礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use correct vocabulary (gifts, people) and grammar (I am good at giving gifts; when I like someone, I give them presents).

示例: Yes, I would say I am good at giving gifts. For example, when I really care about someone I try to pick thoughtful presents, like a book they mentioned or a homemade card, because I want the gift to show I pay attention to their interests.

建议: Give a clear, organized answer: state the usual occasions, then give one specific example. Use linking words (usually, sometimes, for example) and correct sentence structure. Avoid vague phrases and filler words.

示例: Usually I give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and holidays. Sometimes I also give presents when a friend is going through a difficult time, for example I once gave a small care package to a friend who was sick.

建议: Answer directly: state the main consideration (thoughtfulness, recipient’s taste), then explain briefly with a reason or example. Use clearer grammar and vocabulary (what matters, not the price).

示例: I consider the recipient’s interests and needs more than the price. For instance, I prefer choosing something useful or meaningful, like a cookbook for a friend who enjoys cooking, because it shows I know their preferences.

建议: Be concise and coherent: start with a direct yes/no, then give a specific, well-structured example with correct pronouns and past tense. Keep to two or three sentences and use linking words if needed.

示例: Yes, I have. Last month I made a handmade card and drew a small picture on it for a friend, and she really loved it because it felt personal and thoughtful.

建议: Make a clear stance and support it with a brief reason and example. Avoid unclear words and fragments. Use linking phrases (I don't think so because..., for example) and correct vocabulary (expensive gifts, express feelings).

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better, because what matters is thoughtfulness. For example, a simple handwritten letter can be more meaningful than an expensive item if it shows you understand the person.

× Umm, for personally I am kind of personal, like uh, really good at giving guests, especially if I love whoever I just make, then I may give and give them.

✓ Umm, personally I am kind of private, but I am really good at giving gifts; especially if I love someone, I may give them many gifts.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and wrong nouns: 'guests' should be 'gifts', and 'whoever I just make' is nonsensical; replace with 'someone'. 'Personally' replaces the redundant 'for personally'. Also use 'them' for plural recipient reference. Improve clarity and word choice; maintain present ability.

× Umm so wanna come to giving give I usually give gifts to other one they are specially they so they are bad days or but sometime it's really depends on the occasion if I have anything that she may or he may lie I just.

✓ Umm, when it comes to giving, I usually give gifts to others on special days, but sometimes it depends on the occasion and the person.

The original sentence has fragmented and repeated phrases and incorrect words ('wanna come to giving give', 'other one they are specially they so they are bad days', 'she may or he may lie'). Restructure the sentence to a clear subject-verb-object order. Use 'when it comes to' for the topic, 'give gifts to others', and 'on special days' for timing; 'depends on the occasion and the person' clarifies conditionality.

× Uh, in my perspective, choosing a gift, I don't think if you want to give somebody a gift, it doesn't matter the price I give and the quality I give is only you have to want to give them.

✓ In my opinion, when choosing a gift, I don't think the price or quality matters; what matters is that you want to give it to them.

Replace 'in my perspective' with 'in my opinion'. Remove redundant and incorrect clauses ('I don't think if you want...'); use clear noun phrases 'the price or quality' and a concise main clause 'what matters is that you want to give it to them'. Correct pronoun use 'them' for the recipient.

× Yes, I have ever give to other handmade gifts. I remember last month I just make a hand cash and I just draw some kind of picture on that and I give to my friends and he really loved that I made for her.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to others. I remember last month I made a handmade card and drew a picture on it, and I gave it to my friend; she really loved it.

Use present perfect 'have given' not 'have ever give'. For past events use simple past 'made', 'drew', 'gave'. 'Hand cash' is incorrect; use 'handmade card'. Match pronouns correctly: 'friend' and 'she' (not 'he'/'her' mismatch). Ensure object pronouns 'it' refer to the card.

× No, I don't believe that expensive gives a better express our feelings because. Strap me, I strap mirrors that gives us no matter how much their spray or how much the quality.

✓ No, I don't believe that expensive gifts better express our feelings because the value of a gift doesn't depend on how much it costs or on its quality.

'Expensive gives' should be 'expensive gifts'; 'better express' needs 'gifts' as subject. The original contains unintelligible fragments ('Strap me, I strap mirrors...'); replace with a clear reason: 'the value of a gift doesn't depend on how much it costs or on its quality.' Use proper noun phrases and verb agreement.