梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific examples. Minimize filler words (uh, um) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, sometimes) to make it coherent.

示例: Yes, I often remember my dreams. For example, I frequently dream that I am flying or falling from a mountain. Sometimes the dreams feel so vivid that I’m unsure whether I’m asleep or awake.

建议: Give a direct answer then support with one clear reason and a specific example. Correct minor word choices (dream, not stream) and reduce hesitations. Use a linking phrase like 'for example' to introduce the anecdote.

示例: I’m interested in both hearing others’ dreams and sharing my own. For example, I often tell my closest friend about dreams about my future because discussing them helps me reflect on my goals.

建议: Give a clear position (yes or no) and then explain briefly with a specific reason. Avoid vague phrases and repeated words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'if' to make your reasoning logical.

示例: Yes, I think some dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect my worries or desires. For instance, dreaming about exams usually shows I’m anxious about upcoming tests.

建议: Answer directly and organize into a short plan: state desire, describe specific goals, and mention steps you are taking. Reduce repetition and avoid religious expressions unless necessary. Use linking words like 'so' and 'because' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I want to make my goals come true. For example, I aim to become an engineer, so I am studying hard and taking extra courses to improve my skills. Because I have a clear plan, I believe I will succeed.

× I had, uh, quiet dreams whenever I go to sleep and, uh, I saw many dreams and I see many dreams like, uh, I'm flying or like I'm falling down from a mountain and that's all of it.

✓ I have quiet dreams whenever I go to sleep; I see many dreams, such as flying or falling down a mountain.

The speaker mixes past and present tenses (had, go, saw, see). Use present simple 'have' and 'see' to describe habitual experiences. Also streamline phrasing for clarity.

× And sometimes I also get all involved in my, some of my dreams and I can't understand what am I am I dreaming or I'm in reality.

✓ Sometimes I get very involved in some of my dreams and I can't tell whether I am dreaming or in reality.

The original uses awkward phrasing and incorrect word order for indirect question 'whether I am dreaming'. Use 'get involved' and 'can't tell whether' for correct structure and clarity.

× Actually, I'm, I would say I'm in both case I have, I have lots of, I have a lot of interest in hearing about other stream.

✓ Actually, I would say I'm in both cases: I have a lot of interest in hearing about other people's dreams.

Plurality and possessive pronoun missing: 'both case' should be 'both cases'; 'other stream' is incorrect word and needs 'other people's dreams' for possessive and correct noun. Also redundant 'I have' reduced.

× And also I also, I love to share my dreams with a, for instance, uh, last night I saw a dream about, uh, my future and I share with my closest friend.

✓ I also love to share my dreams; for instance, last night I had a dream about my future and I shared it with my closest friend.

Use past simple 'had' and 'shared' for a completed event. Remove unnecessary articles ('a' before 'for instance') and ensure verb tense consistency. Include object 'it' for clarity.

× Yeah, it depends on what kind of dream I am I've watched or I've, I've, I've saw.

✓ Yeah, it depends on what kind of dream I have seen.

Mix of auxiliary verbs and incorrect past form 'saw' used with 'have'. Use present perfect 'have seen' to indicate experiences up to now; remove redundant words.

× So I think, uh, it's a quite a little bit interesting and also and especially it has some special meaning.

✓ I think it's quite interesting and may have some special meaning.

Reduce redundancy ('a quite a little bit' incorrect). Use 'quite interesting' and modal 'may' for possibility; avoid double modifiers 'also and especially'.

× So it uh, it depends on how, how much I'm watching and what kind of things I'm watching.

✓ So it depends on how much attention I pay to them and what kinds of things I dream about.

Use 'attention I pay' instead of 'how much I'm watching' which is awkward for dreaming; change 'what kind of things I'm watching' to 'what kinds of things I dream about' for clarity and correct collocation.

× Yeah, I have lots of dreams but not in from my sleep and I am dreaming and I'm aiming for my life and I would surely success in my life and I have some dreams that I have to achieve.

✓ Yes, I have many goals and ambitions in life; these are not dreams from sleep but things I am striving for, and I am determined to succeed.

Confusing tense and noun usage: 'lots of dreams' vs 'not in from my sleep' unclear. Use 'goals and ambitions' and present continuous 'am striving for' plus 'determined to succeed' for intent. 'I would surely success' is incorrect; use 'I will surely succeed'.

× I have some goals to achieve. So I'm working on it and I believe that inshallah I will try my best to achieve my dream and one day I will because I believe that I can and I will.

✓ I have some goals to achieve, so I'm working on them. I believe that, inshallah, I will try my best to achieve my dreams and one day I will because I believe I can and I will.

Maintain plural agreement ('goals... them'), use 'dreams' plural to match earlier, and keep modal verbs consistent: 'will try' and 'will' are fine. Add commas for clarity and keep pronouns consistent.