7 分范例
话题: Describe an occasion when you waited a long time for a nice thing
范例
A meal for the family When it happened I'm going to talk about the time I cooked a huge meal for all my family at my house about one month ago. What the nice thing was It was my mum's 50th birthday and we'd been planning it for quite a while. How long you waited We had toyed with the idea a few months prior to her birthday and only really decided to do it a month before her actual birthday. Once I had made the menu, it was just a case of waiting for it to come. At that time, my uncle, who is a chef, changed the menu a number of times. Why you waited for a long time Because it was my mum's 50th, we wanted to make it special and so I, my sister and my uncle had got together months before to discuss ideas about what we could do to celebrate it. We had been thinking about restaurants, or trips to the countryside together but they all proved quite expensive. So finally, we decided to hold the party in my house. And then, we just had to wait for the big day to arrive. Explain how you felt about the experience I was so tired by the end because the menu I had worked on with my uncle included so many dishes. It took most of the day to make everything but the food he made was amazing and everyone commented on how great it was, which was a relief. It was good that we had planned it in advance, even though it meant waiting for the day to come, which was a little nerve-wracking.
我要讲的是大约一个月前,我在家里为全家人做了一顿大餐。 那天是我妈妈的 50 岁生日,我们计划了很久。 我们在她生日前几个月就有了这个想法,直到她真正生日前一个月才真正决定要做。我做好菜单后,就等着它的到来了。在那段时间里,我的厨师叔叔多次更改菜单。 因为这是我妈妈的 50 岁生日,我们想把它办得特别一些,所以我、我姐姐和我叔叔在几个月前就聚在一起讨论我们可以做些什么来庆祝生日。我们曾想过去餐馆吃饭,或者一起去郊外旅行,但事实证明这些活动都相当昂贵。最后,我们决定在我家举办派对。 然后,我们就等着大日子的到来了。 最后我累得不行,因为我和叔叔一起设计的菜单上有很多菜。我花了大半天的时间做完了所有的菜,但他做的菜非常棒,每个人都夸他做的菜很棒,这让我松了一口气。尽管等待这一天的到来,让我们有点紧张,但好在我们提前做了计划。
高分词汇
  • cook a huge meal
    烹制丰盛的一餐
  • toy with the idea
    考虑这个想法
  • prior to
    在……之前
  • a number of times
    好几次
  • amazing
    令人惊叹的
  • include so many dishes
    包含许多菜肴
  • prove
    证明
  • plan in advance
    提前计划
  • big day to arrive
    大日子来临
  • nerve-wracking
    令人紧张不安的
范例
I remember the anticipation vividly; it was in my freshman year of college when I found myself waiting for something truly special - my first-ever DSLR camera. I had been enamored with photography for years and had always dreamt of owning a professional-grade camera. The catch, however, was the hefty price tag. As a student on a tight budget, I had to save money diligently for several months. During that time, I worked part-time jobs, avoided frivolous expenses, and even sold some items online. It was a prolonged period of scrimping and saving, which, at times, felt quite laborious. When the day finally arrived to make the purchase, my heart was pounding with excitement and a tinge of anxiety. The moment I held the camera in my hands, a rush of euphoria washed over me. It felt as though all the waiting and sacrifice had culminated in this singular moment. Looking back, the experience was a blend of anticipation and satisfaction, tinged with the valuable lesson of patience. The wait taught me the worth of delayed gratification, and that sometimes, the best things in life are those for which we have waited patiently. In this case, the protracted wait made the eventual acquisition feel all the more rewarding.
我清晰地记得那份期待;那是在我大学新生的那一年,我发现自己在等待一个真正特殊的东西——我的第一台DSLR相机。我多年来一直对摄影着迷,并一直梦想拥有一台专业级的相机。 然而,问题是那高昂的价格标签。作为一个预算有限的学生,我不得不苦苦地攒钱好几个月。在那段时间里,我做了兼职工作,避免了不必要的开支,甚至在网上卖了一些东西。那是一个漫长的节俭和储蓄的时期,有时感觉相当辛苦。 当终于到了购买的那一天,我心跳加速,既兴奋又有点焦虑。当我手里拿到相机的那一刻,一股欣快感冲洗了过来。感觉就像所有的等待和牺牲都在这一个瞬间达到了高潮。 回顾起来,这次经历是期待和满足的混合体,还带有耐心的宝贵教训。等待让我懂得了延迟满足的价值,有时候,生活中最好的东西就是那些我们耐心等待的。在这种情况下,漫长的等待使得最终的获得感到更加值得。
语法分析
● 复杂句和简单句结合: 例如,"When the day finally arrived to make the purchase, my heart was pounding with excitement and a tinge of anxiety," 这个句子使用了“when”来引出时间状语从句。 ● 时态运用恰当: 答案使用了一般过去时来描述过去的事件,如 "I had been enamored with photography for years." ● 表达层次感: 使用了诸如 "however," "during that time," 和 "looking back" 等短语,表达了层次感和深度。 ● 逻辑连贯和时间线性: 通过使用“when,” “finally,” 和“therefore,” 答案确保了时间和逻辑的连贯性。 ● 高级词汇和准确性: 使用了"culminated," "protracted," 和 "acquisition" 等词,显示了词汇的高级和准确。
高分词汇
  • Anticipation
    期待
  • Enamored
    着迷
  • Hefty price tag
    高昂的价格
  • Diligently
    勤奋地
  • Frivolous expenses
    不必要的开支
  • Prolonged
    漫长的
  • Culminated
    达到高潮
  • Delayed gratification
    延迟满足
  • Protracted
    延长的
  • Acquisition
    获得