7 分范例

问题: What goals should a society have?

思路 1

Economic Development
经济发展
考官答案
I think it's really important to balance between rich people and poor people. The money made by a society should be shared fairly among everyone. If not, there will be problems later on. People need to feel they are part of society's growth, or else they might feel left out.
我认为平衡富人和穷人之间的关系非常重要。社会创造的财富应该公平地分配给所有人。如果不这样做,以后会有问题。人们需要感觉到他们是社会发展的一部分,否则他们可能会觉得被忽视了。
I suppose the most important thing is to make sure that there is a balance between the haves and the have-nots. The wealth that a society creates needs to be fairly distributed amongst the people otherwise problems occur further down the line. People need to feel that they are part of the growth of a society as without that, they feel disenfranchised.
我认为最重要的是确保富人和穷人之间的平衡。 一个社会创造的财富需要在人们之间公平分配,否则问题就会进一步出现。 人们需要感觉到自己是社会发展的一部分,否则他们会感到自己被剥夺了权利。
语法分析
被动语态: "needs to be fairly distributed" 这句话中使用了被动语态,说明财富分配是被动地发生的,展示了语言的复杂性。 条件句: "otherwise problems occur" 使用条件句来表达如果不公平分配财富,将会导致问题的结果,显示了逻辑思维和句子结构的复杂性。 现在完成时: "have been disenfranchised" 这个表达使用了现在完成时态,表示一种从过去持续到现在的状态,体现了语法的准确性和复杂性。
高分词汇
  • the haves and the have-nots
    富人和穷人
  • wealth
    财富
  • fairly distributed
    公平分配
  • otherwise
    否则
  • disenfranchised
    权利被剥夺

思路 2

Social Welfare
社会福利
考官答案
Nowadays, healthcare is a big thing that people care about, so having healthcare for everyone is an important goal. With technology getting better quickly, medical care is also improving, and people know this. They want to get help when they need it. As the population in many countries is aging, more countries are trying to find ways to provide healthcare to all.
现在,医疗保健是人们关心的一个大问题,所以为每个人提供医疗保健是一个重要目标。随着技术的快速进步,医疗保健也在改进,人们对此很清楚。他们希望在需要的时候能得到帮助。随着许多国家人口的老龄化,越来越多的国家正在寻找为所有人提供医疗保健的方法。
In today’s world, healthcare seems to be one of the biggest factors that people are thinking about so universal access to healthcare is a major goal. As technology is developing so fast, so is medical care and the people are very aware of this, and they want to be able to get help when they need it. I think as the population of many countries starts to get older, more countries are looking at ways to do this.
在当今世界,医疗保健似乎是人们考虑的最大因素之一,因此普遍获得医疗保健是一个主要目标。 随着科技发展如此之快,医疗保健也如此,人们非常意识到这一点,他们希望能够在需要时获得帮助。 我认为随着许多国家的人口开始老龄化,更多的国家正在寻找实现这一目标的方法。
语法分析
现在进行时: "is developing" 和 "is improving" 这两个表达使用了现在进行时态,说明技术和医疗保健的改进是一个正在进行的过程,展示了语言的活跃性和时效性。 从句: "as the population of many countries starts to get older" 使用了从句来提供原因或背景,说明为什么更多的国家正在考虑这个问题,增加了句子的复杂性。 被动语态: "to be able to get help" 使用了被动语态,强调人们希望能得到帮助,而非谁来提供帮助,展示了句子结构的复杂性和语言的准确性。
高分词汇
  • healthcare
    保健医疗
  • factor
    因素
  • universal access
    全民可及
  • major goal
    重要目标
  • medical care
    医疗保健
  • aware
    意识到