrase to 'many people often send flowers, for example at graduation parties.' Suggestion: Use simple subject-verb structure: 'many people send' or 'many people often send', and be clear about exceptions or examples.

× Uh, for example, when I graduate, many of the people came to our house and bring more colorful flowers to me.

✓ Uh, for example, when I graduated, many people came to our house and brought more colorful flowers for me.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I graduate' (present/future) vs. 'came' (past). Use past tense 'graduated' to match 'came' and change 'bring' to past 'brought'. Use 'for me' instead of 'to me' with 'flowers'. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent in past narratives: use past tense for events that already happened, and match verb forms accordingly.