梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (avoid double words and wrong verb forms), remove fillers, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I usually forget my dreams. For example, I rarely remember more than a vague feeling when I wake up, so I have no clear images or storylines. Because of that, I never keep a dream journal to record them.

建议: Answer directly, correct repetition and word choice errors, and use a linking word to contrast your feelings. Provide a brief specific reason why you are interested in others' dreams. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

示例: No, I don't share my dreams because they feel very personal to me. However, I am interested in other people's dreams because they can reveal their fears or hopes, which helps me understand them better.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organize supporting points and provide a concrete example or reason. Keep it to 3 sentences maximum.

示例: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect a person's thoughts, emotions and ambitions. For instance, dreaming about taking an exam might show anxiety about performance. Therefore, dreams can offer useful insights into our inner life.

建议: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear affirmative sentence, then give a specific, grammatically correct example and a brief plan or reason. Use linking words to connect idea and keep it within 3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. For example, I have always wanted to study at the University of Hong Kong because it is a top university and would allow me to deepen my knowledge. To achieve this, I plan to improve my grades and prepare thoroughly for the application.

× I usually forget the the dreams that I've made during my sleep.

✓ I usually forget the dreams that I have had during my sleep.

The sentence has a duplicated 'the' and uses 'made' incorrectly for experiencing dreams. Use 'the dreams' once and 'have had' (present perfect) to indicate dreams experienced during sleep. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'the' and replace 'made' with 'have had'.

× Umm, I cannot remember what have happened in my dream because.

✓ Umm, I cannot remember what happened in my dream because...

When reporting a past event in a subordinate clause after 'remember', use simple past 'happened' rather than 'have happened'. Also the sentence ends abruptly; add an ellipsis or finish the clause. Suggestion: use 'what happened' and complete the thought.

× I just forget it and I don't have any clues about my dreams.

✓ I just forget them and I don't have any clues about my dreams.

'Dreams' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. This is a number agreement/quantifier issue. Suggestion: match pronouns to plural nouns.

× No, I won't share my dreams with others because I think dreaming is quite personal to me and and it's a personal experience.

✓ No, I won't share my dreams with others because I think dreaming is quite personal to me and it's a personal experience.

There is a duplicated 'and'. Remove the extra 'and'. The future 'won't' is acceptable for refusal. Suggestion: delete the repeated word and keep one 'and'.

× However, I'm quite interested in other stream because dreams may will reveal some some information or.

✓ However, I'm quite interested in other people's dreams because dreams may reveal some information.

Multiple issues: 'other stream' is incorrect — should be 'other people's dreams'; 'may will' is a conflicting modal combination; 'some some' duplicated; sentence ends abruptly. Use single modal 'may' or 'will' depending on meaning. Suggestion: write 'other people's dreams' and use 'may reveal' and remove duplicates.

× I think that dreams have special meanings because dreams may reflect someone's thoughts, someone's emotions and someone's life aspirations.

✓ I think that dreams have special meanings because they may reflect someone's thoughts, emotions, and life aspirations.

Repeating 'someone's' before each noun is redundant. Use 'they' to avoid repetition and list items with commas. Suggestion: use plural pronoun 'they' or repeated 'someone's' once.

× These these factors can all be reflected on dreams and dream may come true.

✓ These factors can all be reflected in dreams, and dreams may come true.

Duplicated 'These'; 'reflected on dreams' is awkward — use 'reflected in dreams'; 'dream' should be plural to match earlier 'dreams may come true'. Suggestion: remove duplication, use 'in' and match plural forms.

× For example, I have once dreamed that I will go into the Hong Kong University and Hu is one of the top universities that I want to study at and explore further about my knowledge so.

✓ For example, I once dreamed that I would get into the University of Hong Kong, which is one of the top universities where I want to study and expand my knowledge.

Mixes tenses and has incorrect institution name and awkward phrasing. Use 'once dreamed' (past) and shift future 'will' to conditional/past 'would' to match sequence of tenses. 'Hong Kong University and Hu' is incorrect; correct name is 'University of Hong Kong' and 'which' connects clauses. Replace 'explore further about my knowledge' with 'expand my knowledge'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for dreaming and adjust phrasing.