硬币— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答较自然且直接，但存在重复与表达不够准确的问题。例如“researching for notes”用词错误，句子有些冗长。建议：在主题句后用一到两个简洁的支持句，避免重复，并用恰当短语替换错误用法。练习将例子缩短为一句，并用连接词自然衔接。

示例: Yes, I still use coins regularly for small purchases. For example, I often use coins in vending machines and to pay bus fares, because they’re quicker and more convenient than taking out notes.

建议: 观点明确但表达有重复（“when when”）且绝对化词如“always”显得片面。建议：给出平衡的理由并用连接词组织，比如先承认优点再说明局限；避免绝对化表述，提供具体对比。

示例: Generally, I find coins inconvenient for large payments. Although they’re fine for small items, when you buy something expensive you usually need a card or notes, so coins aren’t very practical in those situations.

建议: 回答直接，但语法与时态有小错误（例如“one of the reason”应为“one of the reasons”，以及时态不一致）。内容可更具体：说明收集多少、如何保存或最喜欢的硬币。建议用两句分别说明事实与原因，并修正语法。

示例: Yes, I collected coins as a child. I enjoyed them because they came in different colours and materials, and I kept them in a small album that I liked to look through.

建议: 回答含义清晰但存在语法与用词问题（如“pay with coins as a vending machine”不通顺，“on Thursday I may”显得不相关）。建议：用一句主题句说明习惯，再用一句具体例子说明场景，避免无关的时间细节和重复。

示例: Yes, I usually carry some coins for small purchases. For instance, I often use coins in vending machines or to buy snacks when I’m out running errands.

× For example, I'm thirsty, I sometimes pay with coins as in vending machines on the street, and I also keep some change for bus fares or small snacks because it's more convenient than researching for notes.

✓ For example, if I'm thirsty, I sometimes pay with coins at vending machines on the street, and I also keep some change for bus fares or small snacks because it's more convenient than searching for notes.

句中“I'm thirsty”用在例子從句中應該用條件連詞“if”來引出假設情況；“as in vending machines”用法不自然，且動詞短語位置錯誤，應改為“pay with coins at vending machines”；“researching for notes”語義和搭配不正確，應用“searching for notes”。以上修改屬於動詞和動名詞/ -ing 形式及動詞搭配問題，需注意使用正確的動詞短語與連詞。

× No, I don't think it's convenient for us to use coins. Coins are for small purchases, but for example when when you need to buy something expensive, you have to use a credit card and at that time coins are always useless.

✓ No, I don't think it's convenient for us to use coins. Coins are for small purchases, but, for example, when you need to buy something expensive, you have to use a credit card, and at that time coins are usually useless.

句中有重複“when when”，需刪除一處；“at that time coins are always useless”中用“Allways”語氣過強且不夠準確，改為“usually”更合適。這裡主要是介詞/連詞的使用和詞語搭配問題（重複詞與語氣詞替換）。

× Yes, when I was a child, it was a hobby for me to collect coins. Coins had different colours and made of different materials, so it was one of the reason why I collect coins.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, collecting coins was a hobby of mine. Coins had different colours and were made of different materials, so that was one of the reasons why I collected coins.

原句時態和被動結構使用不當："made of different materials" 應用被動過去式“were made”；“one of the reason”應為複數“reasons”；前後時態應一致，描述過去習慣和原因時應用過去式“collected”。因此屬於過去時和過去被動形式的錯誤。

× Yes, I often carry coins when I go out for some small purchases. For example, on Thursday I may pay with coins as a vending machine on the street. Sometimes coins are really useful for everyday small purchasing.

✓ Yes, I often carry coins when I go out for small purchases. For example, on the street I may pay with coins at a vending machine. Sometimes coins are really useful for small everyday purchases.

原句中“go out for some small purchases”中“for”可省略或改為“for small purchases”；“as a vending machine”用法錯誤，應為介詞短語“at a vending machine”；“everyday small purchasing”搭配不自然，應改為“small everyday purchases”。主要是介詞短搭配與名詞搭配用法錯誤，需調整詞序和介詞。