网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use more natural collocations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Replace awkward phrases like “cycling forests” and “simply be myself” with more typical expressions. Use a linking word when adding the reason.

示例: I often visit cycling websites, such as gear-review blogs and local club pages. For example, I read reviews before buying new equipment, and I check club forums to plan weekend rides, so these sites help me relax and organise activities.

建议: Give a clear direct answer naming one favourite site and avoid redundant adjectives. Use natural phrases (e.g., “cycling club websites” not “apps website”). Limit to one main supporting detail and use linking words like “because” to explain why you like it.

示例: My favourite websites are local cycling-club pages because they let me join group rides and find long-distance routes. For instance, last month I used one club site to sign up for a 60 km ride with friends.

建议: Correct grammar and speak more precisely: say “the websites have changed” and avoid repeated or unclear phrases. Focus on one or two specific changes and link them with words like “for example” or “because.” Avoid filler phrases like “and moreover” without content.

示例: Yes, the cycling websites I use have changed recently. For example, they now include interactive product reviews and improved order-tracking, which makes buying gear faster and more convenient.

建议: Make your answer more fluent and concise. Use natural grammar: “education is highly valued” instead of awkward phrasing. Provide one specific example of a popular educational site or type (e.g., online tutoring platforms) and use a linking word to explain why.

示例: Educational websites are very popular in China because education is highly valued. For example, many students use online tutoring platforms for extra lessons, since parents and schools place strong emphasis on exam success.

建议: Start with a clear opinion sentence and reduce hesitations. Use natural expressions for health issues (e.g., “strain my eyes” and “harm my well-being”). Give one reason and a brief example, linked by “because” or “so.”

示例: I prefer getting information from books because reading on screens often strains my eyes and can make me tired. For example, when I study from printed textbooks I can concentrate longer without feeling eye fatigue.

建议: Give a direct, simple reply and clear reasons. Correct grammar: say “No, I wouldn't like to have my own website” and explain briefly (e.g., it’s too time-consuming or complicated). Avoid unclear words and unnecessary hesitations.

示例: No, I wouldn't like to have my own website because creating and maintaining one takes a lot of time and technical skill. Since I’m busy with school, I don’t have time to manage it.

建议: Answer directly and clearly: name a specific skill or piece of knowledge you learned and give a concrete example. Use natural verbs (e.g., “learned proper cycling techniques” and “ride safely on different surfaces”) and link the benefit with “so” or “which.”

示例: I’ve learned practical cycling skills from websites, such as how to shift gears properly and ride safely on grass and long routes. For example, a tutorial taught me how to manage steep sections, which improved my confidence on long rides.

× I often visit websites about cycling such as cycling forests and gear review sites.

✓ I often visit websites about cycling, such as cycling forums and gear review sites.

The student wrote 'cycling forests' which is a word-choice error; the correct noun is 'forums' (online discussion sites). This is an incorrect use of vocabulary/ preposition-like phrase; replace with 'forums' to convey the intended meaning and add a comma before 'such as' for clarity.

× I usually do this after a busy day at school because reading about cycling and planning rides with friends is relaxing and really helps me simply be myself or unwind.

✓ I usually do this after a busy day at school because reading about cycling and planning rides with friends are relaxing and really help me be myself and unwind.

The coordinated subjects 'reading' and 'planning' form a plural subject, so the verb must be plural ('are' and 'help') rather than singular. Also remove the unnecessary adverb 'simply' before 'be myself' and replace 'or unwind' with 'and unwind' for clearer parallelism.

× My favorite apps website is cycling websites and there are numerous clubs of cycling.

✓ My favorite websites are cycling websites, and there are numerous cycling clubs.

The original mixes singular/plural and awkward noun phrases. 'My favorite apps website is cycling websites' is incorrect pronoun/noun agreement and word choice. Use plural 'websites are' to match 'cycling websites' and change 'clubs of cycling' to the natural phrase 'cycling clubs'.

× I can always organize the cycling for lengthy and prolonged distances to relax and take a deep breath of the fresh air along the way.

✓ I can always organize long cycling rides to relax and take deep breaths of fresh air along the way.

Use natural collocations: 'long cycling rides' instead of 'lengthy and prolonged distances' (redundant), and 'take deep breaths of fresh air' rather than 'a deep breath of the fresh air'. Preposition 'of' after 'breath' is unnecessary with 'fresh air' when pluralizing 'breaths'.

× That's pretty super for all of us.

✓ That's great for all of us.

'Pretty super' is an awkward and informal collocation. Use a single appropriate adjective such as 'great' to express the intended positive meaning.

× Yes, many of the websites are released have changed recently.

✓ Yes, many of the websites have changed recently.

The phrase 'are released have changed' mixes passive and present perfect incorrectly. The intended meaning is present perfect: 'have changed.' Remove 'are released' which is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect here.

× For instance, cycling websites now offer more products and interactive features such as clearer product service and better order tracking functions, which makes shopping much easier and more convenient.

✓ For instance, cycling websites now offer more products and interactive features such as clearer product information and better order-tracking functions, which make shopping much easier and more convenient.

Use 'product information' instead of 'product service' for clarity. 'Order-tracking' is a compound modifier. Also, the relative clause refers to plural 'features' so use 'make' not 'makes'.

× And moreover, I can always find that really entertaining to to.

✓ And moreover, I always find that really entertaining.

Remove extra 'to' and restructure to the correct subject-verb-object order: 'I always find that really entertaining.' The original misused infinitive/object structure.

× Educational websites are definitely popular in China because in China, everyone is emphasized on the education.

✓ Educational websites are definitely popular in China because education is emphasized there.

'Everyone is emphasized on the education' is ungrammatical. The correct passive idea is 'education is emphasized' or active 'people emphasize education.' Also avoid repeating 'in China'.

× By the consequence of the importance of social country, umm, everyone in this society must uh pay attention to the education.

✓ Because education is important for the country, everyone in society must pay attention to it.

'By the consequence of the importance of social country' is ungrammatical. Use 'Because' to connect cause and effect, and 'pay attention to it' refers back to 'education.' Remove filler words.

× Well, go to my head.

✓ Well, it comes to my mind.

'Go to my head' is incorrect in this context; the intended expression is 'it comes to my mind' or 'off the top of my head.' Use correct idiom or neutral phrasing.

× I would definitely prefer, uh, to get information from books rather than websites because as long as I get information from websites often, uh, it makes my eyes strange and it's definitely detrimental for my physical and psychological health.

✓ I would definitely prefer to get information from books rather than websites because, if I often get information from websites, it strains my eyes and is detrimental to my physical and mental health.

Use 'strains my eyes' instead of 'makes my eyes strange.' 'Detrimental to' is the correct preposition, and 'mental health' is a more natural collocation than 'psychological health.' Remove unnecessary fillers.

× No, really, I wouldn't lie.

✓ No, really, I wouldn't.

'I wouldn't lie' changes the meaning; the student likely intends 'I wouldn't' (I would not) or 'No, really, I wouldn't want to.' 'I wouldn't lie' asserts they would not tell falsehoods, which is odd here.

× To have my own websites is March to complex and to address for me to have a have a appropriate or proper websites for me.

✓ Having my own website is too complex and difficult for me to create, and I don't have time to set one up.

Multiple problems: 'websites' should be singular 'website' when referring to one; 'March to complex' is incorrect — likely 'much too complex' or 'too complex'; 'to address for me to have a have a appropriate or proper websites' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to a clear, grammatical sentence.

× And I don't have much time to decide one because Emma's busy studying in school.

✓ And I don't have much time to set one up because I'm busy studying at school.

'Decide one' is incorrect; use 'set one up' or 'create one.' 'Emma's' appears to be a mispronunciation of 'I'm' or 'I'm busy'; correct pronoun to 'I'm' and 'studying at school' is natural.

× Yes, I have learned from websites that happen with my life, which is cycling experience.

✓ Yes, I have learned from websites things related to my life, such as cycling experience.

'Websites that happen with my life' is ungrammatical. Use 'things related to my life' or 'information related to my life.' Clarify 'cycling experience' as an example.

× It has taught me how to step onto a lawn or prolonged way, uh, to ride a bicycle rightly and correctly without any problem.

✓ They have taught me how to ride a bicycle on various terrains and long routes correctly and safely.

'Step onto a lawn or prolonged way' is awkward. Use 'ride on various terrains and long routes' for clarity. 'Rightly and correctly' is redundant; use 'correctly and safely.' Also match plural 'websites' with 'they' rather than 'it.'

× It's really helped me develop.

✓ They have really helped me develop my skills.

Referent should be plural 'they' (websites), and 'develop' is vague—specify 'develop my skills.' Also maintain present perfect 'have helped' to match previous tense.