7 分范例

问题: What public morals should people follow in your country?

思路 1

Respect and Politeness
尊重和礼貌
考官答案
I think being polite when talking to others is important. Many young people forget to use "please" and "thank you" nowadays, but these words really matter in daily talk. It's very rude not to say them in a shop to the person helping you. Being polite is a simple way to show you care about others.
我认为与他人交谈时保持礼貌非常重要。如今,很多年轻人忘记了使用“请”和“谢谢”,但这些词在日常对话中真的很重要。在商店里不对帮助你的人说这些话是非常无礼的。礼貌是表达对他人考虑的一种简单方式。
I’d definitely say speaking in a polite way to others. The magic words "please" and "thank you" seem to have been forgotten by lots of younger people today and it makes such a difference in everyday communication. It’s incredibly rude to buy something in a shop and not say them to the person serving you. It’s a way of showing consideration to others and it is so easy to do.
我肯定会说用礼貌的方式与他人交谈非常重要。今天很多年轻人似乎忘记了“请”和“谢谢”这些神奇的词汇,而这些词在日常交流中真的可以带来很大的不同。在商店购物时不对服务你的人说这些词是极其粗鲁的。这是一种对他人的体贴,而且做起来非常简单。
语法分析
使用了肯定的态度:"I’d definitely say" 这种肯定的说法表示了强烈的意见,增加了句子的语气和明确性。 被动语态:"have been forgotten" 使用被动语态表明“please”和“thank you”被忘记了,显示了这些词被动地失去了重要性,增加了句子的复杂性。
高分词汇
  • definitely
    绝对地
  • magic words
    神奇的词汇
  • makes such a difference
    区别很大
  • incredibly rude
    极其粗鲁的
  • consideration
    体贴

思路 2

Cleanliness and Environmental Responsibility
清洁和环境责任
考官答案
Definitely not throwing rubbish on the ground. It's so annoying that some people still litter, even when a bin is close by. And smokers often don't think their cigarette butts are litter, but they are. It's frustrating, and it seems like even with the government talking about it, people don't change their habits.
当然,不要把垃圾扔在地上。有些人即使垃圾桶就在附近,仍然乱扔垃圾,这真的很烦人。吸烟者经常不认为他们的烟蒂是垃圾,但实际上是。这让人感到沮丧,似乎即使政府强调这个问题,人们也不改变他们的习惯。
For sure, not littering. It’s infuriating that, in this day and age, there are still people who throw their rubbish on the floor, sometimes even when there is a bin within arm’s reach. Smokers also think that their cigarette butts aren’t counted as litter and still throw them on the floor. It drives me mad and it seems that no matter how much the government highlights this issue, people can’t change their ways.
当然了,不乱扔垃圾。在这个时代,仍然有人随地扔垃圾,有时甚至在垃圾桶近在咫尺时也这样做,这真让人愤怒。吸烟者也认为他们的烟头不算是垃圾,仍然随地扔。这让我非常生气,似乎无论政府如何强调这个问题,人们都无法改变他们的习惯。
语法分析
现在分词作主语:"not littering" 使用现在分词短语“not littering”作为主语,强调不乱扔垃圾的重要性,增加了句子的信息量和准确性。 条件状语从句:"even when there is a bin within arm’s reach" 使用条件状语从句来描述一个特定情况,即即使垃圾桶很近,人们仍然乱扔垃圾,增加了句子的复杂性和具体性。 因果关系:"It drives me mad" 这个因果关系句子表达了乱扔垃圾的行为对说话者的影响,即让他感到愤怒,强调了行为的负面影响。
高分词汇
  • littering
    乱扔垃圾
  • infuriating
    令人愤怒的
  • in this day and age
    在今天这个时代
  • within arm’s reach
    近在咫尺
  • cigarette butts
    烟头
  • drives me mad
    让我很生气
  • no matter how much
    无论多少
  • change their ways
    改变他们的习惯

思路 3

Social Responsibility and Community Engagement
社会责任和社区参与
考官答案
I wish people would volunteer more in their communities. Nowadays, we're so focused on our own lives that we don't notice what's happening around us. Volunteering doesn't have to take a lot of time. Even simple things like checking on elderly neighbors used to be common, but now, not many people do it.
我希望人们能在他们的社区里做更多的志愿工作。如今,我们太专注于自己的生活,以至于没有注意到周围发生的事情。志愿服务也不一定非得耗费很多时间。即使是像以前很常见的简单事情,比如去看望老年邻居,现在也没有多少人做了。
Volunteering in the community is something I’d like to see people do more of. We seem so wrapped up in our own worlds these days that we don’t see what’s happening around us in our own communities. It doesn’t have to be time consuming either. Something like just checking in on elderly neighbors used to be commonplace, but nowadays fewer and few people do it.
我希望看到人们更多地参与社区志愿服务。现在我们似乎都过于专注于自己的世界,以至于忽略了周围社区中发生的事情。志愿服务也不一定要花费很多时间。比如,以前经常会有人去看望年长的邻居,但现在这样做的人越来越少了。
语法分析
动名词作主语:"Volunteering in the community" 使用动名词短语“Volunteering in the community”作为主语,突出了主题,即社区志愿服务的重要性。 现在进行时:"We seem so wrapped up" 使用现在进行时态表达了一种当前普遍的状态,即人们专注于自己的生活,增加了句子的现实感和时效性。 比较级:"fewer and fewer people" 使用比较级结构来表达一种逐渐减少的趋势,即越来越少的人去看望年长邻居,增加了句子的动态感。
高分词汇
  • volunteering
    志愿服务
  • do more of
    更多参与
  • wrapped up in
    专注于
  • time consuming
    耗时的
  • checking in on
    看望
  • elderly
    年长的
  • commonplace
    常见的