花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and produce a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar: use past tense or present appropriately and remove duplicated words.

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers. I have liked them since childhood because they remind me of warm summers, and often friends give me sunflower bouquets on special occasions.

建議: Start with a direct answer, avoid repeating words, and avoid overgeneralizations. If you give a generalization about your country, support it with a brief example. Use correct verb forms.

範例: I’m not sure if anyone close to me loves flowers specifically, because I haven’t asked. However, many people in Japan appreciate cherry blossoms and sunflowers; for example, my neighbors always display cherry blossom pictures in spring.

建議: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and then one or two specific, coherent details. Remove repeated words and use linking words (for example, because, for instance). Be specific about locations and types of flowers.

範例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. For instance, my apartment building and the nearby nursery often plant sunflowers and other seasonal flowers in front of their gardens.

建議: Answer directly and correct pronoun/grammar errors. Use one linking phrase to contrast routine and exceptions. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don’t usually take photos of flowers because I’m not very interested in them. However, when I travel abroad I sometimes photograph flowers I find beautiful.

建議: Provide a clear affirmative sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'send flowers' not 'send forwards'), and give specific occasions with brief examples. Avoid unrelated or unclear sentences.

範例: Yes, people in my country sometimes send flowers for occasions like weddings, graduations, and memorial services. For example, friends often send bouquets to congratulate someone after a recital or to celebrate a wedding.

× Yes, I like flowers because especially I prefer to see sunflower in the summer season and I learned about it as a child. Often my friends give me give me.

✓ Yes, I like flowers, especially sunflowers; I prefer to see them in summer, and I learned about them as a child. Often my friends give them to me.

Issues: incorrect adverb placement ('because especially' should be 'especially' near the phrase it modifies), singular/plural ('sunflower' should be 'sunflowers' when speaking generally), unclear pronoun reference ('it' ambiguous -> 'them' for flowers), redundancy ('give me give me' repeated) and missing preposition ('give ... to me'). Suggestion: place 'especially' before the noun or clause it modifies, use plural when referring to flowers in general, use correct object pronouns, and remove duplicated words; use 'give X to me' or 'give me X'. (Grammar problem type ID:20)

× I am not sure because I have never ask ask my family and friends about flowers, but almost all Japanese people like sunflower and cherry blossom.

✓ I am not sure because I have never asked my family and friends about flowers, but almost all Japanese people like sunflowers and cherry blossoms.

Issues: past participle needed after 'have' ('have never asked'), duplication 'ask ask', and plural nouns for general preferences ('sunflowers' and 'cherry blossoms'). Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle for actions up to now, remove duplicate words, and pluralize common nouns when speaking generally. (Grammar problem type ID:9)

× Yes they are because my apartment front door, nursery school their their hearts bunch of sunflower in front of their garden.

✓ Yes, there are a lot because in front of my apartment, the front door of the nursery school, and many gardens there are bunches of sunflowers.

Issues: incorrect use of pronouns and word order making sentence ungrammatical, repetition ('their their'), singular/plural ('sunflower' -> 'sunflowers' or 'bunches of sunflowers'), and missing 'there are' construction. Suggestion: use 'there are' to say existence of many flowers, correct possessive pronouns and plural nouns, and order phrases logically (location first then description). (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× I don't take photos of others in daily life because I actually I'm not interested in flowers, but I sometimes traveling abroad I take photos.

✓ I don't take photos of flowers in daily life because I'm not interested in them, but sometimes when I travel abroad I take photos.

Issues: wrong object 'others' should be 'flowers', unnecessary 'actually' placement and repeated subject 'I', incorrect verb form 'traveling' needs auxiliary 'when I travel' or 'when traveling', and pronoun 'them' for flowers. Suggestion: use 'take photos of flowers', remove redundant words, and use correct time clause 'when I travel abroad'. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Yes, they sometimes send forwards to others such as recitals and com memorable dates and wedding parties. I also run married my friends.

✓ Yes, they sometimes send flowers to others for events such as recitals, commemorative dates, and wedding parties. I have also attended friends' weddings.

Issues: incorrect word 'forwards' should be 'flowers', wrong preposition ('to others for events'), misspelling 'com memorable' -> 'commemorative', and ungrammatical phrase 'I also run married my friends' which seems intended to say 'I have also attended friends' weddings' or 'I have also gotten married friends' unclear. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('flowers'), use 'for' to indicate purpose, correct spelling, and rephrase to a grammatical past perfect or present perfect structure if indicating attendance ('I have attended friends' weddings'). (Grammar problem type ID:11)