7 分范例
话题: Describe a place you went to where the air was not clean
范例
A visit to an industrial city Where the place was I'm going to talk about a city I visited a couple of years ago called Linfen, which is located in Shanxi Province in China. It's quite infamous for its pollution levels due to heavy industrial activities. When and Why you went there I went there in the autumn of 2018 because I was doing a research project on industrial pollution and its effects on urban environments for my university course. It was essential to collect firsthand data and observations for my study. Why the air was not clean The air in Linfen was heavily polluted primarily because of the numerous coal mines and factories surrounding the area. These industries emit a significant amount of pollutants, including sulfur dioxide and fine particulate matter, which contribute to the dense smog and poor air quality. And explain how you felt about being in a place where the air was not clean Being in Linfen was quite an eye-opening experience for me. Initially, I felt overwhelmed by the visible haze that seemed to blanket the city constantly. It was disheartening to see the sun obscured by pollution and to witness locals going about their daily lives wearing masks. Breathing in the air there made me feel uneasy and concerned about the health implications for the people living in such conditions. It underscored the urgent need for sustainable practices and stricter environmental regulations to protect urban environments and public health. This experience deeply motivated me to advocate for environmental issues and contributed significantly to my research project, providing a stark, real-world example of the challenges and impacts of industrial pollution.
访问一个工业城市 所在地 我要谈论的是我几年前去过的一个城市，叫临汾，位于中国山西省。由于大量的工业活动，它因污染水平而臭名昭著。 去过那里的时间和原因 我在2018年秋天去了那里，因为我正在做一个关于工业污染及其对城市环境影响的研究项目，作为我的大学课程的一部分。收集第一手数据和观察对我的研究至关重要。 为什么空气不干净 临汾的空气严重受到污染，主要是因为周围有众多的煤矿和工厂。这些工业排放大量污染物，包括二氧化硫和细颗粒物，导致浓雾和空气质量不佳。 并解释你在一个空气不干净的地方感受如何 在临汾的经历让我大开眼界。起初，我感到被这一直笼罩在城市上空的雾霾所压倒。看到太阳被污染物遮掩，看到当地人戴着口罩过日常生活，这令人沮丧。呼吸那里的空气让我感到不安，并担心生活在这种条件下的人们的健康影响。这凸显了为保护城市环境和公共卫生，迫切需要可持续做法和更严格的环境法规。这种经历深深激励着我倡导环境问题，并对我的研究项目产生了重要影响，提供了一个明显的、现实世界的工业污染挑战和影响的例子。
语法分析
答案有效地利用各种语法结构来增强清晰度和深度。使用过去简单时态来描述已经发生的事件，例如“我在2018年秋天去了那里”。使用复杂句子提供详细解释，例如“这些产业释放大量污染物，包括二氧化硫和细颗粒物，这些污染物导致浓雾和空气质量不佳。”使用情态动词像“是必不可少的”和“让我感到”有效地表达了必要性和个人反应。答案还展示了良好地使用被动语态来集中在动作而不是施动者身上，如“看到太阳被污染遮蔽让人沮丧”。
高分词汇
  • - **industrial city**: Specific type of city characterized by heavy industry.
    - **工业城市**：具有重工业特点的特定类型城市。
  • - **infamous**: Well known for some bad quality or deed, used here to emphasize the negative reputation due to pollution.
    - **臭名昭著**：因为某些坏的品质或行为而出名，这里用于强调因污染而导致的负面声誉。
  • - **pollution levels**: A measure of the amount and severity of pollutants.
    - 污染水平：衡量污染物的数量和严重程度。
  • - **heavy industrial activities**: Describes the intense industrial operations which are implied to be the source of pollution.
    - **重工业活动**：描述了被暗示为污染源的强烈工业运营。
  • - **firsthand data**: Directly obtained data, emphasizing the authenticity and direct observation.
    - 直接获取的数据，强调真实性和直接观察。
  • - **sulfur dioxide and fine particulate matter**: Specific pollutants mentioned to show detailed knowledge of the types of pollution.
    - 二氧化硫和细颗粒物: 提到的具体污染物，显示出对不同污染类型的详细了解。
  • - **dense smog**: Thick, visible air pollution, enhancing the imagery of severe pollution.
    - **浓雾**: 浓密且显眼的空气污染，增强了严重污染的形象。
  • - **obscured by pollution**: Indicates how pollution has covered or hidden something, in this case, the sun.
    - **被污染遮挡**: 表示污染覆盖或隐藏了某些事物，本例中是太阳。
  • - **health implications**: Refers to the effects or consequences on health due to the polluted environment.
    - **健康影响**：指由于污染环境而对健康造成的影响或后果。
  • - **sustainable practices and stricter environmental regulations**: Solutions or measures suggested to combat the issue of pollution.
    - **可持续实践和更严格的环境法规**：提出的解决方案或措施来应对污染问题。
  • - **advocate for environmental issues**: To support or argue for the protection and preservation of the environment.
    - **支持环境问题的倡导者**：支持或辩护环境的保护和保留。
  • - **stark, real-world example**: A clear and impactful real-life instance used to illustrate a point or issue.
    - 明显的现实世界例子
  • These vocabulary choices are crucial as they not only describe the situation accurately but also reflect a higher level of language proficiency by using specific and technical terms related to the topic of pollution and environmental science.
    这些词汇选择至关重要，因为它们不仅准确描述了情况，还通过使用与污染和环境科学主题相关的具体和技术术语反映了更高水平的语言熟练程度。