礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I always struggle', 'choosing gifts') and avoid repetition.

示例: Not really. I always struggle with choosing gifts because I worry about whether the person will actually use them. For example, when buying for my sister I spend hours comparing items to make sure she’ll find them useful.

建议: Answer directly and fix vocabulary mistakes ('gifts' not 'goats') and phrasing. Use linking words to list occasions and give a short reason or one example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas and Father's Day. For instance, I always buy a small present for my parents on their birthdays to make them feel appreciated.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence then specific supporting details. Remove filler sounds ('uh') and correct grammar ('the priority I am concerned about', 'whether it's useful'). Explain one concrete example of how you match gifts to daily life.

示例: I consider mainly whether the gift will be useful for the recipient. For example, for a friend who cooks a lot I would choose a high-quality kitchen utensil because it fits her daily routine.

建议: Begin with a clear answer (No) then give a reason and a specific plan. Remove filler words, correct verb forms and collocations ('give a handmade gift', 'I want to make things like knitting and sewing'). Keep sentences natural and concise.

示例: No, I haven't given a handmade gift yet. However, I plan to make handmade presents after I retire — for example, I want to learn knitting so I can make scarves for family members.

建议: Answer directly, then give a concise reason and an example. Improve clarity: say 'spend time choosing a gift' rather than unclear phrases. Use linking words ('because', 'for example') and correct word choice ('gifts' not 'guests').

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings best because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For example, a handwritten letter or a carefully chosen small gift shows I put time and care into the present.

× No I all I'm always a struggle with selecting guilt for others.

✓ No, I'm always struggling with selecting gifts for others.

The sentence has word order and verb form errors. 'I all' is incorrect and should be omitted; 'I'm always a struggle with' uses a noun 'struggle' where a verb form is needed. Use the present continuous 'I'm always struggling' to express a recurring difficulty. 'guilt' is a misspelling of 'gifts'. Suggestion: say 'I'm always struggling with selecting gifts for others.'

× It takes a large amount of time to choose and decide what to give because I just care about others and I want them to use effectively and so I just.

✓ It takes a lot of time to choose what to give because I care about others and want them to use the gifts effectively.

Awkward phrasing and extra words cause sentence structure issues. 'A large amount of time' is wordy; 'a lot of time' is natural. 'choose and decide' is redundant; use one verb. 'I want them to use effectively' is missing the object 'gifts'. Remove trailing 'and so I just.' Suggestion: simplify and ensure the object is clear: '...want them to use the gifts effectively.'

× I give goats on special occasions, for example birthday, Christmas and sometimes Father's Day and even other special holidays.

✓ I give gifts on special occasions, for example birthdays, Christmas, sometimes Father's Day, and other holidays.

'goats' is a misspelling of 'gifts'. Use plural 'birthdays' for general occasions. Commas and conjunctions needed for list clarity. Suggestion: use 'gifts' and pluralize recurring events: 'birthdays.'

× I try to give them gifts to entertains, entertains others.

✓ I try to give them gifts to entertain others.

Redundant repetition 'entertains, entertains' is incorrect. The infinitive 'to entertain' is the correct verb form. Suggestion: use 'to entertain others' or 'that will entertain them.'

× The priority that I concerned about the most is uh. Whether it's useful for them or not, I try to think about the their daily lives and implement in.

✓ The priority I am most concerned about is whether a gift is useful for them; I try to think about their daily lives and how it will fit into them.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect pronoun/article use. 'The priority that I concerned about the most' should be 'The priority I am most concerned about'. 'the their daily lives' has redundant article 'the'. 'implement in' is incorrect; use 'fit into' or 'be useful in their daily lives.' Suggestion: simplify and use correct pronouns/articles and verbs: '...think about their daily lives and how the gift will fit into them.'

× No, I've never given.

✓ No, I've never given a handmade gift.

The verb 'given' requires an object. Context asks about handmade gifts, so include the object 'a handmade gift.' Suggestion: always include the object after transitive verbs like 'give.'

× However, uh, I aspire to give handmade gift in the future after my retirement.

✓ However, I aspire to give handmade gifts in the future after my retirement.

'handmade gift' should be plural 'handmade gifts' to match general intent, and 'give' is fine but article missing. 'in the future after my retirement' is redundant; keep one timeframe. Suggestion: 'I aspire to give handmade gifts after I retire.'

× I want to create things and knitting and sewing when I have time in the future.

✓ I want to create things, knitting and sewing, when I have time in the future.

Parallel structure issue: 'create things and knitting and sewing' mixes verb forms and noun phrases. Use gerunds consistently: 'creating things, knitting, and sewing.' Suggestion: 'I want to create things, knit, and sew when I have time.'

× I'm so excited about it.

✓ I'm very excited about it.

This sentence is acceptable but 'very' is more natural in this context than 'so' in formal responses. No grammatical error; suggestion: use 'very' or keep 'so' if informal.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This is a question from the examiner and is grammatically fine; no change needed. Kept for completeness.

× No, I don't think so. Like taking time can be expressive form of the appreciation to others.

✓ No, I don't think so. Taking time can be an expressive way to show appreciation to others.

'Like taking time' is a filler; remove 'like'. 'expressive form of the appreciation' is ungrammatical—use 'an expressive way to show appreciation.' Suggestion: use noun 'way' and verb 'show' for clarity.

× Whether they don't know how much time they consume for selecting guests.

✓ They may not know how much time I spend selecting gifts for them.

This sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect words: 'Whether' is unnecessary; 'consume' is wrong for 'spend time'; 'guests' should be 'gifts'. Also pronoun reference unclear: clarify 'I spend' and correct 'gifts.' Suggestion: rephrase to a complete sentence: 'They may not know how much time I spend selecting gifts for them.'