网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief detail using linking words. Avoid hesitations and fragments. Use precise names and categories (e.g. video-sharing and social media sites).

示例: I usually visit video-sharing and social media websites. For example, I often use Bilibili and TikTok to watch short videos and follow creators, because they’re entertaining and easy to browse.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and then a specific reason with linking words. Correct the site name and avoid sentence fragments like starting with 'Cause'. Use varied vocabulary (offers, features).

示例: My favourite website is Bilibili because it offers high-quality videos on science and music. In addition, it has community features and user-generated content that help me discover new topics.

建议: Organize your answer: state the change clearly, then give a specific comparison with linking words. Avoid repetition and false starts. Use precise adjectives (outdated → modern, user-friendly).

示例: Yes, they have changed a lot. For example, older websites used to have outdated layouts and slow loading times, but now most sites have modern, user‑friendly designs and faster performance.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition and filler words. Use clear vocabulary (short-video platforms, streaming services) and give a concise reason or example.

示例: Short-video platforms are very popular in my country because people prefer quick, entertaining content. For instance, apps like Douyin and Kuaishou attract millions of users who create and watch brief clips.

建议: Answer directly and coherently: choose one option then give 1–2 clear reasons with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use proper comparative language if mentioning both sources.

示例: I prefer getting information from websites because they are more up-to-date and searchable. However, I still use books for deep study because they provide more reliable and structured information.

建议: State your opinion clearly in one sentence, then give a concise reason with linking words. Avoid excessive hesitations and repetitive justification. Use varied vocabulary (necessary, useful, time-consuming).

示例: To be honest, I wouldn’t create my own website because it would take a lot of time to maintain, and I can already find everything I need on existing platforms.

建议: Start with a clear statement about what you learned, then give specific examples and link them logically. Replace vague words like 'stuff' with concrete items (tutorials, lectures, research articles).

示例: As a science student, I’ve learned practical techniques and theoretical concepts from online lectures and tutorials. For example, I watched experiment demonstrations and review lectures that helped me prepare for lab work and exams.

× Well, I have to admit that I prefer to visit some websites like. Bilibili platform, Tiktok and some short video web tabs.

✓ Well, I have to admit that I prefer visiting websites like the Bilibili platform, TikTok, and other short-video sites.

This sentence had issues with article use and word choice. 'some websites like.' had an unnecessary period and unnatural phrasing. Use gerund 'visiting' or 'to visit' consistently; 'the Bilibili platform' needs the definite article; 'TikTok' is the correct capitalization; 'short video web tabs' is incorrect — use 'short-video sites'. Also list items with proper conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Well, my favorite website is Bilibili Count. 'Cause it can provide some great videos about science, music and anything.

✓ Well, my favorite website is my Bilibili account because it provides great videos about science, music, and other topics.

'Bilibili Count' is likely a misspelling of 'account'. Use 'because' instead of informal ''Cause' and match verb tense: 'provides' (present simple) agrees with singular 'account'. Replace vague 'anything' with 'other topics' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yeah, absolutely. You know, when I was a child, I visited some, I found that the bottom, it's so old, was so old and the design was not no good. But now it's, it's pretty good.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. You know, when I was a child, I visited it and found that the layout was very old and the design was not good. But now it's much better.

This sentence had tense and double negative problems. Use past simple 'visited' and 'found' correctly; 'the bottom' is unclear—'layout' or 'site' fits; 'was so old' can be 'was very old'; 'not no good' is a double negative — use 'not good' or 'poor'. For present comparison use 'now it's much better'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Well, I would say maybe some websites about short short videos. Is popular in in my country. 'Cause with the rapid development of technology, it's necessary for us to, umm, release some videos.

✓ Well, I would say websites with short videos are popular in my country because, with the rapid development of technology, people often upload short videos.

Original had repetition 'short short', incorrect sentence split 'Is popular in in my country', and awkward use of 'release some videos'. Combine into one grammatically complete sentence, remove duplicate words, fix preposition 'in my country', and replace 'release' with 'upload' which is more natural for videos. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Oh absolutely 100% because reading what gets some will get some, uh, information is a great way to new and umm no no no.

✓ Oh, absolutely — I prefer websites because I can quickly get information from them, which is a great way to learn new things.

The original is fragmented and confusing. 'reading what gets some will get some' is ungrammatical. Use clear subject and verb: 'I can quickly get information from them' and complete the idea with 'learn new things'. Ensure coherence and correct collocations. Grammar problem type ID:26

× To be honest, not really, umm, 'cause I think it's not necessary for me to have it and I often, umm, take plenty of my time to visit, uh, other websites, so it's not necessary.

✓ To be honest, not really, because I don't think it's necessary for me to have one, and I already spend a lot of time visiting other websites.

Use 'one' to refer to 'a website' instead of repeating 'it'; replace informal ''cause' with 'because'; 'take plenty of my time' is awkward — use 'spend a lot of time'. Avoid repeating 'it's not necessary'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× You know, I'm a university student and my major is about science, so I often visit some website to watch some umm videos about my major, to practice my academic knowledge, severity, stuff like that.

✓ You know, I'm a university student majoring in science, so I often visit websites to watch videos related to my field to practice and deepen my academic knowledge and skills.

Use 'majoring in science' rather than 'my major is about science'; plural 'websites' is more natural; 'videos related to my field' clarifies 'about my major'; 'practice my academic knowledge' is unidiomatic — use 'practice and deepen my academic knowledge and skills'; 'severity' is incorrect word choice and was removed. Grammar problem type ID:11