购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific examples. Avoid filler words and repetitions, and correct basic grammar (e.g., ‘I love spending money on cosmetics, coats and food’). Aim for 2–3 sentences, using linking words if needed.

示例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I often buy cosmetics, coats and snacks, and I like to look for cute items. For example, last month I bought a warm coat and a new lipstick that I wear often.

建议: Give a clear reason and a brief supporting detail. Use linking words (because, so) and correct grammar (compare prices and quality; higher-priced items often have better quality). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I usually compare prices and also check the quality because more expensive items are often better made. Therefore, if the quality is clearly higher, I am willing to pay more for something durable.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific condition that affects your choices. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words (when, so) and correct grammar (It depends on my mood). Aim for 2–3 complete sentences.

示例: It depends on my mood. When I am trying to save money, I decide more quickly and buy only essentials, but when I’m willing to spend, I take longer to compare options.

建议: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (brand, sometimes) and use linking words (however, for example). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better. Sometimes famous brands charge more for their name, while a cheaper local brand can offer equal or better quality; for example, I once bought a local speaker that sounded better than a well-known brand.

× Yes, I absolutely like shopping because I live spending the money like I spending the money on uh, the cosmetic, the coats and the food I like or something. You've like a cute stuff.

✓ Yes, I absolutely like shopping because I love spending money on cosmetics, coats, food, and cute things.

The sentence misuses pronouns and verbs: 'live spending' should be 'love spending' (verb choice) and 'the money' is unnecessary; use 'money' without 'the'. 'I spending' is ungrammatical; use 'spending' with 'love' or 'I spend'. 'the cosmetic' and 'the coats' should be plural or general nouns: 'cosmetics' and 'coats'. 'You've like a cute stuff' is incorrect pronoun and verb usage; use 'cute things' (plural) and remove 'you've like'. Overall, simplify structure and use correct verb forms and pronouns. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronouns and verbs, use plural nouns for general items, and keep verb 'love' for liking an activity.

× Yes, I often compare the prices when I shop but but I also compared the quality effect.

✓ Yes, I often compare prices when I shop, but I also compare the quality.

The student uses 'compared' (past form) in a sentence describing a habitual action; present simple 'compare' is required. Also 'the quality effect' is unclear; 'the quality' or 'quality' is correct. Use consistent present tense for habits.

× The high price, higher price but the quality is higher.

✓ Higher price often means higher quality.

The original fragments are ungrammatical and redundant. 'The high price, higher price' is unclear. Use comparative structure 'higher price' and link cause and effect: 'Higher price often means higher quality.' This corrects adjective comparison and sentence structure.

× I would pay for the higher one.

✓ I would pay for the more expensive one.

'Higher one' is awkward when referring to price; use 'more expensive one'. This corrects noun phrase choice and makes meaning clear.

× It's depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Use 'depends' (third person singular present) with 'it' as subject. 'It's depend' is incorrect because 'it's' would contract 'it is' and must be followed by a past participle or adjective, not the base verb 'depend'.

× If I feel like umm in that time I don't spend much money, I will. Can I? I could decide it more easier than the time I spend much money.

✓ If at that time I don't want to spend much money, I can decide more easily than when I plan to spend a lot.

Multiple issues: 'I will. Can I?' is inappropriate; use 'I can' or 'I am able to'. 'I could decide it more easier' mixes conditional/modal and uses incorrect comparative 'more easier' and wrong object placement. 'More easier' is wrong; use 'easier'. Also use adverb 'easily' with 'decide'. Rephrase for clarity and correct modal use ('can' for ability) and comparative/adverb forms.

× Do you think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones? Student: I think not always because sometimes the expensive band can make their price higher because of their famous band all around the world, but sometime the cheaper 1 is like have a better quality but it's a local brand so it's.

✓ I don't think so. Sometimes expensive brands raise their prices because they are famous worldwide, but sometimes cheaper ones have better quality because they are local brands.

Errors include tense and agreement: 'I think not always' should be 'I don't think so' or 'not always'. 'the expensive band' should be 'expensive brands' (spelling and plural). 'can make their price higher because of their famous band' is incorrect: use 'raise their prices because they are famous' and 'brand' not 'band'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'the cheaper 1 is like have a better quality' is ungrammatical: use 'cheaper ones have better quality'. Remove trailing 'so it's.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.