礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid unrelated words (e.g. "tips" vs "gifts"), reduce repetition, and use linking words to explain why you feel that way. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g. "good at choosing gifts"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: I'm not very good at choosing gifts on my own because it stresses me to find the right thing. Therefore I usually ask my sister for help since she has excellent taste and understands the recipient's preferences. As a result, I feel more confident giving gifts when I follow her suggestions.

建议: Answer directly with a topic sentence naming typical occasions, then add a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid irrelevant words like "locations" and correct nouns/plurals. Be specific about examples.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings and baby showers. However, I also sometimes give small presents for informal reasons, for example to celebrate a friend passing an important exam.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the main consideration, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid vague phrases like "suits our nature." Mention concrete factors (needs, hobbies, usefulness, uniqueness).

示例: I consider the recipient's needs and preferences first; for instance, I think about her hobbies and daily routines. Therefore I try to choose something useful and personal—something she doesn't already own that will remind her of me.

建议: Keep the answer concise and fluent: state clearly that you have given handmade gifts, explain what you make, and describe the reaction in one or two supporting sentences. Remove hesitations and repetition; use correct word forms ("handmade," "jewelry," "well made").

示例: Yes, I often give handmade gifts because I enjoy making jewelry. My friends always appreciate these presents because they are personal and well made, and they say the gifts feel more meaningful than store-bought items.

建议: Answer directly and support with clear reasoning and an example. Avoid unclear sentences like "There are no cheaper expensive gifts." Use linking words (however, because) and correct comparative structures. Provide a brief example to illustrate your point.

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. What matters is the thought behind the gift because a small, thoughtful present can show more care than an expensive but impersonal item; for example, a handwritten letter or homemade treat often feels more meaningful than an expensive gadget.

× Well, I'm not very good at giving tips because sometimes it gives me stress when I'm thinking to give something to someone.

✓ Well, I'm not very good at giving gifts because sometimes it stresses me when I'm thinking about giving something to someone.

Incorrect verb form and collocations: 'gives me stress' is unnatural; use 'stresses me' or 'it stresses me out'. 'Thinking to give' is incorrect; use 'thinking about giving'. Also 'tips' is the wrong word for presents; 'gifts' is appropriate for context.

× My sister is having really a great choice and great taste in selecting gifts.

✓ My sister has really great taste and makes good choices when selecting gifts.

Wrong verb 'is having' for possession; use 'has'. Word order and redundant 'great choice and great taste' improved to 'great taste and makes good choices'. This corrects tense and phrasing.

× She understand the person very well and accordingly she selects script.

✓ She understands people very well and accordingly she selects appropriate gifts.

Missing third-person singular -s: 'understand' -> 'understands'. 'Person' should be plural or 'the person' depending on meaning; 'selects script' is incorrect vocabulary; likely meant 'selects gifts' or 'appropriate gifts'.

× So I always go with her.

✓ So I always go along with her.

'Go with her' is understandable but 'go along with her' is more natural in this context meaning 'I follow her choice'. This improves idiomatic expression.

× There are several locations we can give gifts to others, for example during wedding ceremonies or during birthday or baby shower.

✓ There are several occasions when we give gifts to others, for example at weddings, birthdays, or baby showers.

Use 'occasions' not 'locations'. Prepositions: use 'at' for events ('at weddings'). Pluralize events and parallel structure: 'weddings, birthdays, or baby showers'.

× Sometimes we do not have to have any special occasion to give gifts.

✓ Sometimes we do not need a special occasion to give gifts.

Wordy and redundant phrasing 'do not have to have' simplified to 'do not need'. This is clearer and more natural.

× It can be anything like simple victory for passing an examples or.

✓ It can be for something simple, like celebrating a personal achievement or passing an exam.

Incorrect noun forms and incomplete sentence: 'passing an examples' -> 'passing an exam'. Reworded to 'celebrating a personal achievement or passing an exam' to be grammatical and complete.

× When I choose a gift, I always think about that person particularly and think what kind of gift will suits our nature or which gift she can use in her day-to-day life which will remind her about me.

✓ When I choose a gift, I always think about that person and consider what kind of gift will suit their personality or which gift they can use in their daily life and that will remind them of me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'will suits' -> 'will suit'. Pronoun consistency: avoid gender-specific 'she' when not necessary; use 'they' or 'the person'. 'Our nature' is incorrect in this context; use 'personality'. 'Day-to-day life' -> 'daily life'. Use 'remind them of me' for correct preposition.

× Also I think of giving her a gift which is not available with her and she doesn't have it so.

✓ Also I try to give her a gift she does not already have.

Awkward pronouns and redundancy: 'not available with her' and 'she doesn't have it so' are incorrect. Simplify to 'she does not already have' for clarity and correct English.

× Yes, I have given had made gift to my, uh, so many to my lot of friends, uh, because I love to make jewelries and I think whenever Ioffer them, uh, my gift, which is bed made by me always uh, valued the most and they really appreciate my gift.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to many of my friends because I love to make jewelry, and I think whenever I offer them a gift that I made, it is always valued the most and they really appreciate it.

Multiple errors: 'had made' incorrect after 'have given' -> 'handmade'. Word order and pluralization: 'so many to my lot of friends' -> 'many of my friends'. 'Jewelries' -> 'jewelry' (uncountable). 'Ioffer' spacing corrected. 'which is bed made by me' -> 'that I made'. Use present passive 'is valued' or 'they value it most' corrected to 'it is always valued the most'. Cleaned redundant fillers.

× Uh, they also admire it. Uh, sorry.

✓ They also admire it.

Remove unnecessary filler 'Uh, sorry.' Keep concise response appropriate for exam.

× I do not think the expensive gifts, uh, express you more better than the cheap one.

✓ I do not think expensive gifts express your feelings better than cheap ones.

Word order and comparative errors: 'express you more better' is incorrect; use 'express your feelings better'. Article and plural: 'the cheap one' -> 'cheap ones'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× There are no cheaper expensive gifts.

✓ There are no inherently better or more meaningful expensive gifts.

Original sentence is confusing and contradictory. Likely intended to say that more expensive does not mean better; rephrased to 'There are no inherently better or more meaningful expensive gifts' to convey meaning clearly.

× Whatever you give to them, it has to be given with heart.

✓ Whatever you give them, it has to be given from the heart.

Prepositional phrase: 'given with heart' should be 'given from the heart'. Also drop unnecessary 'to' after 'give'.

× So I feel the emotions attached to the gifts are more important than the price.

✓ So I feel the emotions attached to gifts are more important than the price.

Minor article adjustment: 'the gifts' -> 'gifts' is more natural. Sentence is otherwise correct.