礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Améliorez la précision grammaticale et la clarté. Utilisez une phrase d'introduction claire, corrigez les erreurs de temps et d'accord, et évitez les répétitions. Ajoutez un lien logique entre les idées (par exemple: First… then… consequence). Limitez la réponse à 3–4 phrases naturelles et cohérentes.

示例: To be honest, I'm not very good at choosing gifts. For example, I once bought a large bag of chocolates for a friend's birthday because I thought it was a nice gesture, but I later found out she is allergic to cocoa, which was embarrassing. Since then, I always check for allergies before buying food gifts.

建议: Améliorez l'exactitude grammaticale (sujets et verbes), la variété lexicale et la concision. Commencez par une phrase directe puis développez avec une raison précise et un exemple bref. Utilisez des mots de liaison comme "because" ou "so" pour la cohérence.

示例: I usually give gifts on birthdays or when someone graduates. I do this because I think graduation recognizes a lot of hard work, so I like to celebrate my classmates by giving them small presents. For example, after university I gave each friend a personalised card and a small souvenir.

建议: Clarifiez les idées et structurez la réponse: donnez une phrase thème puis des points distincts reliés par des mots de liaison. Corrigez les formulations familières et les répétitions (par ex. "I really consider" répété). Donnez des exemples concrets et évitez les comparaisons confuses.

示例: I consider three main things when choosing a gift. First, I check for allergies if the gift is food. Second, I think about the recipient's tastes and hobbies. Finally, I often take price into account so the gift matches the relationship and what they might have given me in the past.

建议: Corrigez la grammaire et la fluidité: utilisez le passé correctement et reliez les idées. Décrivez brièvement le cadeau et la réaction en une ou deux phrases de soutien. Evitez les phrases fragmentées et fournissez un exemple précis du matériau ou du style.

示例: Yes, I once gave a friend a handmade crocheted bag. She was very happy and even suggested I start a small business selling handmade bags, which encouraged me to make more as gifts for others.

建议: Améliorez la structure argumentative et la précision grammaticale. Commencez par une phrase thème claire (opinion), puis développez 1–2 raisons avec un exemple. Utilisez des connecteurs comme "because" ou "for example" pour la cohérence.

示例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better than inexpensive ones. What matters is the thought behind the gift because a small, thoughtful present can show you know the person's tastes. For example, a handwritten letter or a homemade meal often feels more meaningful than an expensive item.

× I'm not very good at giving gift to be honest.

✓ I'm not very good at giving gifts to be honest.

The noun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' because the context refers generally to the act of giving presents (countable plural usage). Use the plural when speaking about gifts in general. Suggestion: use 'gifts' when referring to more than one or the general activity of giving presents.

× Last time I booked a big bag of chocolate for the birthday of my friends when I read them you're the best friend ever.

✓ Last time I bought a big bag of chocolates for my friend's birthday when I read to her 'you're the best friend ever'.

Multiple issues: 'booked' is incorrect for purchasing; use 'bought' (past tense of buy). 'Bag of chocolate' should be 'bag of chocolates' (plural). 'the birthday of my friends' should be 'my friend's birthday' (singular possessive) if referring to one friend; context implies one friend. 'read them' conflicts with singular; use 'read to her'. Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs and match singular/plural and pronouns to the referent.

× And I realized after that that she's allergic to cocoa.

✓ And I realized afterwards that she's allergic to cocoa.

Use 'afterwards' or 'after that' as an adverbial phrase; original is acceptable but 'afterwards' is more natural. The pronoun 'she's' is fine if referring to one friend. Suggestion: use 'afterwards' for smoother phrasing.

× That was so embarrassing.

✓ That was so embarrassing.

No change needed; sentence is correct. Included to indicate no error of this type.

× I usually give gifts to others on their birthday or when they graduate from university. I see that they makes a lot of efforts so they need to be awarded.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays or when they graduate from university. I see that they make a lot of efforts so they need to be acknowledged.

'Birthday' should be plural as referring to others in general: 'birthdays'. 'They makes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; with plural subject 'they' use 'make'. 'Be awarded' is awkward; 'acknowledged' or 'appreciated' fits better. Suggestion: ensure plural agreement and choose appropriate verb for praising effort.

× That's why I really like to give all my classmates gifts after graduation.

✓ That's why I really like to give all my classmates gifts after graduation.

Sentence is correct; 'classmates' plural fits with 'all'. Included to show checked.

× I really consider if the people have allergies, if I'm gonna buy food gifts, I really consider the price of the gift because I really want to give people gifts.

✓ I really consider whether people have allergies if I'm going to buy food gifts; I also consider the price of the gift because I want to give people appropriate presents.

Use 'whether' instead of 'if' for choices; 'the people' is unnatural—use 'people'. 'gonna' is informal; use 'going to'. Repetition of 'really' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use formal 'going to', replace 'if' with 'whether' for evaluation, and avoid repetition.

× Similarly, a price like the gift they give, they give me in the past.

✓ Similarly, I consider a price like the gifts they gave me in the past.

Original word order and quantifiers are incorrect. Use past tense 'gave' to match time reference. 'a price like the gift they give' is unclear; revised to 'a price like the gifts they gave me'. Suggestion: keep clear subject-verb-object order and match tense.

× Yes, once I give my friend a bag made of crochet and she was very happy by receiving it and she told me to have the build a small business by selling. Handmade bags.

✓ Yes, once I gave my friend a crocheted bag and she was very happy to receive it; she told me to start a small business selling handmade bags.

Use past tense 'gave' for a past event. 'Made of crochet' should be 'crocheted' (adjective). 'Happy by receiving it' should be 'happy to receive it'. 'Told me to have the build a small business by selling. Handmade bags.' is ungrammatical; use 'told me to start a small business selling handmade bags.' Suggestion: use past tense consistently and common adjectival forms like 'crocheted'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question; kept for completeness.

× I don't see that expenses they've gave the better express feelings because it's the gesture who is put in the count.

✓ I don't think that expensive things people give better express feelings because it's the gesture that counts.

'I don't see that' is awkward—use 'I don't think that'. 'expenses they've gave' is incorrect: 'expensive things people give' or 'expensive gifts' and 'gave' should be past tense 'gave' but present idea needs 'give'. 'the better express' is ungrammatical; use 'better express'. 'it's the gesture who is put in the count' should be 'it's the gesture that counts.' Suggestion: use 'think' for opinion, correct noun phrase order, and use 'that' with 'counts'.

× I don't see that you should have an expensive gift to say that you love a person.

✓ I don't think you need an expensive gift to show that you love someone.

Use 'think' for opinions. 'Should have' is awkward here; use 'need'. 'Say that you love a person' is unnatural—use 'show that you love someone'. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations like 'show love' and 'someone'.

× You can love them the way that you want.

✓ You can love them in the way you want.

Minor phrasing: 'in the way you want' is more idiomatic than 'the way that you want'. Suggestion: simplify relative clause for natural speech.