7 分范例
话题: Describe a period in history which you are interested in
范例
The modern history of Beijing When it was I'm going to talk about the capital city of my country, Beijing, and its modern history. It's located in the East of the country, close to the sea but it's not a coastal city. What happened It has an amazing history as it was the seat of many emperors but nowadays, it's a huge megacity with tall skyscrapers and is a massive business hub where most international companies have a headquarters, and it's this change that fascinates me. How you first heard about it As it's the capital of my country, I learnt about it in history classes and I remember doing a project about it in class as it is home to The Forbidden Palace, which was the home of emperors for over 500 years and is awe-inspiring. The Great Wall is just north of the city too so you can visit that and get a feel for life hundreds of years ago. And explain why you are interested in this period of history What gets me is how Beijing has changed so much in the last hundred years or so. It went from being the political center to being the business and cultural center too in a very short space of time. It's almost unrecognizable today from even 30 years ago, which to me is staggering.
我要谈谈我国的首都北京及其现代历史。北京位于我国东部,靠近大海,但不是沿海城市。 它有着令人惊叹的历史,曾是许多皇帝的治所,但如今,它已成为一个摩天大楼林立的特大城市,是一个巨大的商业中心,大多数国际公司都在这里设立了总部。 由于它是我国的首都,我在历史课上了解过它,我还记得在课堂上做过一个关于它的项目,因为它是紫禁城的所在地,紫禁城是历代帝王500多年的居所,令人敬畏。长城也就在城北,您可以参观长城,感受几百年前的生活。 让我印象深刻的是,北京在过去的一百多年里发生了翻天覆地的变化。它在很短的时间内从政治中心变成了商业和文化中心。与30年前相比,今天的北京几乎面目全非,这让我感到震惊。
高分词汇
  • modern history
    现代历史
  • headquarters
    总部
  • seat of many emperors
    多位皇帝的都城
  • megacity
    特大城市
  • skyscrapers
    摩天大楼
  • business hub
    商业中心
  • Forbidden Palace
    故宫
  • awe-inspiring
    令人敬畏的
  • unrecognizable
    变化到无法认出
  • massive
    巨大的
范例
I have always been fascinated by the Renaissance period, a pivotal epoch that unfolded between the 14th and 17th centuries. This era was a beacon of revitalization in art, literature, philosophy, politics, sciences, and exploration after the Dark Ages. I was first introduced to the Renaissance period during my high school history lessons, and my fascination was ignited immediately. What happened during the Renaissance was truly revolutionary. It was marked by the profound evolution of thought processes, a fervent curiosity about the world, and the blossoming of artistic and scientific innovations. It was when luminaries like Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo transcended conventional boundaries, producing masterpieces that resonate even today. Leonardo da Vinci, epitomizing the Renaissance Man, delved into anatomy, mechanics, and aviation, and he painted the iconic 'Mona Lisa'. Meanwhile, Michelangelo sculpted 'David' and painted the Sistine Chapel’s ceiling, imbuing them with life and emotion unparalleled in human history. This period also saw the voyages of explorers like Christopher Columbus and Vasco da Gama, who paved the way for the connectivity of different civilizations. This epoch intrigues me because it signifies humanity’s unwavering pursuit of knowledge, enlightenment, and aesthetic perfection. The curiosity and passion of the Renaissance thinkers and creators inspire me to question, learn, and create, and it reminds me of the boundless potentials of the human mind when driven by curiosity and passion.
我一直对文艺复兴时期充满了浓厚的兴趣,这是一个发生在14到17世纪间的关键时代。在黑暗时代之后,这个时代在艺术、文学、哲学、政治、科学和探险方面都焕发了新生。我是在高中历史课上第一次了解到文艺复兴时期的,从那时起我就立刻对它产生了浓厚的兴趣。 文艺复兴时期发生的事情确实具有革命性。它以深刻的思维方式变革、对世界的强烈好奇心以及艺术和科学创新的极大繁荣为特征。这个时期的代表人物如莱昂纳多·达·芬奇和米开朗基罗突破了传统界限,创作出直至今日仍具影响力的杰作。 达·芬奇是文艺复兴时期的象征,他深入研究了解剖学、机械学和航空学,并绘制了标志性的《蒙娜丽莎》。而米开朗基罗则创作了《大卫》并绘制了西斯廷礼拜堂的天花板,赋予了他们前所未有的生命和情感。同时,这个时期还见证了克里斯托弗·哥伦布和达·伽马等探险家的航行,他们为不同文明的联系铺平了道路。 这个时代之所以吸引我,是因为它象征着人类对知识、启蒙和美学完美的坚定追求。文艺复兴时期的思考者和创造者的好奇心和激情激励着我去质疑、学习和创造,并且提醒我,当人类的心灵被好奇心和激情驱动时,其潜力是无穷的。
语法分析
• 复合句结构丰富:答案中运用了众多的复合句。例如:"It was when luminaries like Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo transcended conventional boundaries, producing masterpieces that resonate even today." 这个句子用了“like”来列举例子,并通过“producing”形成了分词结构。 • 时态运用多样:答案中使用了一般过去时、一般现在时来描述不同时期的情况。例如:"I was first introduced to the Renaissance period during my high school history lessons," 这句用了一般过去时。 • 连贯性和层次感:通过使用"meanwhile," "also," 和 "because,"等词,答案呈现了良好的连贯性和层次感,使描述更为清晰和逻辑。 • 精确丰富的词汇选择:通过使用"pivotal," "beacon," 和 "resonate"等词,答案展现了丰富和精确的词汇,使描述更加生动和具体。
高分词汇
  • Renaissance
    文艺复兴
  • epoch
    时代
  • Dark Ages
    黑暗时代
  • revolutionary
    革命性
  • luminaries
    代表人物
  • enlightenment
    启蒙
  • blossoming
    繁荣
  • epitomizing
    象征
  • inspire
    激励
  • unwavering pursuit
    坚定追求