7 分范例

问题: What activities do people do in their free time?

思路 1

Entertainment and Relaxation
娱乐和放松
考官答案
There are many ways to entertain ourselves now. One popular way, especially for certain ages, is playing video games. The video games industry is very big and makes a lot of money because of so many players. Online gaming has also changed how people play games and is growing.
现在有很多种方式来让让自己进行娱乐。一个流行的方式,特别是对某些年龄段的人来说,是玩电子游戏。电子游戏行业非常庞大,由于有很多玩家,所以赚了很多钱。在线游戏也改变了人们玩游戏的方式,并且正在增长。
There’s a huge range of ways to entertain ourselves these days. I suppose one of the most popular, depending on our age, is playing video games. The video games industry is enormous and generates billions of dollars these days due to the number of players that are out there now. Online gaming has changed the way people play games too and this is an area of growth.
如今娱乐自己的方式有很多种。 我想根据我们的年龄,最受欢迎的活动之一是玩电子游戏。 视频游戏行业规模庞大,由于玩家数量众多,如今创造了数十亿美元的收入。 在线游戏也改变了人们玩游戏的方式,这是一个增长的领域。
语法分析
条件状语从句:"depending on our age" 使用条件状语从句来指出特定条件下的情况,即年龄对于选择娱乐方式的影响。 现在进行时:"is playing" 和 "is growing" 使用现在进行时,表示正在发生或发展中的趋势或活动,增加了句子的即时性和动态性。 被动语态:"is changed" 使用被动语态来描述在线游戏如何影响了游戏方式,强调了在线游戏作为主动者对游戏习惯的影响。
高分词汇
  • huge
    大量的
  • enormous
    庞大的
  • generates
    - 产生
  • are out there
    改变
  • growth
    - 增长

思路 2

Learning and Personal Development
学习和个人发展
考官答案
With the internet, people are learning new things by themselves. Many people take online courses in their spare time to get new skills or learn languages. I see a lot of people using language learning apps on their phones, which are like games and quite attractive. The advantage is that we can learn anytime we have free time.
有了互联网,人们开始自学新东西。很多人在空闲时间上网课,要么提高技能,要么学习新语言。我看到很多人在手机上用类似游戏的应用学习语言,这非常吸引人。好处是我们可以在任何有空的时候学习。
With internet access, people are taking it upon themselves to learn new things. Millions now do online courses in their free time to either upskill or learn a new language. I see so many people learning languages on apps on their phones and they are presented in a game-like style which is really attractive. The benefit is that we can do this whenever we have some free time.
通过互联网,人们开始主动学习新事物。 现在,数百万人在空闲时间参加在线课程,以提高技能或学习新语言。 我看到很多人在手机上的应用程序上学习语言,并且它们以类似游戏的风格呈现,这非常有吸引力。 这样做的好处是,只要有空闲时间,我们就可以这样做。
语法分析
动名词短语:"learning new things" 使用动名词短语作主语,描述人们通过互联网进行的活动,增加了句子的动态性。 条件状语从句:"whenever we have some free time" 使用条件状语从句来设置学习的可能时机,强调了学习的灵活性。 被动语态:"are presented" 使用被动语态来描述应用程序如何展示语言学习,强调了应用程序的作用。
高分词汇
  • taking it upon themselves
    主动
  • upskill
    - 提升技能
  • presented
    出现
  • game-like style
    - 游戏化风格
  • attractive
    - 吸引人的
  • benefit
    - 好处