网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct with a clear topic sentence, limit redundancy, add one or two specific examples and a linking word to show purpose. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

示例: I usually visit educational and search websites. For example, I use Google Chrome and Safari to look up articles for school and watch lessons on Khan Academy. I also visit news sites when I need current information.

建议: Start with a clear statement naming your favourite site, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid unnecessary hedging phrases like “I don't really” at the start.

示例: My favourite website is YouTube because it has many tutorial videos and entertainment. For instance, I follow channels that teach language skills and also watch music performances for relaxation.

建议: Answer directly about changes, use linking words (however, for example) and give specific changes rather than vague phrases like “and so on and so forth.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: There have been some changes to the sites I use. For example, YouTube added more playback and recommendation controls, and many sites improved their mobile interfaces for easier browsing.

建议: Be concise and avoid subjective comments like “it is probably bad.” Provide a clear list of popular types with specific examples and a brief reason for their popularity.

示例: Short-video and e-commerce sites are very popular in my country. For example, many people use TikTok for entertainment and Lazada for online shopping because these apps offer convenient purchases and trending content.

建议: Start with a direct preference or say you prefer both for different purposes, then use linking words to contrast and give specific reasons and a short example.

示例: I prefer websites for quick and detailed searches because they are convenient and up to date. However, books are better for structured learning; for example, I use textbooks for course theory and websites for recent articles.

建议: Give a clear conditional response: state your current view, then explain the condition with reasons and an example. Avoid absolute negatives without qualification.

示例: I don't currently need my own website, but I would create one if it supported my career. For example, if I start a business or want an online portfolio, a website would help showcase my work and attract clients.

建议: Answer with a clear topic sentence about what you learned, then give one or two specific examples of skills or information and use a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid vague endings like “so yes.”

示例: Websites have taught me practical study skills and problem-solving methods. For example, YouTube tutorials help me understand difficult math topics, and search engines let me quickly find summaries and study tips for assignments.

× I don't really use web browsers as much because I mostly use them just for searching information.

✓ I don't really use web browsers as much because I mostly use them just to search for information.

Using 'for searching information' is grammatically awkward; after 'use ... for' a gerund can follow, but here 'use them just to search for information' is more natural and idiomatic. Also include the preposition 'for' after 'search' to form the correct verb-object phrase 'search for information'.

× So for example I go on Safari or Google Chrome to search information for school purposes or work purposes such as things to learn like on Khan Academy.

✓ For example, I go on Safari or Google Chrome to search for information for school or work, such as learning materials on Khan Academy.

Replace 'to search information' with 'to search for information' (correct verb-preposition collocation). Remove redundant 'purposes' and streamline 'things to learn like on Khan Academy' to 'learning materials on Khan Academy' for clarity and grammaticality.

× I don't really have a favorite website since I don't go on web browsers as often, but if I were to have a favorite website it would probably just be YouTube or Spotify because I can watch and entertain myself through music.

✓ I don't really have a favorite website since I don't go on web browsers often, but if I had a favorite it would probably be YouTube or Spotify because I can watch videos or enjoy music.

Use simpler conditional 'if I had' for the unreal hypothetical. 'Go on web browsers as often' is wordy; 'often' suffices. 'Watch and entertain myself through music' is incorrect: you 'watch videos' and 'entertain/enjoy yourself with music' so separate activities and use correct verbs.

× Over the few years, there were little to no changes with the website that I visited.

✓ Over the past few years, there have been little to no changes to the websites I visit.

Use 'past few years' not 'the few years'. Use present perfect 'have been' to describe changes up to now. Use plural 'websites' and 'I visit' to match habitual present. Use 'changes to' rather than 'changes with'.

× So for instance, YouTube doesn't really change much except the fact that it had more options to control how you're watching, what you're watching, and so on and so forth.

✓ For instance, YouTube hasn't changed much except that it has added more options to control how you watch and what you watch.

Maintain present perfect 'hasn't changed' to describe recent changes. Use 'has added' rather than 'had'. Use base form 'watch' after 'how you'/'what you' (not progressive 'you're watching'). Remove redundant 'and so on and so forth'.

× Honestly I don't really know what others watch because I don't really ask them except of the fact that I know most people in the Philippines are using TikTok right now so it is probably bad and online shopping.

✓ Honestly, I don't really know what others watch because I don't ask them, but I know many people in the Philippines are using TikTok right now, and online shopping is also popular.

Original used 'except of the fact that' incorrectly; use 'but' to contrast. Clarify 'so it is probably bad and online shopping' which is unclear—split into two ideas: TikTok usage and popularity of online shopping. Use 'many' instead of 'most' unless sure.

× So shopping or Lazada would be a great example because they can buy a lot of things.

✓ Shopping sites like Lazada would be a good example because people can buy a lot of things there.

Pronoun 'they' ambiguously referred to people; explicitly use 'people' or 'users'. Add 'there' to indicate where purchases occur. 'Shopping or Lazada' changed to 'Shopping sites like Lazada' for clarity.

× It depends because I feel like I'd rather choose websites to search for information because of the convenience and in-depth research.

✓ It depends because I'd rather use websites to search for information because they are convenient and good for in-depth research.

'Choose websites to search for information' is awkward; 'use websites to search for information' is more natural. Clarify 'convenience and in-depth research' by attributing these qualities to websites.

× No, I don't think I need one in the first place. However, if it is related to business or future careers, then definitely so that it can help me with my career and status in life.

✓ No, I don't think I need one now. However, if it were related to business or my future career, I would definitely create one because it could help my career and status in life.

Use conditional 'if it were' for hypothetical and 'would' for result. 'In the first place' is unnatural here; 'now' is better. 'Definitely so that it can help me' rephrased to 'I would definitely create one because it could help' for clearer modal usage.

× I think I've learned a lot because I usually go through YouTube and based on that I get to search and learn a lot of information about how I can deal with my studies and my personal life as well.

✓ I think I've learned a lot because I often use YouTube, and through it I can search for and learn a lot of information about how to manage my studies and personal life.

'Go through YouTube' is informal/incorrect; use 'use YouTube'. Use 'search for' not 'search and learn a lot of information'. Replace 'deal with' with 'manage' for a more appropriate collocation. Streamline sentence for clarity.