礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Avoid repetition and make the structure clearer: start with a direct statement, then give one specific method you use and a brief explanation. Use linking words for cohesion and correct pronouns.

示例: Yes, I consider myself good at giving gifts. When I want to surprise someone, I usually ask a close family member or friend what they need or would like, so I can buy something meaningful or make it myself. This helps ensure the gift is appreciated.

建议: Be specific and avoid filler words. Begin with a clear topic sentence and then give examples with linking words like "for example" or "such as."

示例: I usually give gifts for special occasions. For example, I give presents on birthdays, graduation ceremonies, and other celebrations, because gifts help mark important milestones.

建议: Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two specific factors you consider, connected with linking words. Replace vague phrases with concrete examples.

示例: The main thing I consider is the recipient's interests and preferences. For instance, if they like cooking I might choose a cookbook, whereas for a music lover I would buy concert tickets so they will be excited.

建议: Use past tense correctly and organize the response: state briefly that you have made handmade gifts, then give one clear example with chronological order and correct pronouns.

示例: Yes, I have made handmade gifts. Last year for my sister's birthday I used paper, glue and scissors to make a bouquet of paper flowers, and she was very pleased with it.

建议: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words such as "because" and "for example." Avoid redundancy and correct comparative phrasing.

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts are necessary to express feelings, because sincere gestures and thoughtful choices matter more. For example, a handwritten letter or a small handmade item can be more meaningful than an expensive present.

× When I want to surprise anyone, I ask their family or friend what they want or what they need a special thing, so I buy it or I do it for him or her.

✓ When I want to surprise someone, I ask their family or friends what they want or need, and then I buy it or do it for them.

The sentence uses inconsistent pronouns and singular/plural forms. Replace 'anyone' with 'someone' for clarity, use 'family or friends' (plural) to match 'their', and use 'them' as a gender-neutral singular pronoun to avoid 'him or her'. Also remove redundant 'a special thing' and simplify structure for fluency. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Usually I give uh, people gift when they have uh, a celebrate, uh, or on their birthday and eight or uh, people who graduate from school or university.

✓ Usually I give people gifts when they have a celebration, on their birthday, or when they graduate from school or university.

Use plural 'gifts' to match plural 'people'. 'A celebrate' is incorrect; correct noun is 'a celebration' or simply 'celebration'. Remove filler words and clarify 'on their birthday' and 'when they graduate' for correct tense and structure. Grammar problem type ID:1

× So I think they need some gift to celebrate.

✓ So I think they need a gift to celebrate.

Use the article 'a' before the singular noun 'gift'. The preposition 'to celebrate' is okay, but 'some gift' is unidiomatic; use 'a gift' or 'some gifts'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Well, I think the main thing I consider is the person, uh, interest for the gift or what they feel when they see the gift, uh.

✓ Well, I think the main thing I consider is the person's interests or how they will feel when they receive the gift.

Use the possessive form 'person's' and plural 'interests' or 'interest' consistently. 'What they feel when they see the gift' is better as 'how they will feel when they receive the gift' to match intention and future outcome. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, sometime I made handmade gift.

✓ Yes, sometimes I make handmade gifts.

Tense should match habitual action: use present tense 'make' and plural 'gifts'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also add 'handmade gifts' plural and article not needed. Grammar problem type ID:5

× For example when a A last year it's a birthday for my sister so I take some paper, glue and scissors and I make like a bucket of flowers to give him.

✓ For example, last year it was my sister's birthday, so I took some paper, glue and scissors and made a bouquet of paper flowers to give her.

Original has word order and article errors: 'a A last year it's a birthday' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'it was' and possessive 'my sister's birthday'. 'Take' should be past 'took' and 'make' -> 'made'. 'Bucket of flowers' is incorrect collocation; use 'bouquet of paper flowers'. Use 'her' instead of 'him' to match 'sister'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× No, I think the feeling is better than expensive gift because when I see other happy when I give them a gift that's a lot for me rather than a expensive.

✓ No, I think feelings are more important than expensive gifts because seeing others happy when I give them a gift means a lot to me, rather than the gift being expensive.

Use plural 'feelings' and 'gifts' for general statements. 'Better than expensive gift' needs article and pluralization. 'A expensive' is wrong; use 'an expensive one' or rephrase. Improve clarity by restructuring sentence and correcting nouns and articles. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Some people don't like uh spend a lot of money when they buy a gift.

✓ Some people don't like to spend a lot of money when buying a gift.

Use the infinitive 'to spend' after 'don't like'. 'When they buy a gift' can be streamlined to 'when buying a gift'. Remove filler 'uh' and adjust verb forms for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:12