网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 答えを明確にし、文法と語彙の誤りを直しましょう。また接続詞を使って理由や具体例を付け加え、2〜3文でまとめます。例えば「lying」は誤りなので削除し、プラットフォーム名は正しく書きます。より自然にするために“platforms”や“short-video apps”などの語を使い、年齢層や利用目的（交流、情報収集、エンタメ）を具体的に述べます。発音や流暢さのために「umm」を減らし、短い沈黙ではなく繋ぎ語を使ってください。

示例: I often visit social media platforms such as Instagram and TikTok because I use them to keep in touch with friends. For example, I follow classmates and family members to see their photos and short videos, and I also use these apps to find quick news or entertainment.

建议: 理由を一つに絞り、繋ぎの語句で論理的に説明しましょう。語彙の精度を上げ、「movies about cooking」は不自然なので「cooking videos」や「recipe videos」に置き換えます。また語形や冠詞を整え、冗長な“this is because”を避けて2〜3文にまとめてください。具体例（どんな料理や頻度）を加えると良いです。

示例: My favourite website is Instagram because I enjoy watching short recipe and cooking videos. I cook every day, so I often save useful recipes and follow food creators who share quick and easy meal ideas.

建议: 内容が不明瞭で文法的に誤りがあります。まず具体的な変化を明確に述べ、接続詞（for example, recently, because）で理由や結果を説明してください。正しい文法で「social media」が子どもに制限されているという意味を伝えるなら “social media use by young children has been restricted/banned in Australia” のように言います。背景（いつ、どのように変わったか）や自分の意見を一文加えると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes. For example, recently Australia has introduced restrictions on social media use for young children to protect them from harmful content. Because of this change, parents now need to set up age limits or parental controls before children can access some platforms.

建议: 質問に全く答えていません。まず直接的なトピックセンテンスで種類を述べ（social media, news sites, shopping sitesなど）、次に具体例や理由を1〜2文で補足してください。接続詞（for example, also, because）を使って流れを作り、具体的な人気サイト名や利用目的を述べると良いです。

示例: In my country, social media platforms and e-commerce websites are very popular. For example, many people use Facebook and Instagram to keep in touch and use online shopping sites like Amazon for convenience and variety.

建议: 文法（複数形、冠詞）と意味が不明瞭な部分を直してください。比較をする場合は“from websites rather than books”と言い、理由は具体的に（up-to-date, accessible, searchable）述べます。余分な語句は削り、2〜3文で明確に答えましょう。最後の文は不要か、具体的な補足（例：news, tutorials）に置き換えてください。

示例: I prefer getting information from websites rather than books because online sources are more up-to-date and easy to search. For example, I often read news sites and watch tutorial videos when I need quick information.

建议: 理由が曖昧で文法が不正確です。まず明確に「No, I wouldn't」と言い、そのあとで具体的な理由を一つ述べ（技術的に難しい、時間がかかる、管理が面倒）、「because」を使って理由を繋ぎます。冗長な“uh”を減らし、2文以内でまとめましょう。

示例: No, I wouldn't like to have my own website because it seems technically difficult and time-consuming to maintain. I prefer using existing platforms like social media where it's easier to share content without managing a whole site.

建议: 具体的に何を学んだのか（例えばプログラミング、語学、研究方法）を明確に示してください。AIや検索の利用について話すなら、どのツールをどう使うか（e.g., ChatGPT for drafting essays, online journals for research）と結果を添えると良いです。接続詞を使って文をつなぎ、語尾を完結させてください。

示例: Recently I have learned study techniques and research skills from websites. For instance, I use AI tools like ChatGPT to generate ideas for essays and online academic journals to find reliable sources for my assignments.

× I often use social media such as lying, Instagram and Tiktok.

✓ I often use social media such as Line, Instagram, and TikTok.

The student used 'lying' which appears to be a misspelling or incorrect word choice for the messaging app 'Line'. Also 'Tiktok' should be capitalized and spelled 'TikTok'. Use commas to separate items in a list and include 'and' before the last item.

× Umm, I usually use it for connecting with other people.

✓ Umm, I usually use it to connect with other people.

After 'use' the infinitive 'to connect' is more natural than the gerund 'connecting' in this context. The preposition 'for' plus gerund is possible but less natural here; use 'to' + base verb for purpose.

× My favorite website is Instagram. This is because umm uh, I like to watch some recipes and movies about cooking.

✓ My favorite website is Instagram because I like to watch recipe videos and cooking shows.

'Some recipes and movies about cooking' is awkward. Use 'recipe videos' or 'recipes' and 'cooking shows' for natural collocations. Remove unnecessary filler and 'This is because' redundancy. Also choose consistent countable nouns and collocations.

× This is uh, because I usually cook everyday.

✓ This is because I usually cook every day.

Use two words 'every day' (adverb) rather than 'everyday' (adjective). Present simple 'cook' is correct; just fix spacing and word form.

× Yes, for example, uh. So in Australia social media banned for young children and ah.

✓ Yes. For example, in Australia social media is banned for young children.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary 'is' for passive voice. Remove filler words and redundant connectors. Use 'is banned' to form passive and place 'for young children' after the verb.

× Good job!

✓ In my country, one of the most popular platforms is TikTok.

'Good job!' is not an answer to the question 'What kinds of websites are popular in your country?'. Provide a complete relevant response. Use present simple and the noun 'platforms' to match context.

× I prefer getting information from website.

✓ I prefer getting information from websites.

'Website' should be plural 'websites' because the student refers to websites in general. Alternatively, use 'a website' for a single site.

× This is because there are a lot of informations on the website than books.

✓ This is because there is a lot of information on websites compared to books.

'Information' is an uncountable noun so do not add 's'. Use 'there is' with uncountable nouns and 'on websites' (plural) when comparing generally. Use 'compared to' or 'than' with a clear structure.

× Recently on which young.

✓ Recently, young people use them more often.

The original fragment is incomplete and ungrammatical. Provide a full clause: subject + verb + object. 'Young people use them more often' clarifies the intended meaning.

× No, I wouldn't. Uh, this is because I had about, uh, I heard that, uh, people on their websites is difficult, so I don't want to.

✓ No, I wouldn't. This is because I heard that managing a website is difficult, so I don't want to.

Remove fillers and correct verb forms: 'I heard that' is simple past; 'managing a website' or 'running a website' is a natural gerund phrase as the subject. Use 'is' with singular 'website'. Ensure modal 'wouldn't' fits the hypothetical preference.

× I have learned from website about my studies, uh, recently.

✓ I have learned about my studies from websites recently.

Reorder prepositional phrases for natural word order: 'learned about my studies from websites'. Use plural 'websites' or 'a website' as appropriate and place 'recently' at the end.

× I use artificial intelligence everyday for studies and uh, I usually use for searching and.

✓ I use artificial intelligence every day for my studies, and I usually use it for searching for information.

Again 'every day' should be two words. Add the object pronoun 'it' after 'use' and complete the verb phrase 'searching for information'. Include 'my' before 'studies' to be specific. Use full clauses rather than fragments.