梦想— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 用词自然且信息充实，但句子较长且有语法与表达不够地道之处。建议简化句子结构，第一句直接回答问题，然后用一两个简短句子补充细节，使用更准确的短语（例如“mainland China”而非“Chinese mainland”，以及用“advise”替代“give suggestions”）。同时避免重复信息使答案更流畅。

示例: Yes. As a child I dreamed of becoming a lawyer, and I have fulfilled that dream. I now work as a lawyer in mainland China. I mainly handle government-related cases and advise government departments on legal matters.

建议: 回答直接但时态和词汇有小错误（如“shared” 应为一般现在或现在完成时根据语境；“advices”应为不可数名词“advice”；“determined to become”可改为“decided to become”更自然）。建议使用更自然的时态和准确的词汇，并用连词连接例子，控制长度在2–3句内。

示例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my parents because I value their advice. For instance, when I decided to become a lawyer, I asked them for advice on which schools to apply to.

建议: 观点清晰，但存在语法和表达问题（如“dream is significant way”应为“dreams are a significant way”或“dreaming is a significant means”；“how their relatives feeling”应为“how their relatives are feeling”）。建议先给出简洁的主题句，然后用一句话举例说明文化背景并改正语法错误，使用恰当的复数或动名词形式。

示例: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings. In traditional Chinese culture, dreams are often seen as a way to communicate with deceased relatives, and people may interpret dreams to understand their relatives' feelings.

建议: 回答含糊且句子不够连贯，存在语法问题（例如“depends on what kind of dreams are”应为“depends on what kind of dream it is”或“depends on the kind of dream”）。建议先直接回答（Yes/No/It depends），然后用一到两句清楚解释原因，避免冗长并使用恰当的连接词如“for example”。

示例: It depends on the dream. For example, if the dream is about a meaningful relationship with someone I care about, I would try to make it come true; but I might not pursue dreams that are unrealistic or harmful.

× Of course, when I was a child I dreamed of becoming a lawyer, and now I've achieved it already.

✓ Of course, when I was a child I dreamed of becoming a lawyer, and now I've already achieved it.

句中時態主要正確，但“already”放在完成時前或句末都可，本句更自然的語序是“I've already achieved it”。建議將“already”放在助動詞與過去分詞之間，以符合英語慣用語序。

× I'm a lawyer in Chinese mainland and my duty is to handle governmental affairs, for example, give suggestions to governmental departments.

✓ I'm a lawyer in mainland China and my duty is to handle governmental affairs, for example, to give suggestions to government departments.

“Chinese mainland”用法不自然，正確為“mainland China”。此外，動詞不定式在列舉中應一致，原句中“give suggestions”前缺不定式標記，改為“to give suggestions”。“governmental departments”可簡化為“government departments”。建議學習地名固定搭配及不定式在並列動作中的一致用法。

× Yes, I shared my dreams with my parents because I wanted to get some suggestions from them to achieve my dreams.

✓ Yes, I shared my dreams with my parents because I wanted to get some suggestions from them to achieve my dreams.

此句時態一致，語法正確。無需修改。說明: 使用過去時表達兒時分享夢想是恰當的。

× For example, when I determined to become a lawyer, I asked my parents for advices on school selection.

✓ For example, when I decided to become a lawyer, I asked my parents for advice on school selection.

英語中“advice”是不可數名詞，不能用複數形式“advices”。此外，動詞“determined”在此語境下用“decided”更自然。建議記住不可數名詞（advice, information等）不加複數-s。

× Well, I do think so. In traditional Chinese culture, dream is significant way for people to communicate with their dead relatives.

✓ Well, I do think so. In traditional Chinese culture, dreams are a significant way for people to communicate with their dead relatives.

此處有數量一致與冠詞問題：可數名詞“dream”應使用複數“dreams”或加不定冠詞和單數形式“a dream”。此外語序需要“a significant way”。因此改為“dreams are a significant way”更自然。建議注意可數/不可數與冠詞搭配。

× People believe that they can know how their relatives feeling in their dreams.

✓ People believe that they can know how their relatives are feeling in their dreams.

缺少be動詞導致分詞短語不完整，正確應為“are feeling”。此外“know how ... are feeling”為正確表達方式。建議在表示狀態時使用正確的動詞形式（主語 + be + 現在分詞）。

× Well, I think it depends on what kind of dreams are.

✓ Well, I think it depends on what kind of dreams they are.

倒裝語序錯誤。英語中應為“what kind of dreams they are”而不是“what kind of dreams are”。缺少代詞“they”。建議注意主語代詞在從句中的位置。

× For example, sometimes a dream of having romantic relationships with someone I love at that time and in this condition I want to make my dreams come true.

✓ For example, sometimes a dream of having a romantic relationship with someone I loved at that time makes me want to make my dream come true.

原句中有多處問題：1) “romantic relationships”應為單數“a romantic relationship”以匹配“a dream”；2) 時態與時間短語需一致，故用過去式“loved”描述當時的感受；3) 主句結構冗長且語序混亂，改為“makes me want to make my dream come true”更清晰；4) 將“dreams”統一為單數“my dream”。建議簡化句子結構，保持數與時態一致。