礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., “for useful”). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts to friends and family. I usually choose practical items because they’re easy to use and appreciated; for example, I often buy a nice travel mug for friends who commute.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar: state occasions clearly and give a concise, specific example. Use past tense correctly and link the example to the general statement.

示例: I usually give gifts on occasions like birthdays and anniversaries. For instance, last month I went to a friend’s birthday party and we all gave her a small gift and card.

建议: Provide a clearer topic sentence and specific criteria with reasons. Use correct collocations (e.g., “affordable” not “more cheaper”) and linking words to explain choices.

示例: I consider usefulness, convenience, and price when choosing a gift. For example, I pick affordable items that are practical—like a portable charger—because recipients can use them every day.

建议: Use accurate vocabulary (handmade, homemade) and a clear, grammatical example. Keep it to two or three sentences and explain the result or reaction concisely.

示例: Yes, I have given homemade gifts. Last year I made chocolates for my girlfriend, and she really enjoyed them and said they tasted great.

建议: Give a clear opinion with one or two reasons and a brief example. Avoid unclear phrases; explain why price doesn’t matter (sentiment, thoughtfulness). Use linking words like “because” or “because of”.

示例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts show feelings better. I believe thoughtfulness matters more because a small, meaningful present can show you know the person well—for example, a handwritten letter or a favorite book.

× Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts for my friends or families.

✓ Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts to my friends or family.

Use correct preposition and noun form: 'give gifts to' is standard and 'family' as a collective noun is more natural than 'families' here when referring to one's relatives. Replace 'for' with 'to' and 'families' with 'family.'

× When I select the gift, I think it is important to be easy to grab or use.

✓ When I choose a gift, I think it is important that it is easy to pick up or use.

Use correct verb and structure: 'choose' is more natural than 'select' in this context. 'Easy to grab' should be 'easy to pick up' and 'it is important that it is...' completes the clause. 'Grab' is informal; 'pick up' is clearer.

× So I think it is important for useful.

✓ So I think it is important that it is useful.

Grammar: 'important for useful' is incorrect collocation. Use 'important that it is useful' to connect the idea properly. 'Useful' is an adjective modifying the gift, so it needs 'it is.'

× I usually give gifts to others when they are celebrated with their birthday or anniversary days.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays or anniversaries.

Use correct preposition and plural forms: 'on' is used with days, and 'birthdays'/'anniversaries' pluralize naturally. 'They are celebrated with' is awkward and incorrect; use 'on their birthdays or anniversaries.'

× For example, last month I celebrated my friend's birthday and I and many other friends I give.

✓ For example, last month I celebrated my friend's birthday and I and many other friends gave him/her gifts.

Original sentence lacks proper verb placement and object. 'I and many other friends I give' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'gave' and include the object 'gifts' and recipient 'him/her' or 'my friend.' Also placing 'I and many other friends' before the verb is clearer.

× I consider the importance and convenience and the price as important for those products.

✓ I consider usefulness, convenience, and price important when choosing products.

Redundant and awkward phrasing: 'importance and convenience and the price as important' repeats 'important.' Use nouns 'usefulness' and 'convenience' and place 'important' once. Also add 'when choosing products' for clarity.

× That's because I can buy them more cheaper and people can use them easily.

✓ That's because I can buy them more cheaply and people can use them easily.

Use adverb 'cheaply' (not adjective 'cheaper') to modify 'buy.' Also 'more cheaply' is comparative; better is 'cheaper' without 'more' or 'more cheaply.' Preferred: 'I can buy them more cheaply' or 'I can buy them cheaper.'

× Yes, I have given others a handman gift of me.

✓ Yes, I have given others a handmade gift made by me.

Incorrect word 'handman' should be 'handmade.' Also rephrase to 'a handmade gift made by me' or simply 'a handmade gift' since 'handmade' implies made by the speaker.

× For instance, last year I gave the chocolate made by me for my girlfriend.

✓ For instance, last year I gave the chocolates I made to my girlfriend.

Use plural 'chocolates' (more natural) and correct participle placement: 'chocolates I made' or 'chocolates made by me.' Use preposition 'to' for recipient. Also keep past tense 'gave.'

× She enjoyed eating them and supplies that eat.

✓ She enjoyed eating them and said they were delicious.

Original second clause 'supplies that eat' is meaningless. Replace with a natural follow-up such as 'said they were delicious' or 'liked them a lot.' Use 'said' to report her reaction.

× No, I don't think that expensive gifts express better my feelings.

✓ No, I don't think expensive gifts express my feelings better.

Word order: place adverb 'better' after the object or at the end. Also 'that' is optional. Use 'express my feelings better' for natural word order.

× I just cause places are not related to the the distinctive character of each product.

✓ I think the price is not related to the distinctive character of each product.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: 'I just cause places' makes no sense. Likely intended 'price' not 'place(s).' Rephrase to 'the price is not related to the distinctive character' for clear meaning and correct noun choice. Remove duplicate 'the.'

× I think it is not important.

✓ I don't think it is important.

More natural negation: 'I don't think it is important' is preferred over 'I think it is not important.' This improves natural spoken English and flow.