7 分范例

问题: Why do some people in the workplace dislike technology?

思路 1

Privacy and Security
隐私与安全
考官答案
It's true that we share a lot about ourselves on the internet, and I think this is why some people don't like using technology. For instance, some people won't use a work phone because they don't want their internet searches to be seen, or they worry about their employer watching them.
我们在互联网上确实分享了很多关于自己的信息,我认为这就是为什么有些人不喜欢使用技术。比如,有些人不愿意使用工作手机,因为他们不想让别人看到他们的互联网搜索记录,或者他们担心被雇主监视。
There is certainly something to be said about how much of ourselves we put on the internet and I think that’s why some people really dislike using technology. There are people that refuse to have a work phone, for example, because they don’t want their internet search history out there, or they feel like they are being watched by their employer.
我们在互联网上展示了多少自己的信息,这当然是有道理的,我想这也是为什么有些人非常不喜欢使用技术的原因。 例如,有些人拒绝接受工作电话,因为他们不希望自己的网络搜索记录被公开,或者他们觉得自己被雇主监视着。
语法分析
现在分词作状语:"being watched by their employer" 使用现在分词作状语,表示被雇主监视的持续状态,增加了句子的复杂性。 宾语从句:"they don’t want their internet search history out there" 使用宾语从句来详细说明某些人的担忧,增强了句子的信息量和深度。
高分词汇
  • something to be said
    有话要说
  • refuse
    拒绝
  • internet search history
    互联网搜索历史

思路 2

Work-Life Balance and Health
工作生活平衡与健康
考官答案
Many people now feel that technology causes longer work hours. It seems like we can't turn off and are always reachable. For example, when commuting home, we can still get work emails or messages and are expected to reply. I think this discourages many people because they want their free time to really be free.
现在很多人觉得技术导致了更长的工作时间。好像我们无法关掉设备,总是能被联系到。例如,在回家的路上,我们仍然可以收到工作邮件或信息,并且被期望回复。我认为这让很多人感到沮丧,因为他们希望自己的空闲时间真正是空闲的。
I think a lot of people now are finding that technology is leading to longer hours. It’s like we can’t switch off and we are always contactable. So, on our commute home from work, for example, we can still receive work emails or messages and we are expected to answer. I think this puts a lot of people off as they want their free time to actually be free time.
我认为,现在很多人都发现,技术正在导致工作时间的延长。 这就好像我们无法关机,我们总是可以联系到别人。 例如,在下班回家的路上,我们仍然会收到工作邮件或信息,而且我们必须回复。 我认为这让很多人望而却步,因为他们希望自己的空闲时间是真正的空闲时间。
语法分析
现在进行时:"are finding" 使用现在进行时表明这是一个当前和正在发生的趋势,突出了技术影响的持续性。 被动语态:"are expected to answer" 使用被动语态,强调了对个人的期望是由外界施加的,增强了句子的含义和情感色彩。
高分词汇
  • switch off
    关闭
  • contactable
    可联系的
  • commute home
    下班回家
  • expected to answer
    被期望回答
  • free time
    空闲时间
  • puts a lot of people off
    使人沮丧