礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), fix possessive and plural errors, and add one supporting detail with linking words. Also limit to 2–3 sentences to sound natural.

示例: Yes, I am. I usually check the person’s social media to learn about their interests, so I can choose something they will really like.

建议: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to list occasions. Remove hesitations and incorrect phrases (e.g., 'I ship something on their life'). Keep it to one or two sentences and use correct prepositions.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays, graduations, engagements, weddings and at Christmas.

建议: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations. Use linking words (first, also) and correct grammar (consider their interests; consider the price and my budget). Provide concise, specific details in two sentences.

示例: First, I consider the recipient’s interests so I can choose something they will enjoy. I also think about my budget and try to find a meaningful gift that is affordable.

建议: Answer directly and tell a brief, clear story with correct tense and vocabulary. Remove filler words and clarify who the gift was for and what it was. Use linking words (for example) and keep to two sentences.

示例: Yes, I have. For example, three months ago a friend got engaged, so I made a personalised pillowcase with their names on it and they were very pleased.

建议: Provide a clear opinion sentence and then one or two supporting reasons. Fix grammar (I don’t like expensive gifts; I value thought and effort) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (because, for example) and give a concise example.

示例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts show feelings. I prefer handmade or thoughtful presents because they show effort and personal attention.

× I think I'm quite good at preparing some gift for someone's because before giving someone, I always, uh, do some research on their personal on social media that what they like and most of people that I give them, they are quite happy.

✓ I think I'm quite good at preparing gifts for someone because before giving a gift I always do some research on their social media to see what they like, and most of the people I give gifts to are quite happy.

The sentence contains several preposition errors and related structure problems. 'Preparing some gift for someone's' should be 'preparing gifts for someone' (remove incorrect possessive and use plural). 'Research on their personal on social media' is incorrect; use 'research on their social media' or 'research into their personal preferences via social media.' Also use 'give gifts to' rather than 'give them'. Suggestions: remove redundant words, place prepositions correctly ('for someone', 'on social media', 'to see', 'give gifts to').

× Mostly I gift, uh, give to my friends on their birthday and when they're uh, I ship something on their life like graduations, marriage or engagements on and Christmas Day.

✓ Mostly I give gifts to my friends on their birthdays and for events in their lives like graduations, marriages, engagements, and on Christmas Day.

Pronoun and noun form errors: 'their birthday' should be plural 'their birthdays' for general habit. 'I gift, uh, give to my friends' is wordy; use 'I give gifts to my friends'. 'I ship something on their life' is incorrect; use 'for events in their lives'. Use plural nouns for events ('marriages') and correct preposition 'on Christmas Day'.

× What I consider the most when I'm giving to someone and is umm, what is their interest? Umm, so I can give them the right, uh, gift that they want. And after that I also consider the price of the gift, umm, if the budget that I can.

✓ What I consider most when I'm giving a gift to someone is their interests, so I can give them the right gift. After that I also consider the price of the gift and my budget.

Pronoun and phrasing errors: 'what I consider the most when I'm giving to someone and is umm, what is their interest?' should be rephrased to 'What I consider most ... is their interests' for grammatical subject-complement order and plural 'interests'. 'the right gift that they want' is wordy; 'the right gift' suffices. 'if the budget that I can' is ungrammatical; use 'and my budget'.

× Yes I have umm, 3 months ago one of my friends uh, got engaged and I give them the hand handmade of the pillow case that their name uh, owns the pillow case and they're very happy.

✓ Yes, three months ago one of my friends got engaged and I gave them a handmade pillowcase with their name on it, and they were very happy.

Tense and verb form errors: the time phrase '3 months ago' requires past tense 'gave' not present 'give'. 'hand handmade of the pillow case' is incorrect; use 'a handmade pillowcase'. 'their name uh, owns the pillow case' should be 'with their name on it'. Ensure past tense consistency for events that occurred in the past.

× No, absolutely not I'm not the kind of person that liked a expensive gift because I always consider about all the people financial was really impressed. Me is handmade is is sure their attentions and efforts to give me.

✓ No, absolutely not. I'm not the kind of person who likes expensive gifts because I always consider people's financial situations. I am impressed by handmade gifts because they show the giver's attention and effort.

Multiple errors: 'that liked a expensive gift' should be 'who likes expensive gifts' (use 'who' for people and correct verb form 'likes' for third person). 'consider about all the people financial' should be 'consider people's financial situations' (possessive noun and correct noun phrase). 'Me is handmade is is sure their attentions and efforts to give me' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I am impressed by handmade gifts because they show the giver's attention and effort'. Also correct article use: 'an expensive gift' if singular, but plural 'gifts' fits general statement.