购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more concise and natural, correct small grammar issues, and add one clear supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, replace informal phrasing like "get time off" with "spend time" and avoid redundancy ("I do like" → "I like").

示例: I like shopping, but I prefer online shopping because it's more convenient. For example, I can compare items quickly and have purchases delivered to my home, so I save time and effort.

建议: Correct grammar ("As a student"), make the topic sentence direct, and use a linking word to explain the reason. Add a specific example to support your point about quality to make the answer more convincing.

示例: As a student, I often compare prices because goods are expensive here. For instance, I check reviews and materials online so I can find affordable items that are still durable and well made.

建议: Use clearer, more natural language and avoid slang like "crash out" or "chicken out." Make one concise topic sentence, then give a specific supporting detail and a linking word. Mention a coping strategy to show depth and control of the situation.

示例: Yes, I often find it difficult because I'm unhappy with my body shape, so choosing clothes that fit me well is challenging. Therefore, I usually try clothes in fitting rooms and ask a friend for advice to be more confident in my choices.

建议: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to compare both sides. Correct grammar and word choice ("stuff" not "stuffs"), and provide a specific example that contrasts quality and price.

示例: I don't think expensive products are always better; in my experience, some affordable items are very durable. For example, I bought a cheap jacket last year that kept me warm all winter, whereas an expensive shirt I bought earlier wore out quickly.

× I do like shopping but I would prefer online shopping because it's more comfortable and you don't have to run everywhere to get time off and try new clothes.

✓ I do like shopping but I would prefer online shopping because it's more comfortable and you don't have to run everywhere to try on new clothes.

The phrase 'try new clothes' is understandable but in English the correct verb phrase for testing clothing on your body is 'try on clothes.' Use the -ing form 'trying on' if continuing the clause (e.g. 'and you don't have to run everywhere trying on new clothes'), or the infinitive 'to try on' as corrected. Suggestion: use 'try on' with appropriate form for clarity.

× As a students I often compare prices when I shop because prices are too high in my country and I just can't always buy expensive things.

✓ As a student I often compare prices when I shop because prices are too high in my country and I just can't always buy expensive things.

The noun phrase refers to a single speaker, so the singular noun 'student' is required. 'Students' is plural and mismatches the singular subject 'I.' Suggestion: use 'a student' when speaking about oneself in that role.

× So I prefer getting cheaper things but I also want them to be high quality.

✓ So I prefer getting cheaper things, but I also want them to be high quality.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable, but a comma improves clarity before 'but.' The plural 'things' correctly matches 'them.' Suggestion: add a comma to separate clauses for readability.

× It's too difficult for me because I'm not happy about my looks like my body, so I'm trying to find the best clothes for my body shape but it's difficult for me so I just crash out and chicken out so I just leave the store.

✓ It's very difficult for me because I'm not happy with my looks or my body, so I'm trying to find the best clothes for my body shape, but it's hard for me and I often chicken out and leave the store.

Multiple issues: 'happy about my looks' should be 'happy with my looks' (preposition use), 'looks like my body' is incorrect word order and meaning, and repetition and colloquialisms were unclear. 'Crash out' is not appropriate here; 'chicken out' already conveys hesitation. Also streamline tense and repetition: 'it's difficult' -> 'it's hard' and 'I often chicken out and leave the store.' Suggestions: use 'happy with' for satisfaction, reorder to 'my looks or my body,' avoid redundant phrases, and use consistent simple present/present continuous forms.

× I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because as a student I said that I'm buying cheaper stuffs and they have high quality.

✓ I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because, as a student, I buy cheaper things and they can be high quality.

'Stuffs' is nonstandard; the correct plural noun is 'things.' 'I said that I'm buying' is awkward and unnecessary—use simple present 'I buy' to express habitual action. Added commas around 'as a student' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'things' and simple present for habitual behavior.

× I'm wearing it for years when I buy something cheap but also high quality.

✓ I've been wearing things I bought cheaply but that were also high quality for years.

The original mixes tenses incorrectly. To express an action continuing from the past to the present, use present perfect continuous or present perfect: 'I've been wearing' or 'I have worn.' Also 'when I buy something cheap' is not the right connector; use a relative clause describing past purchases: 'things I bought cheaply but that were high quality.' Suggestion: use present perfect to indicate duration and correct word order.

× But I think expensive products might be better too.

✓ But I think expensive products can be better too.

'Might be' implies uncertainty about possibility; 'can be' is more natural when expressing that sometimes expensive products are better. Both are possible, but 'can be' fits better with the speaker's concession. Suggestion: use 'can be' for general statements about possibility.