梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and use past tense consistently. Add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid (where you met or what you did together).

示例: Yes, I remember many dreams. One of the most memorable was seeing my cousin who passed away a year ago; we walked along the beach and talked for hours, which made me feel comforted when I woke up.

建议: Clarify and organize your response: begin with a direct answer, then give one or two reasons using linking words. Fix tense and word choice (e.g., ‘stress’ → ‘stressed’). Avoid apologetic interruptions.

示例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my parents and sister because I want to explain what happened. For example, I sometimes have terrifying dreams that leave me feeling stressed, so talking about them helps me calm down. I’m also curious about other people’s dreams and like learning about their meanings.

建议: Give a clearer opinion with one supporting reason and correct grammar (singular/plural and verb forms). Use linking words to show reason or example and be specific about what you studied.

示例: Yes, I believe dreams often have special meanings because they can reflect our emotions or unresolved issues. For example, I have read books about dream symbols and learned that recurring water dreams often relate to emotions.

建议: Give a direct, grammatically correct response and focus on one or two specific goals. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., ‘these teams’). Mention a realistic plan or feeling to sound more natural.

示例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. For instance, I hope to own my ideal car and a small house within the next five years, so I am saving money and planning my career to achieve those goals.

× Yes, I remember a lot of things that I had.

✓ Yes, I remember a lot of things I had.

The phrase 'that I had' is unnecessary and awkward after 'remember a lot of things.' Remove 'that' and keep 'I had' or simply 'I had' to be concise. Suggestion: 'I remember a lot of things I had.' or 'I remember a lot of my dreams.'

× The one of my most favorite dream is when I met my dead cousin that died, uh, an year ago.

✓ One of my favorite dreams is when I met my late cousin who died a year ago.

Redundancy and wrong word forms: 'The one of my most favorite' is redundant; use 'One of my favorite dreams.' 'Dead cousin that died' repeats the idea; use 'late cousin' or 'cousin who died.' Use 'a year ago' (not 'an year ago') because 'year' begins with a consonant sound. Also 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' after 'one of.'

× That was such a, uh, beautiful dream.

✓ It was such a beautiful dream.

The demonstrative 'That' is acceptable but 'It' is more natural following the previous sentence. Remove filler 'uh'. Ensure smooth pronoun reference: 'It was such a beautiful dream.'

× I met him, I spent a lot of time with him and I was so happy after that dream.

✓ I met him, spent a lot of time with him, and felt very happy after that dream.

Parallel verb forms improve readability: use simple past consistently ('met', 'spent', 'felt'). Combining with commas and conjunction 'and' makes the sentence clearer. 'I was so happy' is correct but 'felt very happy' matches the other verbs.

× Uh yes, I share my dreams with others like my parents and my sister because I really want to express that what I had and most of the time I had been scary and terrifying dreams that make me stress sorry.

✓ Yes, I share my dreams with others, like my parents and my sister, because I really want to express what I experienced, and most of the time I have had scary and terrifying dreams that make me stressed.

Multiple issues: remove filler 'Uh'; use commas for clarity; 'express that what I had' is ungrammatical—use 'express what I experienced.' Use present perfect 'have had' for repeated past experiences influencing the present. 'Make me stress' is wrong: use the adjective 'stressed.' Also remove 'sorry' or place it separately; here it's unnecessary.

× And I am also interested in other dreams I really want to study.

✓ I am also interested in other people's dreams; I really want to study them.

Missing possessive for 'other dreams'—use 'other people's dreams.' Two independent clauses need separation; use a semicolon or period. Use pronoun 'them' to refer back to dreams.

× Yes, dream have specific meaning, every dream have meaning and I also studied about these dreams meanings and the signs of the dream.

✓ Yes, dreams have specific meanings; every dream has meaning, and I have also studied these dream meanings and the signs in dreams.

Subject-verb agreement: 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match 'have.' Then 'every dream' is singular so uses 'has.' Use present perfect 'have studied' for experience. 'Studied about' is incorrect; use 'studied' or 'read about.' 'Dreams meanings' should be 'dream meanings' or 'meanings of dreams.'

× I love to study about that and that is very interesting and productive work to do.

✓ I love studying that, and it is very interesting and productive work to do.

'Study about' is nonstandard; use 'study' or 'study that' or 'study it.' Use gerund 'studying' for preference. Combine clauses with comma and 'and' for clarity.

× Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true sometime.

✓ Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true someday.

Use 'someday' instead of 'sometime' for the intended meaning of at some point in the future. The sentence expresses desire about the future—structure is otherwise acceptable.

× I had dreams about my favorite car and my favorite house and meeting someone that I love the most.

✓ I had dreams about my favorite car and house, and about meeting the person I love most.

Avoid repetition 'my favorite' twice; combine items. Use 'person I love most' rather than 'someone that I love the most.' Use 'about meeting' to parallel 'dreams about.'

× So I want these teams to come to.

✓ So I want these dreams to come true.

Typo and wrong word: 'teams' should be 'dreams.' Also add 'true' to complete the phrase 'come true.' Remove the trailing preposition 'to.'

× That is all I want in my life.

✓ That is all I want in my life.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× I wish I that dreams could too.

✓ I wish those dreams could come true too.

Ungrammatical word order and extra 'I' present. Use 'those dreams' to refer back, and 'could come true' for the desired meaning. Add 'too' at end for inclusion.