购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (Yes/No and why). Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I prefer shopping online rather than in malls. I don’t like crowded places, so I find online shopping much more comfortable and convenient. For example, I can compare items and buy what I need from home without dealing with long queues.

建议: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and complete supporting reasons. Avoid filler sounds and unfinished clauses. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example of how you compare prices (apps, websites, or visiting stores).

示例: Yes, I always compare prices before I buy something. Because I want to make sure the item is worth the money, I check several websites and read reviews. For example, I often use a price comparison app to find the best deal before purchasing electronics.

建议: Avoid contradictory statements and organize your answer: state clearly whether it is difficult or not, then explain with a reason and an example. Keep sentences short and coherent, and use linking words (however, so) correctly. Remove repetition.

示例: No, generally it is not difficult for me to choose what to buy. If I find something I like, I usually decide quickly because I prefer to finish shopping fast. However, if there are many similar options, I might compare features briefly before choosing.

建议: Good content and clear opinion — improve sentence structure and provide a specific example or brief comparison to support your view. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and avoid vague phrasing. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: No, expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. For example, some lesser-known brands offer excellent quality at a lower price, while some expensive brands charge more for the name than for better materials. Therefore I check reviews and materials before deciding.

× I would love to talk about a shopping.

✓ I would love to talk about shopping.

'Shopping' is an uncountable noun here and does not need the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to use the correct form.

× I don't really prefer to go for shopping in a mall but I love to do online shopping as they are to different ways of doing shopping.

✓ I don't really prefer going shopping in a mall, but I love to do online shopping because they are two different ways of shopping.

Use the gerund 'going shopping' rather than 'go for shopping'. Use 'two' instead of 'to' and 'ways of shopping' is more natural than 'ways of doing shopping'. Also separate clauses with a comma and use 'because' for reason.

× So because I don't like too much crowd or I don't feel good in the mall when the mall is too much filled with people so I prefer to shop when.

✓ Because I don't like crowds or I don't feel comfortable in a mall when it is too crowded, I prefer to shop online.

'Too much crowd' is incorrect; use 'crowds' (plural). 'Feel good in the mall' should be 'feel comfortable in a mall'. 'Too much filled with people' is awkward; use 'too crowded'. The sentence ended abruptly with 'so I prefer to shop when'—complete the thought and specify 'online'.

× Yes, I do compare prices while uh shopping, because it is very important to understand if you're spending a certain amount of money, so the product should be worth worthy enough for that price.

✓ Yes, I compare prices while shopping, because it is important to know that if you are spending a certain amount of money, the product should be worth that price.

Use 'compare prices while shopping' without filler 'do' and 'uh'. 'Worth worthy' is redundant; use 'worth that price' or 'worthwhile'. Also 'understand if' is better expressed as 'know that if'. Maintain consistent contraction style: 'you are' -> 'you are' or 'you're'.

× So it is so important I compare price because in terms of.

✓ So it is very important that I compare prices because of value for money.

Original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Add 'that' and plural 'prices'. Finish the clause with a clear reason such as 'because of value for money'.

× No, I don't think so. I find it, I find it very difficult because when if I some, if I like something, if the product is so nice, so I'll just grab it in the mall or in the shop and I'll just take it.

✓ No, I don't think so. I don't find it very difficult; if I like something and the product is nice, I'll just grab it in the mall or shop and buy it.

Confusing repetition 'I find it, I find it very difficult' contradicts 'No'. Change to 'I don't find it very difficult'. Remove redundant 'when if I some'. Use 'buy it' instead of 'take it' for clarity.

× Because I feel like if you go for shopping or if you shop online, there's a very you should spend limited amount of time even in while you are doing shopping.

✓ Because I feel that whether you go shopping in person or shop online, you should spend a limited amount of time while shopping.

Use 'go shopping' or 'shop online' rather than 'go for shopping'. Remove extra words 'there's a very you'. Use 'a limited amount of time' and 'while shopping' to be concise.

× Not really, sometimes you can get good quality product in cheaper price rather than higher price or expensive product.

✓ Not really. Sometimes you can get a good-quality product at a cheaper price than at a higher price or for an expensive product.

Use 'a good-quality product' and 'at a cheaper price' rather than 'in cheaper price'. For comparisons, use 'cheaper than' and include 'at' for price expressions.

× Because I feel like expensive and cheaper products depends on the brand as well.

✓ Because I feel that whether products are expensive or cheap depends on the brand as well.

Subject-verb agreement and structure: 'expensive and cheaper products depends' is incorrect. Use 'whether products are expensive or cheap' and singular verb 'depends' agreeing with 'whether...depends'.

× There are a lot of brands, they sell products in a very high price but their quality is extremely cheap so vice versa.

✓ There are a lot of brands that sell products at very high prices but have poor quality, and vice versa.

Combine the clauses using 'that' instead of a comma splice. Use 'at very high prices' not 'in a very high price'. 'Quality is extremely cheap' is incorrect; say 'poor quality'. Add 'and vice versa' to indicate the reverse situation properly.